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Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Nobody: 12:51am On Jan 04, 2015 |
Cybershow:alright then! Good night! |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 12:54am On Jan 04, 2015 |
Shaxee:Kkkkkk Boss |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Hawlahscho(m): 8:21am On Jan 04, 2015 |
Skimpledawg: May be we should take it as cartoon 1 Like |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Skimpledawg(m): 10:01am On Jan 04, 2015 |
Hawlahscho:Even Tom n Jerry make sense pass dt tin na |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 1:19pm On Jan 04, 2015 |
Hawlahscho:LOLZ |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 1:21pm On Jan 04, 2015 |
Skimpledawg:Lolz |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by JulietAKK(f): 5:09pm On Jan 04, 2015 |
Cybershow:You're welcome. |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 1:31am On Jan 05, 2015 |
JulietAKK:Tenx Ma |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 1:41am On Jan 05, 2015 |
They entered the car and set for the hospital.Alfred couldn't stop staring at princess,he ask besty;"what's both of you names?".she smiled;"my name is Besty,her name generally known as princess but her name is Cynthia". 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 1:48am On Jan 05, 2015 |
Alfred said;"But she look different from you,are you of the same parents?" Besty wondered why he wanted to know more about her,she said;"well,No! she is a poor orphan who wander around the cold world not knowing where she is coming to, 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 1:55am On Jan 05, 2015 |
Where to lay her head and whom to love" that is just princess,she was just lucky to run away from miami florida for three days after almost experiencing a rape from a person named Jack that she live with and he called her "MURDERESS" 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 2:03am On Jan 05, 2015 |
When she use a bread knife to cut him on his shoulder to defend herself,for three days,running with an empty stomach before she got here,she stay at the corridor of the neighbour hood,not knowing where to go,but luck shine on her. 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 2:09am On Jan 05, 2015 |
She has always being wandering here and there since she was nineteen years of age and next month,she wil be twenty years of age not knowing what to do in her life".[Alfred was moved to tears,he didn't know when tears drop down from his eyes, 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 2:14am On Jan 05, 2015 |
He quickly clean it so that betsy would not notice but she has seen it] Alfred said;"poor girl,she suffered a lot,what does she do best or like best?" Betsy was eager to tell him that;"she loves to cook,to crochet,to make decoration to a room 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 2:18am On Jan 05, 2015 |
Above all she loves to smile although there is an open wound whom only love can heal". Alfred nod in agreement and said;"we are in the hospital,so we shall talk later". 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Nobody: 1:00am On Jan 06, 2015 |
You're doing a gud job but I think these should help. 1)most tyms after every ",make the next word a capital letter. 2)don't start the names with small letter like betsy,it should be Betsy. 3)when ever u want to quote,i.e using this symbol " go to the nxt line using d last character in ur phone then start the next word with a capital letter. Hope u get me? |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 6:44am On Jan 06, 2015 |
Wininiel:Tenx Alot I Wil Held 2 Dat Sir |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Nobody: 7:08am On Jan 06, 2015 |
Cybershow:I'm female. |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 7:18am On Jan 06, 2015 |
Wininiel:Oh Dnt B Anoid Ma I Dnt Kw |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Nobody: 11:03am On Jan 06, 2015 |
Cybershow:No probs |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 2:44pm On Jan 06, 2015 |
Wininiel:kkkkkk ma |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Nobody: 3:31pm On Jan 06, 2015 |
Dis is getting interesting. |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 4:34pm On Jan 06, 2015 |
Jollyjoy:ohh tenx |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 5:44pm On Jan 06, 2015 |
A stretcher came to carry her to the wardroom,soon the doctor tested her and came to meet Mr Alfred,Betsy and her mother in the waiting room,Alfred rose up and asked; "What took you so long to diagonise?" Doctor Baran replied with a worried look; "Mr luggard,if you want to save that girl life you will have to spend millions and since you are not her relative or anything to her,i pity her relative that are so poor that they can't avoid three square meal [reffering to Betsy and her mother]" Alfred said; "shut up Baran! Shut up! I ask for the ailment of the girl but instead,you are giving me stories,what is her ailment?" Dr. Baran said remorsefully; "kidney stones due to lack of protein and ill-treatment". Fear grip Betsy and Aminata whose mind has gone far in thinking of where to get money for surgery but to their surprise,Alfred said, "Betsy,Mrs sonora,put yourselves together because i can see that fear has gripped you to your spine. Dr Baran,perform the neccessary surgery today,i am that ladyzls guarantor so i'll wait till you are through with the surgery and she is discharged,then we shall all leave. Dr. Baran open his mouth in amazement and said; "Boss? Did you just say you will stand as her guarantor in this situation? The money worth her treatment is $3,000,000£, boss i give you gold medal for your kindness". Alfred nod and said, "Waste no more time Baran,do the surgery with all your techniques" Dr Baran bow in honour and left. After six hours,all of them [Betsy and Aminata] for the first time ate good food,to their satisfaction,Betsy was licking ice-cream when the doctor came out,Besty ask; "Dr Baran,how is she". Dr Baran smiled and said; "she was the first person i've operated in many years of her cases that never have any complication,she was really brave in the theatre,the critical hours are gone,she will be discharge by tomorrow evening". Alfred smiled and said; "thank you Baran,thank you very much [he wrote a cheque of six million naira] take,have this token of money for being so good". Dr Baran bow in honour and left. Alfred,Betsy and Aminata went to lay in the nearest hotel,they were given pyjamas and some new clothes ordered byAlfred,took their bath,eat and went to bed........WATCH OUT FOR CHAPTER3.........hmmmmm.....let me know ur mind abt this write up thanks........ 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Skimpledawg(m): 5:55pm On Jan 06, 2015 |
"kidney stones due to lack of protein and ill-treatment". Fear grip Betsy.... Boss I tink it shuld be 'gripped' instead of 'grip'! Nd anoda tin, try n space ya work after every quote cos it makes it cool to read! Al d same, u ar rily improving nd tnx for makin d update longer! Dats a Plus! We ya readers ar hia to serve(read) u well. |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 6:52pm On Jan 06, 2015 |
Skimpledewg Tenx I Wil Kip 2 Dat |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by seunviju(f): 7:56pm On Jan 06, 2015 |
You are not doing bad but please stop using short form for some words in the story and try editing your work well before posting.Welldone 1 Like |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by JulietAKK(f): 12:04am On Jan 07, 2015 |
You've made some changes and I'm glad....really. Especially the long update. Thank you |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Nobody: 12:32am On Jan 07, 2015 |
This is very much better. Thumbs up. |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Hawlahscho(m): 1:15am On Jan 07, 2015 |
Skimpledawg: Yepa!!! Take am easy naw, sebi e Don beg una make una take am like that. |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 2:48pm On Jan 08, 2015 |
seunviju:kkk i will kip to dat |
Re: Story:lost In A Cold World(an Emotional Story) by Cybershow(m): 2:49pm On Jan 08, 2015 |
JulietAKK:u wlcm ma tenx |
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