Update 1

"Sonia, where are you?" asked Talia as she walked steathily into the bedroom she thought Sonia was hiding in, She knew she had little time before Sonia would come out, suprise her and win the game of hide-and-seek. She flipped on the switch as fluorescent light illuminated the room, she checked under the bed, the wardrobe, nothing. Maybe Sonia had been eaten by an Ojuju and that would be ridiculous, She had never believed in such fantasy.
Sonia tried to keep her breath steady, she thought Talia would have found her after switching on the lights, She was just on top of the bed underneath the bed cover and a pile of pillow, She had five more seconds before she would suprise and win the game. She counted silently 4-3-2-1, She heard a loud sound "Boom!" and footsteps as Talia ran out of the room, She was going to stay put.
Mr.Davis switched off the TV as the door leading into the sitting room gave way, Talia who had ran in was already clinging to her Mother who was praying in silent tones. Three men carrying guns and an aura of fear walked into the room, Two of them wore ski-masks and carried pump rifles, The last one a fat bearded man who carried a golden .45 magnum revolver seemed to be the leader and was barking orders to the others to search the house for some files. The man gave Talia's mum a blow injuring her lip, grabbed Talia and placed the revolver at the back of her head.
"Good old Davis, did you think I wouldn't find out you were playing undercover mole with the police? I have moles too in the force, I'm just going to take the investigation files and teach you a lesson, maybe a dead daughter would teach you not to mess with the White roses" said the leader as a wicked grin appeared on his fattened ugly face, Talia tried to wriggle free but couldn't. Mr.Davis dove and grabbed the revolver but it was too late, A shot turned the little girl's head into a splattered mess spilling blood across the room, as he tried to twist the gun another shot released hitting Talia's mum square on the waist. She screamed from the pain and collapsed. The other men who were searching the room Sonia was hiding in clicked their guns and rushed back on hearing the gunshots.
Sonia heard the gunshots, The screams, it was time to stop hiding. She crept out of the bed and crawled into the sitting room, The door was on the ground flat, her Dad was sending huge blows into the fat man sprawled across the floor until the men with the rifles opened fire on him. "let's go boss, lets move " said the men as they helped their leader up and ran out. Sonia knelt beside her dad a lump forming in her throat.out of pain and anger, hot tears flowed down her face. her Dad smiled despite having bullets in his cheek "Hey.. Sonia"