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"Song Of A Soul"....appraisal And Constructive Criticism Required by chookudi(m): 12:55pm On Sep 17, 2014 |
Please I need constructive criticism of these bars. They aint mine tho"... Song Of a Soul..... Sunday Morning Vibes i'm thankful that i'm still alive should be in church /but/ my flesh decides to take five take a break// from tha weeks hustling// my Souls strugglin' but tha Body needs comforting.... from tha punishing schedule// Soul's in need of fuel wrestling with tha Body but it loses that duel ...biased mind.... its in cahoots with tha Body tells my Soul "Go to church, but you aint taking Body" my Body celebrates grabs a pen n grabs some paper puffs on a roach n tells my Soul; "i'll see you later" now ma Soul's all shook up, in tha room corner contemplating what he gon tell tha Father.... ...as his vessel rebels, he's like a snail with no shell Like Alfred with No Bell Pause Alfred had NoBel..... ok Sou'ls in a good mood// i mean Soul's a good dude he dont take it to Heart cos He knowz Hearts Bodys Dude... Hmmm What to do/ What to do/ What would Jesus Do? Turns to the Guardian Angel; "See what i'm going thru?" Dude dont care, gonna be on Earth for like 90 years Then its all me, Will it be Fire or will be Cheers? meehn!!! i'm outta here.... but he knows he cant; Body's starting to pant choking on d roach, eyes starting to slant... Then Mind speaks.... "Yo Bud, you dont look so sweet, put down that spliff go lie down for a minute" Body obliges; Soul rolls his eyes, scanning thru the Movie that is their Life.... "Lord, i'm falling" it'll be Night Eternal with the Son of the Morning n dis selfish dude dont care he wont be tha one dats burning.... selfish twit// cares only for cash, ass, liquor n sleep plus the words he pens occasionally on a sheet Borderline atheist Lord i'm losing my Patience... "How do i cut off my nose n still save face?" No time for riddles Body's Gasping, clutching his middle Soul returns home..n the Reaper puts away His sickle..... The Angel Smiles. |
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