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The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 2:51pm On Feb 22, 2013
PROLOGUE

'Good moooooorning sir,' all the students in SSS2A chorused in greeting as our bald, freckle-faced, plump-cheeked, double-chinned, pot-bellied, eagle-eyed, Physics teacher, Mr. Theodore Ogwuzi, waltzed into our classroom.

.....oooh! This Akpari man again! Why do we always have Physics everyday sef?.....

Mr Ogwuzi stood for several moments in the middle of the classroom, gently stroking his luxuriant beard as he surveyed the class with the airs of a magistrate surveying his court.

'Good morning. Have your seats,' he instructed, after a lengthy period of silence, in a rather tiny voice that belied his tough exterior.

I sat down and quickly stole a glance at the big clock hanging on the wall of our class.

.....wtf! Is it my imagination or do the time really crawl during Physics periods?.....

The fact is I hated Physics, ever since I came into exposure with it, I'd never really been comfortable with it. Although concepts in physics were natural phenomena which constitute part of my everyday life experience, but nothing usually seem natural about them when I had to tackle them in the classroom, with their definition, formulae e.t.c to be memorized.....

'Today, we are going to continue on our last week topic, which is what?' asked Mr. Ogwuzi.

'Radioactivity!' every student in the class shouted in reply. Well, maybe not every one, because i had already forgotten all about the last topic.

To be continued......

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Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by LarrySun(m): 3:55pm On Feb 22, 2013
Weldone. However, You should use the Capital 'I' rather than 'i'.

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Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 6:07pm On Feb 22, 2013
Larry-Sun:
Weldone. However, You should use the Capital 'I' rather than 'i'.
Thanks bro. I'll modify asap.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 6:58pm On Feb 22, 2013
PROLOGUE (Contd.)
'That's right,' Mr. Ogwuzi intoned, while nodding his head repeatedly to show that he liked the class' responsiveness.

'Like i told you last week,' he continued 'Radioactivity is the spontaneous disintegration of the nuclei of certain heavy radioactive elements into more stable nuclei while emitting certain radiations.'

Somewhere along the way, he lost me. Which was the signal for me to do something to keep myself distracted. I rummaged through my bag and after some time, I found something just suitable for the occasion; Redmosquito's AFRICAN NERD. I placed the novel discreetly on my lap, below the desk-line, where I was sure Mr. Ogwuzi or any of my Aproko classmates won't be able to espy it.

After reading some pages of the book, I became so engrossed in the piece that I soon lost consciousness of my immediate environment.

Until I heard loud peals of laughter from my classmates, I looked up to see what was amiss and Lo, there was Mr. Ogwuzi standing silently beside my desk, with his arms crossed and a dark scowl on his face.

.....Chei! I'm done for.....

To be continued...
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by LarrySun(m): 8:59pm On Feb 22, 2013
Why are your updates so short? And, African Nerd...Oh! I like how your fused that work into your piece.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 10:34pm On Feb 22, 2013
Larry-Sun:
Why are your updates so short? And, African Nerd...Oh! I like how your fused that work into your piece.
It's because i'm on mobile and the thing actually looked long when i was typing it. I will improve sha.
Thanks 4 being there.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by LarrySun(m): 10:38pm On Feb 22, 2013
VanTee20:
It's because i'm on mobile and the thing actually looked long when i was typing it. I will improve sha.
Thanks 4 being there.
You're welcome. Keep them coming, bro.

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Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by Nobody: 12:27am On Feb 23, 2013
Try and make ur posts voluminous, they ase short. And pls continue.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 5:04pm On Feb 23, 2013
Damex333: Try and make ur posts voluminous, they ase short. And pls continue.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 5:06pm On Feb 23, 2013
Damex333: Try and make ur posts voluminous, they ase short. And pls continue.
I'll improve on the length of my posts. Thanks for the advice, and I'm working on an lengthy update.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 5:08pm On Feb 23, 2013
DOUBLE POST.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 5:08pm On Feb 23, 2013
Larry-Sun:

You're welcome. Keep them coming, bro.
I sure will.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 11:06pm On Feb 23, 2013
PROLOGUE (III).

'What on earth do you think you are doing?' Mr. Ogwuzi asked angrily, with his beard quivering and the corners of his mouth twitching.

'Errm....no....nothing,' I stammered in reply.

In my confused state, I stood up, maybe too abruptly, and the copy of African Nerd I was reading fell off my lap to the floor.

'I'm sorry, sir,' I mumbled, when I realised that my cover was blown.

With a slight shake of his head, Mr. Ogwuzi bent down and picked up the novel. He looked at the front page and a smile lit his face.

..... Thank God it's not Mazi's NYSC o.....

'I have read this book before,' Mr. Ogwuzi told me 'The author is errm... What's his name?'.

'Redmosquito, sir,' I reminded him.

'Ah! Yes, it's him. That boy who thinks he is funny,' Mr. Ogwuzi said.

'He is really funny sir,' I countered ' And he's a good writer too'.

'Well maybe he is' he paused a little 'but you still haven't told me why you were busy reading a novel while the lesson was going on,' as he said that the smile on his face disappeared while that ol' menacing look of his returned.

At that point I decided, rather irrationally, that it was the right time to bare my mind to our master about my dislike, if that is not too soft a word, for physics.

'I couldn't help it sir,' I finally declared 'Physics is a subject i find very boring, in fact I detest attending it's class.'

The 'Ohs' and 'Ahs' that greeted my speech from my classmates and the way Mr. Ogwuzi's mouth fell wide open like a cave led me to realise just how stupid I was with my choice of words.

It took the astonished Mr. Ogwuzi some time before he realised that he had not closed his open mouth, and when he finally regained his composure, he did something I did not quite expect.

His left hand shot out, fast as the lightning from Sango and hit me on my cheek, the slap was so hard that I lost my balance and I staggered backwards. I tried to reach out to a pillar for support but I only succeeded in hitting my head against the hard wall.

That's it. I fell to the ground with a thud. The pain was so acute that I closed my eyes briefly, and when I opened it, what did I see? Everything had changed. Mr. Ogwuzi had suddenly multiplied into numbers I couldn't count, the ceiling of the class looked so close, I felt like I was going down a cavern.

'Stand up jorh!' Mr. Ogwuzi roared, But I couldn't even if I wanted to. A cold sensation started to spread all over my body, then everything that I had been seeing dimly before turned to BLACK.

To be continued...
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by LarrySun(m): 11:28pm On Feb 23, 2013
You still haven't mastered the use of 'I'.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 11:42pm On Feb 23, 2013
Larry-Sun:
You still haven't mastered the use of 'I'.
There. I think i've corrected the ones my weary eyes could spot. Thanks smiley
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by Valto(m): 11:54pm On Feb 23, 2013
nice job! keep it up
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by Nobody: 12:00am On Feb 24, 2013
There re still one or two I that u should correct, but nice work van
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 12:12am On Feb 24, 2013
Valto: nice job! keep it up
Thanks bro
Damex333: There re still one or two I that u should correct, but nice work van
i know, i know. I'll keep on improving. Thank you
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 10:04pm On Feb 24, 2013
I couldn't update today because of the epilectic power supply, the story will be continued tomorrow.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 2:07am On Feb 26, 2013
EPISODE 1
.....Owww, my head oooo.....


That was the first thing that crossed my mind as I regained consciousness. With my eyes still closed, I gently felt the back of my head with my hands. The pain had increased from acute to excruciating. A grunt of pain escaped my lips.

I sat up and opened my red, swollen eyes, for the first time since I woke up. It was then that I noticed the change in environment.

.....Good heavens! What am I doing here?.....

I blinked rapidly in surprise, what am I doing in this thick forest? How did I get here? Thousands of questions flooded my mind as to my current position, but I had no answer to any of them.

I tried hard to remember the circumstances that led to my unconsciousness, but it seemed the part of my brain that is supposed to serve as my remembrancer had been removed because I couldn't remember a damned thing.

I looked around again, I was still trying to come to terms with environment I found my self. The forest I was in was full of tall, huge trees that will surely elicit smiles from lumbers. The whistling, chirping, cackling and thousands of other sounds made by the creatures in it made my blood curdle in fear.

.....Am I dreaming?.....

I rubbed my eyes hard, in a bid to wake up from my supposed dream, but no, nothing happened. I pinched myself very hard, nothing still. Yeh! It's not a dream o, it must be something else.

.....Am I dead?....

A feeling of apprehension surged through me as soon that thought flashed through my mind. Dead ke? How can I die just like that? No! God forbid.

I examined myself carefully, nothing was out of odds about me, my white school shirt and black trousers were still on and not the white robes ghosts were known to wear.

I quickly dispelled that thought about death from my mind. Even if I'm dead, shouldn't I be in either heaven or hell as the good books have led us to believe? The picture of this forest do not in any way fit my own interpretation of heaven or hell.

.....Hmmm! Maybe this is my last chance to beg for God's forgiveness.....

I laughed inwardly at myself as I did a mental listing of my inequities, the ones I remember of course. Where do I start from? Is it those erotiq chats i do on 2go or those pornographiq materials i always read or the day i peeped at my hot neighbour while she was bathing or.....

A loud, gut-wrenching, blood-curdling scream broke into my reverie and dragged me back to reality.

'Heeeeeeelp!!!'

I froze with fear, then all of a sudden, a very strong force, far more greater than the inertia in me, propelled me forward.

I tried hard to resist but it was no use, the force was too strong and in the very next moment, I found myself running, albeit against my own will, towards the direction where the shout for help came from.

To be continued.....
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by LarrySun(m): 4:40pm On Feb 26, 2013
Remembrancer? I don't think there is such word. The post is rife with errors, Van. Please modify. Nice suspense though.

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Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 7:40pm On Feb 26, 2013
Larry-Sun:
Remembrancer? I don't think there is such word. The post is rife with errors, Van. Please modify. Nice suspense though.
Remembrancer exists in the dictionary, u can look it up to confirm. And about the errors, i'll go back and check if I can find them. Thanks, it's a great honour to have you on my thread.

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Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 4:36pm On Feb 28, 2013
EPISODE 2

I continued to run, although i did not know where i was running to and I was powerless to stop myself from crashing into trees, shrubs, stumps and all. I continued running until I got to a T-Junction, there the force acting on me slackened and i was able to stop myself and regain my breath.

..... Now, what do i call that?.....

I was still brooding over what had happened when i heard another scream, this time it was close by. I cocked my head towards the direction of the sound and i started to trace it. Soon enough, i was rewarded with the sight of some people not far off from where i was.

I moved a bit closer to where they were, before i hid behind a tall, gigantic tree to watch the proceedings.

They were five in all. Two females, girls by their looks, were tied to a stake, with their long robes soiled and badly torn. One of the girls had a homely, oval face, long, red hair, a sharp pointed nose and a nice petulant mouth. I could not make out the features of the other girl's face because her head was thrown backwards, seems she's unconscious.

The men had tough and fear inspiring visage, they were all armed with broadswords and long whips. By just looking at them, shivers ran down my spine. One of them was short and so stocky that I'm sure he'd have problems walking through a door without turning to his sides. The second man was abominably tall and the third? whew! He was the worst of all, his badly scarred face was scary enough.

'If thou screamest again, i wilt have thy tongue cut off,' Scarface said threatingly to the red haired girl, while brandishing his long, broad sword menacingly.

..... Screamest ke? Am i watching a Shakespeare play?.....

The redhead spat out in disgust and replied 'Ye are all shadowless fools, i fear thee not.'

The men, much taken aback by the redhead's boldness, looked at each other in surprise. Then Scarface raised his long whip high and lashed her right across the face.

'Stop it!!!' I screamed out in horror.

In my anger, I jumped out of my hiding place and charged towards the militants. When they noticed me, they looked at me as one would a strange animal, well i don't blame them, they've probably never seen a dark person before.

'Who art thou that deemest it fit to disturb us?' queried Scarface.

'Leave them alone,' I commanded, putting on my most haughty air. I quickly dipped my hands into the pockets of my trousers to check if the firecrackers I had bought before going to school were still there. Good! They are there, these idiots don't know who they are up against.

'By God, it's he!' Shortman exclaimed.

'What is he?' Scarface asked, his voice dripping with disgust.

Shortman said something I couldn't catch and Tallman nodded in agreement, Scarface's eyes widened in fear.

'Nay, nay, it can't be,' he said, vigorously shaking his head.

'It is he,' Tallman countered 'Can't ye seest the serpent around his neck.'

I tried my best not to laugh. Chei! These people were more gullible than I thought, they thought I'm some powerful sorcerer, they thought my tie was a snake.

OK! Time for some action, i charged forward, in a bid to scare and i was not disappointed, Shortman and Tallman promptly took to their heels, while Scarface stood rooted to the spot, frozen with fear.

'I prithee dark sir, harm not thy humble servant,' he begged.

'Shut up!' I ordered 'Now, if you don't want me to kill you, you must go after your companions and kill them both.'

'I will, thank ye,' he said, before running off as if the hounds of hell were right after him.

..... Hmmm! Dis my dream don turn to film o, when I go wake up na?.....

To be continued.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 4:51pm On Feb 28, 2013
Abeg peepz, make una comment o, na God i take beg u. I'm somewhat disheartened by these lack of comments. Biko, please, ejòó.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by Nobody: 10:54am On Mar 02, 2013
Now dont tell me you av just been teleported to d previous years lyk d 1st century or 10th century pls continue.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by LarrySun(m): 8:52am On Mar 03, 2013
Impressively written. I like the use of the Shakespearean language, so romantic. Kudos
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 6:03pm On Mar 16, 2013
Damex333: Now dont tell me you av just been teleported to d previous years lyk d 1st century or 10th century
Na so i see am o my bro.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by VanTee20(m): 6:04pm On Mar 16, 2013
Larry-Sun:
Impressively written. I like the use of the Shakespearean language, so romantic. Kudos
Thanks. embarassed. Did you get my PM?
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by LarrySun(m): 10:39am On Mar 17, 2013
VanTee20:
Thanks. embarassed. Did you get my PM?
Yeah, I did. Replied.
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by Ishilove: 11:47am On Mar 17, 2013
I just stumbled on this thread (one of the benefits of following Larry grin ).

Okay, where do I start? So far so good, you were able to hold my attention from the very beginning. Very few stories on NL have been able to do so grin.

I however have an issue with the description you gave of the physics teacher. I think teachers have regulation length beards, so the heavy beard on the teacher's chin are a bit out of place with what obtains in schools. I'm a teacher, so I should know smiley

'Broke into my reverie of thoughts'- scratch the 'of thoughts', reverie suffices.

You have it in you, keep it coming and try as much as possible to maintain momentum. smiley

I am so following your black asss!!! grin cheesy

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Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by LarrySun(m): 1:41pm On Mar 17, 2013
Ishilove: I just stumbled on this thread (one of the benefits of following Larry grin ).
We follow each other, sis grin
Re: The Saviour I : The Adventures of Athanasius. by Ishilove: 5:05pm On Mar 18, 2013
Come Vantee, you no go update?

Shey una don see sey writing no easy? Abeg update quick before I vex jawe angry

grin

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