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Peter's Diary by Cityofdavid(m): 5:26pm On Aug 16, 2013 |
Full excerpts of the Chapter One of My debut Novel. Please leave a sincere feedback, bad or good. PETER'S DIARY Chapter One |
Re: Peter's Diary by Nobody: 7:58am On Sep 04, 2013 |
Splendid! Please post the rest here 1 Like |
Re: Peter's Diary by Superclem(m): 9:15am On Sep 04, 2013 |
Good story. From a readers perspective, quite captivating. However, I noticed some loopholes in your grammar at the beginning. Your narration is engaging enough, but you could work on it. And your similes, some watered down your story. Try to be more graphically and avoid the similes. Readers would want to use their minds' eye not their imagination. |
Re: Peter's Diary by Nobody: 11:35am On Sep 04, 2013 |
Superclem: Good story. From a readers perspective, quite captivating. However, I noticed some loopholes in your grammar at the beginning. Your narration is engaging enough, but you could work on it. And your similes, some watered down your story. Try to be more graphically and avoid the similes. Readers would want to use their minds' eye not their imagination.Graphical* |
Re: Peter's Diary by Okonjoiweala(f): 11:53pm On Sep 05, 2013 |
Nice storyline - i admire your use of similes too, but i must point out that the best way to use simile is to let it flow naturally and graphically with the storyline. That way, readers can impulsively understand the technique of description, Rather than pause to imagine. You're doing real great o.k? Thumbs up |
Re: Peter's Diary by Cityofdavid(m): 4:18am On Sep 07, 2013 |
Superclem: Good story. From a readers perspective, quite captivating. However, I noticed some loopholes in your grammar at the beginning. Your narration is engaging enough, but you could work on it. And your similes, some watered down your story. Try to be more graphically and avoid the similes. Readers would want to use their minds' eye not their imagination. Thank you very much for these technical advices, I'll take most of them into consideration. As for the grammatical loopholes you noticed, Perhaps that's one of the natural mistake which a writer who has no degree or diploma in english language is bound to make. But, I'll also work on that. Thanks. |
Re: Peter's Diary by Cityofdavid(m): 4:27am On Sep 07, 2013 |
Okonjo iweala: Nice storyline - i admire your use of similes too, but i must point out that the best way to use simile is to let it flow naturally and graphically with the storyline. That way, readers can impulsively understand the technique of description, Rather than pause to imagine. I sincerely appreciate your appraisal. I will revisit the similes again. Thank you very much. |
Re: Peter's Diary by Superclem(m): 7:08am On Sep 11, 2013 |
Dr. Asiko:my bad, thanx for the correction |
Re: Peter's Diary by Superclem(m): 7:10am On Sep 11, 2013 |
Cityofdavid: I understand as I'm also in the same shoes. There's only one way around it, read and read wide. 1 Like |
Re: Peter's Diary by Superclem(m): 7:12am On Sep 11, 2013 |
Okonjo iweala: Nice storyline - i admire your use of similes too, but i must point out that the best way to use simile is to let it flow naturally and graphically with the storyline. That way, readers can impulsively understand the technique of description, Rather than pause to imagine. Retweeting her, let the similes flow naturally, yours seemed forced. 1 Like |
Re: Peter's Diary by Nobody: 4:17pm On Sep 12, 2013 |
Superclem:You're another very wonderful writer...I admire your works 1 Like |
Re: Peter's Diary by Superclem(m): 10:04pm On Sep 15, 2013 |
Dr. Asiko: superblushing |
Re: Peter's Diary by Cityofdavid(m): 9:08pm On Sep 22, 2013 |
peter |
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