TITLE: Vengeance
LOGLINE: Revenge; does it really worth it?

This is a short film am planing on shooting. Please read and criticise. Thanks

the script is just ok but needs a lot more work bro,there are syntax and grammatical errors.
you need to arrange them properly and also adjust the dialogue to be much more realistic, lastly the whole plot is too light and simplistic,its a very common plot which many movies have been created on.you need to look for a more compelling subject in the average urbane community for instance maybe these guys are involved in fraud and swindle the wrong person then you could tie it in the the guys with the gun.

what are the boy's background,are they born and bred in the uk or moved to the uk like the average naija these little attention to details will reflect heavily on the script.
writing a script is hard work that is if you want to do it properly so you are best off writing a compelling story good luck

Thanks.. am going to re-write some things