Followed dis story silently but I gotta say I enjoyed reading it. U 've done well with this story though u still need to improve.

great story

Nooo, never feel hurt dear, dis is just the begining. Try to brace urself, sky shall never be ur limit Zee.

Good job

Daughterzion:
I have noticed that am more of a storyteller than a writer-through your comments,you always needed more than criticizing or commending my skills.

I was hurt though i needed to complete the story.So there you have it.


Bye!!!!Am deactivating this account and opening a new one.

I love you all!

[email] So, you are deactivating 'cause you got negative comments, or not the comments you expected??



That'd be stupidd. You should instead try again. I'm sure the next will be better than this.


Looking forward to it, BTW. [/email]

am daughterzion and this is my new account.I didnt open a new 1 cause of d comments o,i just wanted to.Thank you all

Lovely literature... This will be very good for most private nursery and primary schools

nice right up....keep it going. never,should u for any reason,relent

what a wonderful beginning. I read everything.am delighted. keep it up.As for corrections and critism.the only errow or mistake i observed is ur grammar use simple past tense.as for critics try to permute ur story as in beautify it,make it sweet and beautiful. Thank you.Don't relent to start a cry is always difficult.

When will they start bleeping?

Daughterzion:
U wil knw kathy nd jack soon. Yes faith was 5 months, now plus the additiona 9 months mrs Daniel had carry lilian in the womb. Its over a year nw

but u wrote earlier that faith was 22 in her 3rd yr nd leo was sixteen. Nd i believe leo ndlillian are age mates? So change the 5 months to 6 yrs

Daughter zion,your wisdom is beyond your years.feels like am reading a Sidney Sheldon novel

Remember am still daughterzion.


Ok i was going through my story and some comments really encouraged me to start a new story but with this account and thats what i will do but i dont know when yet.When i do i will let you all know.


Also,am now an art student cause i wanna be a lawyer.Chemistry scared me away sha.I believe writing a new story would help me academically because am planning to put my heart in this new one as i rushed the other one because i didnt think i was getting much encouragements.This time i would bear it in mind that am doing this to build my self up as a writer which is essential as a lawyer and not for any1.

Thanks!!!!!!

dear you tried, according to wat u said, u said it is ur first tym of writing nd uare a secondary school student I must say your piece was very interesting, kip it up more grease to your elbow.. nid to improve shaa, I see yhu getting dere

Ave started a new one titled 'The confession'.I really hope to meet you all there.


thanks Khay,i will try to improve

This is great!! Just like peak..... Ts in you!!

so interestin.i love it,more strength