Pls you guys should try and finish up this nice story, you guys are really loosing fans/readers

i'm already addicted to ur story buf u re keeping us waiting more dan espected

tonaldo1:
i'm already addicted to ur story buf u re keeping us waiting more dan espected

allow the op make e rest joor...
Go write ur own...

PresleyKuttie:
allow the op make e rest joor... Go write ur own...

. Hmmm eyes service

PresleyKuttie:
allow the op make e rest joor... Go write ur own...

PresleyKuttie:
allow the op make e rest joor... Go write ur own...

If I catch u eeeh dat ur tongue wil be pulled out $ feed to dogs

tonaldo1:

If I catch u eeeh dat ur tongue wil be pulled out $ feed to dogs

lwkmd...
Catch me if u can, son

All thanks to Diamonndstar, he really tried and I'm more than impressed with what he did on the story.
Got mails and text messages (not love ones o). I'm really impressed and I really want to continue in the new year.
Before then the summary of where my own story ends before Diamonndstar took over will surely be posted before the new year.
Thanks to my old and new fans! I really appreciate you.

Summary:

Femi had never for once thought over his way of life until he was caught in the act with Iyabo by her mum. She shouted at the top of her voice that it alerted her eldest daughter (Motunrayo). The view of Iyabo in bed with me made Motunrayo to pass out. I was scared when Iyabo rushed over to her mum; both trying to revive her.
I just sat on the bed looking at the 3 ladies that I have slept with and it made me to think on *how it all started* (in sound sultan voice).

I was the second child of a family of five; which also comprises our parent. Brother segun(badoo) is the eldest while Funmilayo is the last issue of the family.
My dad being a very strict custom officer, restricted us to many things. We never get to do things other children does. No footballing at home, no tyre rolling (smiling), even my sister was taught *SUWE* in school. Our daily routine is just a boring daily routine. No friends from the neighbourhood. The only friends we have were the children of Mr Adeboye (dad's friend), who is also a custom officer that lives on the next street of ours.
The Adeboye's has two beautiful daughters (Bidemi&Kikelomo). They are an epitome of beauty. Bidemi Adeboye was the reason that I never got to loose my head. She used to be my *best friend* until a kiss changed our status to *best lover*. I guessed that was where it all went wrong.
I was invited to a party by kikelomo Adeboye without the consent of her sister. I went there and made new friends with Motunrayo and Chioma. I came back from the party and I started flirting with kikelomo and we sometimes kiss.

All the good moment stopped when Bidemi got to know about my affair with her sister at the cinemas. Kikelomo slapped me for not being truthful to her. I guessed the event that day changed my perspective to life. I met Tunde, who linked me up to Sarah (sugar mummy). Sarah connected me to Adedoyin (her friend) and I made some few connections myself... at least Ruka, Chidinma, Nifemi, Chioma, Shade, NurseD are the few connections I got on my own.
My time has now been occupied by my love life. Even though my heart belongs to Bidemi, I still derive joy anytime I'm with my sugar mummies; maybe it's because of the money given to me after having pleasure with ourselves. Even though my exams is fast approaching; I still live my life like a monitored child. Why won't I be monitored? I just slept with Bidemi and I'm currently dating Chidinma (my tutor). These two ladies are those that are very close to me. I just hope that Bidemi won't get to know about it because I don't want the incident that happened between Ruka and Bidemi at KFC to repeat itself.
I know that I'm fast tracking off being a good boy because the event of Ruka had already justified that with my siblings. Not even to mention the kitchen chef (Shade)that happens to be my classmate then. She was surprised to see me so elevated in women issues. Above all, my parents has been wary of my moment since my fabricated lie about my memory loss from the beating I got from Tunde and friends (not Nneka and friends). * * smiling **

I now know that my life is not my own. My love life is really congested now that Chidinma is in the picture. Adedoyin and Sarah are coming to Lagos this weekend after their long stay at Abuja. I really missed them but Bidemi and Chidinma will surely crave for my attention.


May god help me as I face these tribulations... sorry may he help me to pass my exam (smiling).

praise God oh diz man has finally came back going back to the toilet to wait for him...

Pasted Before (Happy New year friends)




She never expected the response I gave her. I made it look so real with the tone in my voice; which almost sounds like someone that's crying. She kept on telling me sorry and insisted that I ought to have told my parents. I shifted the topic to something else; asked her if she would want to have sexx with me again, despite the pain she had today. She gladly replied with a joyous "yes". We chatted for awhile and we called it a day.
I laid on my bed and I thought of the event of today and I didn't know the time that I slept off. I woke up around 8am on the new Friday morning. I sat down thinking about how the event of today would look like. Adedoyin and Sarah are coming back to Lagos today. I don't know when their plane would be touching the ground. I just hope that they come early; so that I can get to see my sweet heart(s).
I shifted my mind off them when I remembered that Chidinma would soon be around. I lazily got off the bed and went straight to the bathroom. I did my early morning exercise; brushed my teeth and took my bath. I put on my clothes and I went to the parlour; expecting and thinking what might happen when chidinma comes around. I waited for what seems like ages; my Chidinma didn't come nor call me to inform me about her location. I dialled her number but it was switched off. I began to get worried about her not coming on time.
I puts on a slippers and went to stand outside our gate. I looked down the street; hoping to see her coming on a bike but just got disappointed. I was really missing her and I just kept dialling her number until when I saw Nifemi (bread seller) coming towards my direction. She was with her tray of bread on her head as expected. I hurriedly puts back my phone in my pocket and I puts on a charming smile on my face.

Me: good morning Ifemi
Nifemi: (smiling) good morning Femi.. hope you are doing fine?
Me: (smiling) never would have felt better now. It's nice seeing you today, after futile search since our first conversation.
Nifemi: hmnnnn... I hope I could say the same but I have to rush down to deliver these bread to a very good customer and I'm running late with you around. Can we please chat another time?
Me: no problem... at least you can give me your phone number as you promise to.

She seems in a hurry to leave and she didn't bother arguing about not giving me. She collected my phone and she punched her number on it. I dialled the number and the call went through but it didn't ring out around the environment.

Me: the phone is ringing but it's.... (cuts me off)
Nifemi: the phone is not with me here... I'm charging it at home. I will call you back when I'm with the phone.
Me: (smiling but unhappy) if you do, that would make me the happiest man on earth.
Nifemi: (smiling) can I please go now?
Me: (smiling) sure... I will be expecting your call.

She didn't even answer me and she rushed off with a tray. I looked closely at her back and I felt a huge bulge in between my thighs. I really want to have a go at her. I was seriously thinking on how I'm going to get her on my bed when a bike parked by my side. It's Chidinma. She is putting on a very seductive dress.

Pasted before


I wouldn't have read any meaning to her dressing but my sexxual urge and the new relationship between us made me to think wild. I managed to greet her as she paid the bikeman; who zoomed off after their transaction. We walked together into the house.

Me: (smiling) you are late teacher Chidinma..
Chidinma: (smiling) I'm sorry.. I ought to have called you but my phone battery is flat.
Me: so what actually happened?
Chidinma: I had to make food for my parents before leaving... I'm sorry.
Me: it's nothing, besides you always come early.
Chidinma: (smiling) I even brought part of the food I cooked. We can eat it as breakfast today.
Me: (smiling) that's very kind of you.

We walked into the living room and that was when I noticed a black nylon bag; which I presumed to be the food flask. I don't like the idea that she cooked but I don't know how I'm going to tell her without hurting her feelings. I just smiled at her as she puts down the nylon on the table: I just hope that that the food won't be as bad as Ruka's.

Me: (smiling) I thought you were not coming again; I'm beginning to get worried.
Chidinma: really... worried about what?
Me: it's quite unusual for your phone to be switched off and you not being around at the normal time.
Chidinma: (smiling) I explained everything to you. I had to do some domestic chores for my parents. I'm sorry.
Me: you don't have to because I'm not angry at you.
Chidinma: okay... so how was your outing yesterday? Hope it was not stressful anyway?
Me: it's not dear...
Chidinma: so do you miss me?
Me: (mixed feelings) I sure did... did you?
Chidinma: I sure did....

I gazed into each her eyes and I can't just but wonder what a beautiful innocent lady of her status could have seen in a guy like me. I'm just a normal guy and I can bet that she would have gotten any guy of choice; rather than her being stuck with someone like me who doesn't even know what he wants.

Chidinma: (shy) what? Stop it! It's not polite to stare at a lady this long.
Me: I'm sorry... I just can't help myself. You are very, I meant very very beautiful.
Chidinma: (looking away) thank you.
Me: (smiling) I'm sorry if I made you timid, like I said I just can't help it.

The environment became a romantic one. Our voices turned bedroom voices. The love chemistry between us elevated to a greater height that we wouldn't have anticipated. I moved closer to her and locked my fingers into hers. I turned her face toward me and I planted a kiss on her lip. She kissed back with our fingers still locked on. I probed my tongue into her mouth. She imprisoned my strayed tongue with her teeth and she uses her tongue to flick the tip of my tongue. It felt strange but I love it. I unlocked our hand; placed it on her arm. I caress it with the tip of my finger. We were breathing heavily as we broke up our lips with both of us panting for air. We kept quiet and looked into each other eyes.
I knew instantly that I have done what I shouldn't have done. But on the other side; I love it. She's a good kiss(er) and I would still love to taste those lips of hers.

New year post....




Me: (smiling) you thought me new trick today on kissing. I never would have imagined my tongue being trapped and flicked at the other end (lies).
Chidinma: (chuckles) it's just a normal kiss and I didn't see anything special in what I have just done.
Me: okay ooo... but I saw a lot in the kiss. The tongue trapping thing. It's very new to me (lies).
Chidinma: it's just normal Femi.
Me: to you its normal but to me; it's not. Anyway, thank you for the kiss.
Chidinma: (smiling) I'm the one that ought to say thank you. I wouldn't have had the courage of coming here; had it being you turned me down. Thank you Femi.

I instantly knew what she said was true and it's one of the reason I had to accept her proposal. I just hope I won't regret it later in the course of our relationship.

Me: it's okay teacher Chidinma. (using my hand to caress her lap)
Chidinma: are you not feeling hungry now?
Me: (smiling) I'm and you?
Chidinma: not really, I ate before coming down here. I only bought your own food.
Me: (smiling) that's not good... I hope you are going to eat with me.
Chidinma: maybe or maybe not. It depends.

She went to kitchen; I guessed to bring plate and spoon. I hurriedly brought out my phone to check for any missed call. I had 5 missed call. It's from Nifemi (bread seller), Motunrayo and Bidemi. I was about dialling back Nifemi's number when Chidinma came back from the kitchen. I went to join her at the table as she dished out white rice with chicken from her flask. I put on a big smile to cover up the thought of the incident I had with Ruka. I prayed Silently as I put a spoonful of rice in my mouth. She surprised me with the taste. The food tasted just like the food we usually eat at the cafeteria down the road. I just smiled at her as I rushed down the food; which would have signalled that I like the food.

Me: (coughing) the food is very delicious... it must have cost you a fortune to prepare this.
Chidinma: (smiling) thank you Femi.. I'm very glad that you enjoyed it. I was very cautious when cooking it. I dint want to spoil your breakfast for you.
Me: (smiling) it's the best meal I have eaten in awhile... no offence to my mum and Funmilayo. They will definitely kill me if they get to know about what I have just said.

We both laughed at the joke. She seems very happy about the way I complimented her food and it has started to have effect on her and me. The chemistry of the mood changed because I could feel the sudden rise in between my legs. I have to sustain the mood until I finish up my food.

Me: where did you learn to cook like this?
Chidinma: (smiling) my mum is a great cook and I got some help on the Internet on the recipe.
Me: hmnnnn... I never knew that you could get informations like that on the Internet.
Chidinma: (smiling) you can't know everything Femi

I washed my hands and she helped me to pack up the dinning. I knew that she's going to wash the dishes. I have to keep up the tempo with our mood or I might have to start all over again. I was walking down to the kitchen when I remembered the missed calls on my phone. They can all wait. It's Chidinma's turn today. I entered the kitchen with my bumbum bent a little to the back; to avoid her seeing the bulge in my trousers.

Me: I'm very glad to have you around today. So what are we doing today?
Chidinma: (smiling) anything you want us to. You are always in charge remember.
Me: (smiling) please stop saying that.... its not as if I always do things without acknowledging you first. Okay, you are in charge today, anything you want.. we do.

She smiled as she snuffed back her flask into the Nylon bag. We both walked back quietly to the living room.

Me: (smiling) you are in charge now remember. So what are we doing now?
Chidinma: anything you want us to do... I'm not deciding what we should do.

I stood up and went to lock up the door that leads to the living room. She was surprised by my action but didn't say anything about it. I sat beside her on the sofa and placed my right hand on her chin. I planted a kiss on her lips. She reciprocated by putting her hand at the back of my head.

We kissed passionately and her right hand roamed freely, caressing my shirt. The pleasure steamed up within my trousers. I could feel my OGA trying to free itself from it; has it has been threatening all day. I tried staring into her eyeballs but I could not because her eyes were closed (maybe trying to savour the moment; who cares). I slid my hand down from her face and stylishly puts it on her chest. I caressed her neck and the exposed part of her chest. We were both going wild and our hands were busy touching the faithful places. I decided to be more adventurous; I gently pushed her on her back on the sofa without detaching my mouth from hers. I pressed her breastt though her clothe which made her lose concentration on the kiss with the moan that escaped her mouth. I fondled it while trying to locate her nipple which was successful because of her very light breastt protector (braa) that she wore. I pinched it (nipple)through her clothe while I used my tongue to lick her chin down to her neck and tickle her ear lobe with it. I moved my hand to her hip as I snuggled on the sofa with her. I held her close to me and I tried to unbuttoned her jean when she held back my hand.

Chidinma: (looking away) Femi stop,
Me: (forcing a smile) what's it?
Chidinma: I think it's too early for these things.
Me: I thought you said you loved me? Then why are you holding me back to profess my real love for you.
Chidinma: (looks at me) so, having sexx with me is that what you can use to reciprocate your own love. Femi, why?
Me: (looking confused) don't get me wrong Chichi, I can only show you love depending on the mood we are in. It's not that I.. I... (stammers) really want to have sexx with you now... I mean right now but I'm carried away by your beauty.
Chidinma: (looking confused) what are you saying Femi?
Me: (forcing a smile) never mind. There's still a lot of time for us to get along; but to be frank with you, I dont like the insinuation that I'm just dating you because of sexx. Besides, I didn't.... (kept quite)
Chidinma: (angry) you didn't what Femi?
Me: never mind.

I rearranged her clothes and I got off the sofa and walked quietly to the door to unlock it. She stares at me as I walked past her to the dinning table as I fumbled with my pocket trousers; trying to get out my phone.

My brain got restored to factory settings as I remembered the event I have for the day as I checked my phone. As expected, missed calls. I peeped at Chidinma and I could see that she was through putting her dress in order and sat down thinking about the whole event that just happened (who cares). I dialled Nifemi's number and she picked almost immediately.

Nifemi: hello, I called your number but you didn't pick. Hope all is well?
Me: (smiling) all is well dear... I was busy doing some assignment on my laptop and the phone was on silent. I'm sorry.
Nifemi: (smiling) it's alright. So are you still home or you have gone out?
Me: (confused) I'm home and why do you ask?
Nifemi: nothing. I saw you dressed up earlier and thought you were going out.
Me: no oo.. (looking at Chidinma) or do you want to come around?
Nifemi: to do what? No ooo
Me: (smiling) at least to get know each other very well.
Nifemi: I'm not chanced today besides I can't come to your house.
Me: (smiling) no problem! If you are chanced, just let me know. We will work out a meeting point.
Nifemi: (smiling) alright, why are you sounding low? I could barely hear you. My phone is pinned hard to my ear.
Me: (smiling) I'm sorry. Maybe if I call you next time, I will definitely stop using bedroom voice.
Nifemi: (smiling) which one is bedroom voice again? I have not heard of that one.
Me: (smiling) it's an act of impressing an opposite sex with ones voice. You try to make it sound very sexxy and loving to the ear. So I make use of it (bedroom voice) because I don't want you to tell me that I sound like a baby on the phone.
Nifemi: (smiling) you are very funny Femi... I now understand what you meant by "bedroom voice".

She continued with her conversation until I could see that Chidinma has already gotten off the sofa and coming toward my direction.

I'm afraid to continue this story cos it might not finish this year. Anyway thumbs up hazardous, nice having u back

Ride on bro....

Happy new year hazardous I hope u finish dis stowi dis year sha...

Happy new year dear.... I hope I finished everything before this year runs out. Let's make it more lively like it has before... comments, likes and shares would do...

I don't want her to come around and finds out that I left her on the sofa to flirt with someone.

Me: (coughing) I will call you back Nifemi... I want to do something that's very important now.
Nifemi: (voice low) okay, make sure you call me as soon as you are through.
Me: okay I will.

I ended the call as soon as Chidinma approaches the dinning arena. I looked at her with a fake smile.

Chidinma: why do you have to hung up when you saw me coming? You are really surprising me today.
Me: please don't start. I ended the call because I was through with the person I was calling.
Chidinma: I know that's not true. You were on the phone for more than 5 minutes; you didn't end the call until the moment you saw me. Femi, what you are doing is not good oo.

I put my hand on my forehead facing down, thinking what I have gotten myself into. This is another Bidemi in the making. The only difference is that I don't have any feelings for her like I did for my precious Bidemi. She continued nagging about how I left her on the sofa to make call with someone she knew that was my girlfriend. She continued nagging.

Chidinma: it's not your fault, is it? If I had not come into your life this cheap; you won't be treating me like this.
Me: (kept quite)
Chidinma: (almost in tears) just because I rejected you sexx, is that why you are showing off that you have more girls that can satisfy your needs... Femi, won't you say something?
Me: (forcing a smile) what do you want me to say? I never expected this from you. If it's the sexx issue that makes you this mad at me. I'm sorry and it will never happen again. I promise (kept quite).
Chidinma: is that all you are going to say?
Me: (smiling) what do you want me to say again? I already said I'm sorry.
Chidinma: that's not how to say sorry to an angry lady and you know that.

I moved closer to her and I put my hands on her hips. I dragged her gently to my side, looked straight into her eyeballs. I gave her a very light peck on her cheek.

Me: (smiling) I'm sorry Chichi....
Chidinma: (not happy) it just seems that I'm the one forcing myself on you. I... I....

Before she could start making enough sense, I roughly dragged her to my side; locked my lips onto hers. We both lost control again and I lifted her back on the sofa. I squeezed her breastt through her dress with our lips still locked together. We were enjoying ourselves when I heard the sound of door leading to the living room being opened. I quickly stood off her while she hurriedly sat down (improperly).
We couldn't have arranged ourselves better when Funmilayo entered the living room. She gave us a funny look which needs no confirmation that she knew what we were doing before she entered.

Funmilayo: (smiling) good afternoon bros,
Me: (looking confused) good afternoon, you are early today... oops, I nearly forgot that today is friday.
Funmilayo: (smiling) yes bros... good afternoon aunty Chidinma.
Chidinma: (forcing a smile) good afternoon Funmi, how was school today?
Funmilayo: just a word "exhausting". I need to take a shower.

She walked pass us into her bedroom. Chidinma and I looked into our eyes without saying anything. We both knew that she caught us, if the looks on our faces is anything to go by. We kept quite for like 5 minutes until she said that she wants to take her leave. I didn't want to bring up our thoughts. We just kept staring at each other for what seems like decades.

Chidinma: (forcing a smile) I think I should take my leave now.
Me: (smiling) okay...

She took her bag and left for her house. I saw her off to the gate. I'm now left alone with many things inside my head. Sarah and Adedoyin are coming to Lagos today. I don't know what will happen between us. I know that I have feelings for both of them but I don't want to start a quarrel between them. My mind wanders off with the expectations of my sugar mummies when my phone rang and it bought me back to life. I removed my phone from my pocket and it was Motunrayo.

hazardous:
Happy new year dear.... I hope I finished everything before this year runs out. Let's make it more lively like it has before... comments, likes and shares would do...

Mr Harzadous...this your story 's a season film I guess, which Epesode are you at now...When you are thinking if you can finish it this 2016, Chai. You aare a great writer ooo

omorttee4u:


Mr Harzadous...this your story 's a season film I guess, which Epesode are you at now...When you are thinking if you can finish it this 2016, Chai. You aare a great writer ooo

Abi na

welcm back mr hazardous, hope dis year will be a different year by completing did series

Thanks guys.... I hope we all finish this story together. And for the record again, I'm an addict myself. Updating soon.

Lol! I have seen the story posted on so many sites. So don't push it.
It started here on nairaland... as for you guys that's trying to get a fame out of it. It's none of my business. I know that some bloggers have even concluded their own side of the story (smiling). Who cares anyway.
Updating soon jare!

I don't have anything to tell her. I picked the call but sounded like someone that has been asleep for 2 hours.

Me: (yawning into the phone) Hello baby
Motunrayo: are you sleeping?
Me: yes... but I am up now
Motunrayo: I dont know that you were sleeping. I wouldn't have called. Call me back when you are fully up. Sorry for disturbing your sleep.
Me: okay, I sure will. Bye.

I heaved a sigh of relief after she ended the call. I don't want her to start all over again and starts telling me things that I already know (no time for her). At least not now that things are getting much better between us. I don't want to lie about cancelling any of our appointment again.
I laid on the sofa and thought over what happened between Chidinma and I. I was very happy about how the whole event turned out, at least I'm not indebted to her by making love with her. I put a big smile on my face when my little sister called out for my attention.

Funmilayo: Bros mi
Me: (mood changed) what is it?
Funmilayo: hanhan... what is it as how? Can't I come and greet you again ni?
Me: (smiling) you... greet me. Okay ooo.
Funmilayo: please I need a favour from you.
Me: what is it?
Funmilayo: (puppy eyes) I want you to help me do some assignment on the Internet. You know that I don't know how to surf the net yet.
Me: (smiling) so what's in for me?
Funmilayo: (smiling) that I don't get to tell mummy what you and aunty Chidinma were doing when I entered
Me: (laughing loud) Funmi... its not what you think, besides I know that you dare not tell mum.
Funmilayo: (smiling) yes I can't oo. But Brother Femi, you are very scary and unpredictable these days. You and aunty Chidinma. She's older than you and you know that.

I smiled within myself. If Chidinma is old to her; what would she say when she gets to see Sarah or Adedoyin. Then she will definitely know that my fling with Chidinma is what the government calls "child abuse".

Me: I don't have any thing with Chidinma except the normal relationship between both of us and the better you realised that the better.

She didn't even look convinced but who cares? She gave me her assignment on Biology (genetics). I promised to do it for her before Monday but definitely not today.

Funmilayo: (smiling) Thank you bros mi.. I really need to rest sef. I'm going for a vigil tonight.

When she mentioned "vigil"... my brain rebooted to Sarah and Adedoyin coming into Lagos today

Me: can I come?
Funmilayo: (smiling) how many times have I invited you and you always turned me down. I will be very happy if you could come.
Me: what about mummy? Is she going too?
Funmilayo: (looking suspicious) I don't think she will be going today because it's youth vigil. So tell me, why is the sudden anticipation for vigil; I know that there's something to it.
Me: (smiling) you know me inside out but promise me that you won't tell anybody, even brother Segun
Funmilayo: (looking serious) I promise
Me: okay.. There's this wonderful night club that my friends used to talk about. They always have ladies night every Fridays. I have been dreaming of going there. Just to have a feel about what it's all about. Badoo always go clubbing and he used to tell me about how it feels like. I.... (cuts me off).
Funmilayo: Club... Ladies night... so what if dad gets to know that you dint go with me to the vigil.
Me: (smiling) he will definitely know only if you tell him
Funmilayo: (sounding scared) you know that I won't tell him but what if something unexpected happens? I don't want to get him angry.

It took awhile before I could convince and assure her about going to the vigil with her. Adedoyin and Sarah are coming around 10pm tonight. I just hope that there's no delay in their flight; or else I might be stranded in the church.
I heard that flight from Abuja to Lagos is around 1 hour 15 minutes. Only god knows when they would be leaving the airport and the time of their arrival. Sarah told me that they will be in Lagos by 10pm but I don't know if the checking out time is included or not. I am beginning to feel nervous than ever. I have never lied to sleep outside my fathers house before.

another upload a beg unto new year things Mr harzadous beko #gettingexxited

Hello hazardous , How are you? This is a nice work. I need to discuss online publishing with you. If you're interested, kindly contact me via larrysun4real@yahoo.com.

Bless you.

Hello guys. happy new year to u all. And to hazardos; u are welcom bak on board bro. I am sorry for been away for too long. Just been very busy, pls 4giv me. I was hoping to post all the concluding chptrs of this story that I composed here by next month before but since d boss is back he is more than welcom to conclude d story for everyone but in case u want to see my own end of the story u can read it on my fb page later. Thanks! Wish u guys the best this year can give. Cheers....

harjibolar10:
Broz, you need to work on your spacing ooo


And separation of thought and the main dialogues;
To aide understanding of we the readers, thou I can see you are making use of it at some point, but need to make consistent out of it ooo

So you need to make use of some signs like bracket (...), quotation mark ".... ", apostrophe '.... .' and so on

As it is in




And No, I'm not a writer + you have a great work doing bros

u are supposed to know when it's a thought

bros u do allllllllllllllllllllllllllllll

emyblinkx:


u are supposed to know when it's a thought

Yes, I'm supposed to and I knew

But, what of others?

i hpoe it all countinues wella sha.....