NIGERIAN FLOODING 2012!
By: Christian Okafor T. (23-10-12)
In the beginning, was so dark
Roaming three-sixty on no mark
A form with no Genesis form
Waving virginly with no storm.

But someday, it towered the ark
Wearing no mercy for a slack
A grace to the earth swiftly come
Gulping all fully as awesome.

To come and be gone, crept aback
Handsing up in its victory mark
A ruthless attack with no form
Filling mother earth for her norms.

All these I now recall aback
Pondering this my nation’s attack
Land formerly atop the form
Turning a mass below the form.

The formless form blew us as bad
Numbing us with its sudden wag
As grasses spring up in the morn
Wowing us in their being born.

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Please, dear esteemed members do enjy the poem above and as well post your very welcomed comments and/or criticisms. thanks!

moderator, plz, send this topicc to the general page - cuz it's a hot topic for the moment in our country today. Nothing could be more itting than such a topic now our dear nation is beseiged by such a crisis. our nairaland people need to see and enjoy such a well-thought-out poem for the flooding. Thanks!

Learn to be creative...don't copy and past someone else's poem.

If you must copy, do it logically and constructively.

As for the poem...its nice but if the truth be told, it looks very childish and irritating considering the purpose it was created for.

A poem on flooding in the country where lives and properties were lost, should be emotional...able to bring tears on the eyes of the readers.

This poem looks more like a rap music lyrics...no iota of mourning in the lines.

My advise...try re-editing the lines, and see what you can come up with. I'm sure you've got the talent in you...

Good luck.

While i appreciate u for ur criticism of d poem, hw kud u say that d poem was plagiarised? Hw kud u be that too naive and presumptuous?! Oh, u perhaps, think i couldn't rily come up wit such? Oh, what a CHILDISH, UNFEELING, comment that ws from u! I challenge u to ransack d net n all d shelves n if u see any synonym of d poem anywhere, then report me to d moderator.

sirxris: While i appreciate u for ur criticism of d poem, hw kud u say that d poem was plagiarised? Hw kud u be that too naive and presumptuous?! Oh, u perhaps, think i couldn't rily come up wit such? Oh, what a CHILDISH, UNFEELING, comment that ws from u! I challenge u to ransack d net n all d shelves n if u see any synonym of d poem anywhere, then report me to d moderator.

Its nice...you don't have to take it so personal...criticism makes you work harder

Its a nice poem...but try working on your lines.

@ crazyman, tnx a lot now. I'll show it to a few more people n then take a decision. Tanx again 4 ur criticism abt d lack of enough emotivity displayed in d poem.

You followed simply rules of poetry....but the poem is too subtle....the lines, rhymes, rhythm were just too complex, rough; and it discourages readers from wanting to read more. But there is talent....you have talent! My advise is make your poems simple, and when read aloud it should sound like you are speaking to someone. Yours' had a good plot that arouses curiosity, but simplicity was lacking.

Finally stop imitating the Americans' poets. Because your poem is just like Alan Ginsberg's poems, but with rhymes, but I must admit that you have talent....keep practicing....practice! Don't be discouraged!!!!!

Tanx a lot, mufex, for your kind and candid words of encouragement and advice. Actually, the poem's diction was just as a result of the inspirations about the poem as at the time I wrote it. So, I had less option than just pen it down that same way.