mayapop:
lol! FrancisTony you're really good, and you were tripping all along!

Thanks

FrancisTony:

Thanks

keep the ball bouncing!

keep the ball bouncing!

Mayapop has deactivated?

FrancisTony:

Mayapop has deactivated?

Why did she?

Amefrica:


Why did she?

I don't even know because she didn't update it....

But in one of her updates, she mentioned how boring Nairaland is/was.

FrancisTony:

I don't even know because she didn't update it....

But in one of her updates, she mentioned how boring Nairaland is/was.

Eeyahh! It's well sha

Life Of An Agony


Life filled with sadness,
Life filled with boringness,
In pain I writhe,
In sorrow I urge

Many obstacles, inconsistency and unexpected has embedded the earth.
I mourn and cry for help,
I'm stuffed with pains that has weighed me down.

The children of Mother nature,
scold, scoffs and scorn me.
What else am I gonna do?

Fighting the sorrow and agony,
with weapon I knoweth where it cameth from,
Above my imperfections,
may I be favoured.

We all came through sand,
and in sand we would go back,
The thought of after-life, leave us in sober.


Cc herald9
Laykhorn
Texanomaly
Missmossy
Missterious
Standd
UjSizzle
Mynd44
Pr0ton
Kizmarty
VictoriousVic
5minsmadness - I tagged you because I have seen a poem you wrote.
MzNelly
Kumpharm

Please, rate this poem

FrancisTony:
Life Of An Agony


Life filled with sadness,
Life filled with boringess,
In pain I writh,
In sorrow I pourge

Many obstacles, inconsistency and unexpected has embedded the earth.
I mourn and cry for help,
I'm stuffed with pains that has weighed me down.

The children of Mother nature,
scold, scoffs and scorn me.
What else am I gonna do?

Fighting the sorrow and agony,
with weapon I knoweth where it cameth from,
Above my imperfections,
may I be favoured.

We all came through sand,
and in sand we would go back,
The thought of after-life, live us in sober.


Cc herald9
Laykhorn
Texanomaly
Missmossy
Missterious
Standd
UjSizzle
Mynd44
Pr0ton
Kizmarty
VictoriousVic
5minsmadness - I tagged you because I have seen a poem you wrote.
MzNelly
Kumpharm

Please, rate this poem

Sonofabich is a darn good poet, who woulda thunk it?!

The poem has depth and feeling, I can sense your soul within the lines. Very good work.

However...

Life filled with sadness,
Life filled with boringessboringness
In pain I writhwrithe,
In sorrow I pourgepurge

Even though there is no such word as 'boringness', poetic licence allows you to play about with words a bit to pass a message across.

I give this a 7.0

5minsmadness:

Sonofabich is a darn good poet, who woulda thunk it?!

The poem has depth and feeling, I can sense your soul within the lines. Very good work.

However...

Life filled with sadness,
Life filled with boringessboringness
In pain I writhwrithe,
In sorrow I pourgepurge

Even though there is no such word as 'boringness', poetic licence allows you to play about with words a bit to pass a message across.

I give this a 7.0

nice assessment...

@frank, nice work...keep on composing,keep on getting pissed and keep on putting those things that struck your heart in words...
that's the way of life of poets ...
very boring huhh? but I love it...
kudos

FrancisTony:
Life Of An Agony


Life filled with sadness,
Life filled with boringness,
In pain I writhe,
In sorrow I urge

Many obstacles, inconsistency and unexpected has embedded the earth.
I mourn and cry for help,
I'm stuffed with pains that has weighed me down.

The children of Mother nature,
scold, scoffs and scorn me.
What else am I gonna do?

Fighting the sorrow and agony,
with weapon I knoweth where it cameth from,
Above my imperfections,
may I be favoured.

We all came through sand,
and in sand we would go back,
The thought of after-life, live us in sober

Nice one. But there are spelling errors.

Pr0ton:


Nice one. But there are spelling errors.

If it's the one 5min's pointed out, it has been edited.

FrancisTony:

If it's the one 5min's pointed out, it has been edited.

The thought of after-life, leave us in sober

Like the ambrosial dew that moistens the earth,
You leave the dissimilar gender's mouth agape yearning for your unlimited affections..

You seem like the best mother nature could give..
You match the beauty of Greek Goddess Aphrodite; emboldens the love of Venus...

Every man's dream! L'femme extraordinaire..
Wishful harmless thoughts of mine.
The virtuous woman that every other wishes to be.

Folks would view you as haughty, yet you are piety..
Heart races simultenously each time I scroll and view pages of your photo album; you made my heart skip in milliseconds.

In the utterly ridiculously state, you strike dazzling.
Your unrentlessness perches and decorates environments where your sweet aroma scents!

Your sparkling eyes, shinning teeth and flawless beauty remains unfazed.
You are undaunted by the haters opinion.
You are my Itunes and I am your mayor!


cc Pr0ton
UjSizzle
Llaykorn
Herald9
Texanomaly
MzNelly et al Wha'ya'think.

FrancisTony:
Like the ambrosial dew that moistens the earth,
You leave the dissimilar gender mouth agape yearning for your unlimited affections..

You seems like the best mother nature could give..
You match the beauty of greek goddess aphrodite; emboddens the love of venus...

Every man's dream! L'femme extraordinaire..
Wishful harmless thoughts of mine.
The virtuous woman that every others wish to be.

Folks would view you as haughty, yet you are piety..
Heart races simultenously each time I scroll and view pages of your photo album; you made my heart skip in a milliseconds.

In the utterly ridiculously state, you strikes dazzling.
Your unrentlessness perches and decorates environments where your sweet aroma scents!

Your sparkling eyes, shinning teeth and flawless beauty remains unfaze.
You are undaunted to haters opinion.
You are my Itunes and I am your mayor!


cc Pr0ton
UjSizzle
Llaykorn
Herald9
Texanomaly
MzNelly et al Wha'ya'think.

Is this yours?

MzNelly:

Is this yours?

Yup!

FrancisTony:

Yup!

A love poem?

For someone?

FrancisTony:
Yup!

Are you in love?

MzNelly:


A love poem?

For someone?

She's not a Nairalander.
Wrote it yesterday during, 'WomanCrushWednesday' contest on facebook.

herald9:

Are you in love?

*Sigh* Rate the poem.

FrancisTony, um... It's nice.

A little overly casual though... But nice.

FrancisTony:
Life Of An Agony


Life filled with sadness,
Life filled with boringness,
In pain I writhe,
In sorrow I urge[b].[/b]

Many obstacles, inconsistency and the unexpected has embedded the earth.
I mourn and cry for help,
I'm stuffed with pains that "weigh" me down. or I'm stuffed with "pain" that weighs me down.

The children of Mother nature,
scold, scoffs its just scoff...no "s" and scorn me.
What else am I gonna do?

Fighting the sorrow and agony
with weapon. I knoweth where it cameth from, I might be wrong, but did you mean (I knoweth "not" )? I would drop the "eth" and just use "came". It is still the Kings English without it in this case.
Above my imperfections,
may I be favoured.

We all came through sand,
and in sand we would go back, maybe "will return" instead of "would go back"
The thought of after-life ... leave us in sober. Try "leaves us sober."


Cc
Texanomaly


Please, rate this poem

FrancisTony:


Like the ambrosial dew that moistens the earth,
You leave the dissimilar gender 's mouth agape , yearning for your unlimited affections..

You seems no "s" like the best mother nature could give..
You match the beauty of the greek "Greek, Goddess and Aphrodite are all capitalized goddess aphrodite; don't know this word...emboddens...did you mean "emboldens" the love of venus... capitalize "Venus"

Every man's dream! L'femme extraordinaire..
Wishful , harmless thoughts of mine.
The virtuous woman that every others just other...not others wish wishes to be.

Folks would view you as haughty, yet you are piety...
Heart races simultenously each time I scroll and view pages of your photo album; you made my heart skip in a milliseconds. no "s" or remove "a"

In the utterly ridiculously state, you strikes no "s" dazzling.
Your unrentlessness perches and decorates environments where your sweet aroma scents!

Your sparkling eyes, shinning teeth and flawless beauty remains unfaze. unfazed
You are undaunted to "by" not "to" haters opinion. opinions or "the" haters opinion
You are my Itunes and I am your mayor!


cc
Texanomaly

You've got some great stuff here. Grammar and spelling need work, but other than that...you are golden my friend. Impressive!

Some grammar mistakes can be chocked up to "poetic license". It helps bring character and personality to a piece, but choose carefully where you use it.

Thanks, Texanomaly. Great analysis

MzNelly, thanks.

FrancisTony:
Like the ambrosial dew that moistens the earth,
You leave the dissimilar gender's mouth agape yearning for your unlimited affections..

You seem like the best mother nature could give..
You match the beauty of Greek Goddess Aphrodite; emboldens the love of Venus...

Every man's dream! L'femme extraordinaire..
Wishful harmless thoughts of mine.
The virtuous woman that every other wishes to be.

Folks would view you as haughty, yet you are piety..
Heart races simultenously each time I scroll and view pages of your photo album; you made my heart skip in milliseconds.

In the utterly ridiculously state, you strike dazzling.
Your unrentlessness perches and decorates environments where your sweet aroma scents!

Your sparkling eyes, shinning teeth and flawless beauty remains unfazed.
You are undaunted by the haters opinion.
You are my Itunes and I am your mayor!

Your curves and edges are out of this world
They give a complete meaning of flawless and all
Your charming boobs can't be appreciated with words
They need my caring hands to see them all night long

Your smile and lips melt down my sturdy heart
And thy smooth golden skin that matches thy hat
Thy romantic breath that cools off the candle light
Oh God... Why won't I sin tonight?

cc Pr0ton
UjSizzle
Llaykorn
Herald9
Texanomaly
MzNelly et al Wha'ya'think.

Superb! I loved it.

And who's this gurl you're trying to take down?

Pr0ton:









Superb! I loved it.

And who's this gurl you're trying to take down?

Jesu! Your lines mhen. SMH.

Anyway, that gehl you added by name Dolly.

FrancisTony:

Jesu! Your lines mhen. SMH.

Anyway, that gehl you added by name Dolly.

Say that again...



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FrancisTony:

Jesu! Your lines mhen. SMH.

Anyway, that gehl you added by name Dolly.

I made a mental note when I got the mention to edit it later, but when I got here to do that, I noticed that Tex had done it. You should be careful, though, when you add that 's' to your verbs. Verbs that comes after You, I, We and They never get the 's'. In the second line of the last stanza, therefore, the correct word should be 'remain' without the 's', since the pronoun that would stand in place of those things you mentioned would be "They".

FrancisTony, if I were a woman, I just might melt at this; your lines are awesome!

llaykorn:


I made a mental note when I got the mention to edit it later, but when I got here to do that, I noticed that Tex had done it. You should be careful, though, when you add that 's' to your verbs. Verbs that comes after You, I, We and They never get the 's'. In the second line of the last stanza, therefore, the correct word should be 'remain' without the 's', since the pronoun that would stand in place of those things you mentioned would be "They".

FrancisTony, if I were a woman, I just might melt at this; your lines are awesome!

New thing learnt. Thanks so much!