no probs.

NIce story but whats up with the nollywood home video mentality, stopping when it gets interesting. nice effort, Hook up with me, i'm an upcoming writer too and i can hook you up with some good website where u can improve your skills with. thumbs up

no i dont care if u criticize my story really i dont just

dont insult me cuz it gon' be one

once again u guys im not a writer ohhh i dont wrtie that good , i just come up with story lines, get it?

but i write stuff like these for fun

but thanks to the ppl who said nice things lol afterall nice things are nice to hear

thnks diddy for having my back

KC,

girl dts a good story u got there, don't listen to none of these peeps trynna put u down, aii. Its a good start mami keep it up

thnks t

u welcome hun

i got your back anytime girl.

K2Dac, I liked it, we're awaiting more.

Your writing style is reminiscent of Authors like Eric Jerome Dickey, Sister Soulja, Mary.B.Morrisson.

Many people on the forum, probably aren't familiar with their work and are not used to the style of writting or the use of language, so bear with them.

Girl go on, keep writting.

awww yeah i read their books i love erick J dickey n Omari tyree n sistah souljah

thnks

diddy i got urs too

Post the next part already. Or do i have to start writing my own stories too?

like fo real, am so dyin to kno what happened to Shawn boi, that wretched cheat i hope the girls rip him apart
@ KC, u got a fan here so please i want more of tha story

lmfaoo yall hold on dont worry

and lizzy write it

Brandy: This is some pathetic shitt right here! Shawn i can't believe you. You know what if you can tell this lil girl whats going on i will.

Toya: Lil girl? who are you calling lil girl , bitchh you dont want none.

Brandy: (Laughs and gets in her face) girl im not the one to be messing with so lay off that.

Shawn: Brandy stop please

Toya: (sigh) Shawn tell me who she is before i loose it

Shawn: Toya i dont know how to tell you this , she's my,

Brandy: Girl. Yes im his girl now be gone bitchh cuz he don't want you.

Toya: (shock) She's your girl? wait i don't understand

Brandy: Oh my Gah , this bitchh is slow.

Shawn: Brandy shut the Bleep up damn! could you just give Toya and I some time?

Brandy: Nigga who is you talking to like that? You know what imma just leave yall i know your ass will be wanting me later on , ASSHOLE!

Brandy steps outside.

Toya: How long has she been your girl Shawn?

Shawn: She's not my girl! Listen ive been seeing her,

Toya : (yelling) for how long Shawn?

Shawn: 3months

Toya slaps Shawn right in the face.

Toya: (crying) How could you do this to me? I love you so much Shawn, i thought you loved me , so you mean to tell me you've been faking this love shitt all this while?

Shawn: Baby, i love you but i gotta be real with you i love her too.

Toya: (still cryin) Why Shawn? Why? after all i've done for you. We've been through so much together and you threw that away all on her? I can't believe you.

Shawn: Baby im sorry, i swear to you i am. It just happened, it was when you and i got in that huge arguement

Toya: I dont care why you did it, i was faithful to you. Ive been nothing but faithful to your ass all this while. You know what i will never forgive you for this you can have that bitchh cuz its over, im out!

Shawn: Toya! come back ( touches her)

Toya: Don't touch me! i fuckingg hate you! (leaves and crys)

As Toya steps out , Brandy goes in.

Shawn: Brandy what the hell is wrong with you?

Brandy: she was gonna find out somehow. Look now that she's gone im here.

Shawn: Brandy do you know what you just did? Why did you have to come up her anyway?

Brandy: Look Shawn you cant always eat your cake and have it. The girl had to find out someway.

Shawn: (sigh) Damn what am i gonna do now? I love her i cant let her go.

Brandy: You dont love her you love me Shawn.

Shawn: Truth is, I love you both.

Brandy: (sigh) Shawn you know how much i love you, i wanna be real serious with you now that shes gone. I'll do anything for you. You know that baby.

Shawn: Brandy i dont have 2 hearts baby. Look , i need a break! the love of my life just walked out on me. I need some time off please.

Brandy: Aiight imma let you slide on this one. Since niggas always want that break shit and want their girls to be understanding.

Shawn: yea, thanks.

Brandy: Well im gonna get going. do i get a kiss?

Shawn: Brandy, i just can't

Brandy: Aiight i understand. Bye,

Shawn: Aiight Later.

---------------------------------------------- Aiight i tried , wrote this in like 30mins haha. but i guess ill continue later.

I guess u got all up in ur head uhnn?

Well i still want some mo drama. Toya's too cold. I hope she gets all crazy later on tho. lol.

Good job KC, at least u are creative. Hell the best i can do is say "mary had a little lamb".

i dont like the 2nd part lmfao , if yall dont like it i definetely understand

would u like to help me write it lizzy? ill just tel you what to write about

im serious.

Girl puh-lease.

U better do ur job. Im not putting my head in the ish u got up in here. Im gonna go read Zane now.

ohh zane good author

bur Omar tyree rocksssssss

i like it buh like hot-angel said, Toya is too calm. i expected her to be all up on Brandy or on Shawn instead of just walkin away Shawn's cheating ass needed more than a slap from Toya
buh KC nice job tho, am still gon be waitin for the next episode u got me into it already

KC wow dts good girl! keep it up! i guess i gotta come back sometime just to read the rest

[b][/b][i][/i][color=#770077][/color] ok let me start by saying dat for an 17 yr old ur e gud but u damn well know dat u shld try to use decent language cos many peeps are reading it even when u say u want 2 use the styie of all em famous writers above all d story s ok aite @ yall contributing u guys are doin great causing havoc and repairing dats why i love naija peeps. i write too but am not really serious abt it probably one day ill take it up again

Toya is spose to be sweet yall remember? lol thats why shes not that crazy but dont worry ill make it better


thanks yall so much

jazzy thnks about the cussing thing its gonna be boring w/o it lol

but thnks for the suggestion i guess ill cut it short

Post the next part!

Okay it will cost you 2bucks

hey k2 u have 10 mins to post the next part or else?

diddy no k2 please lol , anyways what r u gonna do to me. Im waiting

you dont really wann@ know.

Hmmm i can't im not in a good mood right now im not showing it but my effin dad just crushed my dreams. So i got this contract at this Modeling/Acting agency got the interview tomorrow and he said i can't go. And they pay you for taking their pictures/ advertising their clothes. I really want to do both the modeling/acting thing.

Yall don't know how crushed i am.

im still waiting for my sister to join me. my peps aint got no say. she is doing the modelling thingy. i feel for you though. i know how it is. dont worry. just pray to God dis night and aks him to change your father's heart by tomorrow. trust God, he's gon do it. give it a try but its gonn@ come from your heart.

I know my dad he wont let me. Trust me. but ill pray. dont really think it'd work

thats why it wont work cuzz the faith aint their. you know your dad but God knows him better. wonder why he wont let you do what u wann@ do to get them cheese.