rozzay: I wish u were with me rite dis minute, cuddlin and holdin me as I sleep, I wish u were in my mind @ dis moment, ud have seen how ur image flow in torrents, I wish I can have u all to myself for eternity, but alas, its all a wishful thinkin in insanity, I wish I wish I wish, if wishes were horses beggars would ride but I don't want to wish for 2 much, since all my wishes will neva come true. ill just have to make one last wish which would have saved me from makin all dis wishes, and it simply is: a wish dat I'd neva met u, mayb it'll have saved me d truama of been a beggar.

rattlesnake: thank u for this poem.....I wanna be Ur e-lover

ROZZAYY:
Joseph1

laykorn:

Sent. What happened to your former account?
Ayamlaykorn

ROZZAYY:

I deactivated. I can write poems too. Lolz, have like 3 tho I can't locate dem, just saw dis one. Is it nice?

laykorn:

Yeah its so awesome. So natural. Just arrange it in stanzas and you have a great poem!
Ayamlaykorn

ROZZAYY:

Blushing. Thank u dear. Tho am not an art student so I don't know anyfin abt stanzas.

laykorn:

Oh. I'll arrange this in stanzas for you. Tomorrow.
Then you'll know how to do it.
Ayamlaykorn

ROZZAYY:

Ok great. Am grateful.

laykorn:

You've seen the mail?
Ayamlaykorn

ROZZAYY:

I've seen it on nland but it hasn't gotten to me on my device, happens like dat. Can't wait to see it. *smiles*

I wish u were with me right here this minute. Cuddling and holding me as I sleep.

I wish you were in my mind at this moment. You'd have seen how your image flows in torrents.

I wish I can have you all to myself for eternity.
But alas, its all a wishful thinking in insanity.

I wish I wish I wish.
If wishes were horses beggars would ride.
But I don't want to wish for too much.
Since all my wishes will never come true.

If only I could
I'll just have to make one last wish which would have saved me from making all these wishes.
And it simply is: a wish dat I had never met you. Maybe it would have saved me the trauma of being a beggar.

ROZZAYY:

Awwwwww it looks lovely now. Thank u sir laykorn. Lord hugo, did u check his moniker. Hmmmmmmm I rily miss him.
Veeey!

ROZZAYY:

Awwwwww it looks lovely now. Thank u sir laykorn. Lord hugo, did u check his moniker. Hmmmmmmm I rily miss him.
Veeey!

laykorn:

Hmm. I just checked. Saw one of the poems. Lol
He's still active anyway.
Ayamlaykorn

ROZZAYY:
The Light- a ballard(I think) Laykorn!!

Everyday in heaven a light shines so bright dat d angels use it in praises 2 d creator, and d light helps so wel dat not even a corner is dark. Then one day God decides 2 find out from which part f his galaxy d bright light emanates from; lo and behold as he looked into his golden globe he caught sight f somethn extremely beautiful , he saw in d not 2 distant planet cald earth a woman whom he created from a certain man's ribs and they were stil in existence both born in d 80s and 70s respectively somwhere in d beautiful continent f africa precisely in a nation cald Nigeria, in d waterlogged city f lagos, in d serene town f ajah lived this beautiful couple whose LOVE sparked so bright dat it shone 2 heaven. The Creator smiled as he covered his globe raining blessins on them.

Its an old poem I wrote some tyme ago

lovely

ROZZAYY:
The Light- a ballard(I think) Laykorn!!

Everyday in heaven a light shines so bright dat d angels use it in praises 2 d creator, and d light helps so wel dat not even a corner is dark. Then one day God decides 2 find out from which part f his galaxy d bright light emanates from; lo and behold as he looked into his golden globe he caught sight f somethn extremely beautiful , he saw in d not 2 distant planet cald earth a woman whom he created from a certain man's ribs and they were stil in existence both born in d 80s and 70s respectively somwhere in d beautiful continent f africa precisely in a nation cald Nigeria, in d waterlogged city f lagos, in d serene town f ajah lived this beautiful couple whose LOVE sparked so bright dat it shone 2 heaven. The Creator smiled as he covered his globe raining blessins on them.

Its an old poem I wrote some tyme ago

lilmaxfidel:




^lovely

laykorn:

Wow! The theme is so awesome!
But to make it a ballad, we need to re-arrange it.

First is that a ballad usually comes in a 3 line stanza with a rhyme pattern of AAB

The 3rd line of every stanza is usually the same throughout the same, providing some kind of chorus for the poem.

This might look hard, but its so so easy.

But if you don't want to go through all the stress of a ballad, this is good enough for free verse!

We just need to put into stanzas. You can do that can't you Lol
Trying to decide your stanza pattern is one of the most interesting things in a poem.
You can make it 4 lines per stanza, 5 lines, 3 lines.
Even 2 lines. Try many ways and check which one looks most beautiful and organised to you. That's it.

I can help change this into a ballad using this story on the weekend if you think it'll be too hard for you to do. I'll give some tips on how to make it easier too.

Ayamlaykorn

ROZZAYY:

Hmmmmm I don't just know how to do the verse thing. I just write as it comes. Pls help me sir.

laykorn:

Hehehe. You've just written free verse!
But you remember the poem you wrote for lordhugo?
It was in free verse with the perfect stanza organisation.
Just organise this like you did that too.
That's all.





ROZZAYY, I have something to ask











ROZZAYY, on my birthday, will you write me a poem
Ayamlaykorn

laykorn:

Hehehe. You've just written free verse!
But you remember the poem you wrote for lordhugo?
It was in free verse with the perfect stanza organisation.
Just organise this like you did that too.
That's all.
Ayamlaykorn

Laykorn has refused to review my poems