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Re: . by Nobody: 6:42pm On Jan 10, 2015 |
JulietAKK:also me too |
Re: . by CrazyScientist: 6:47pm On Jan 10, 2015 |
Fatalveli: Yea, I logged in today. See below.
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Re: . by CrazyScientist: 6:53pm On Jan 10, 2015 |
I just followed my new moniker and I came to view this thread with SP.
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Re: . by Nobody: 6:56pm On Jan 10, 2015 |
Fatalveli i just dey check in now, bro no fall my hand for this story because i don dey like am, abeg no forqet drop me your contact number, i wan say make we yan for phone small.. Lols carry on boss |
Re: . by Fatalveli(m): 9:21pm On Jan 10, 2015 |
CrazyScientist:Damn you! You are SMALLPENIS, bring out my 7.7 avtomat and hit the butt of the gun on his head ferociously, where is onemansquad and emmykhul4love. The prodigal son has returned |
Re: . by Fatalveli(m): 9:46pm On Jan 10, 2015 |
Sweetdreamer:I no go fall ur hand, btw u've got many stories yourself, I'll read it up when I'm less busy |
Re: . by Nobody: 10:04pm On Jan 10, 2015 |
Fatalveli:alright bro, don't forqet to drop a comment |
Re: . by CrazyScientist: 10:51pm On Jan 10, 2015 |
Fatalveli: Brings my faule grete bombard ready for action , enjoying the story bro |
Re: . by Fembleez1(m): 12:43am On Jan 11, 2015 |
Fatalveli: Baba,na my club be that o |
Re: . by Fembleez1(m): 12:53am On Jan 11, 2015 |
Nice story bro,keep up the good work |
Re: . by Fatalveli(m): 9:30am On Jan 11, 2015 |
CrazyScientist:if u know u're man enough, drop ur weapon and let's fight with fist. Does Jackie chan snake hand, bring it on bro |
Re: . by Fatalveli(m): 9:32am On Jan 11, 2015 |
Fembleez1:Every Liverpool fc and Arsenal fc supporters are liable to die young |
Re: . by Fembleez1(m): 2:41pm On Jan 11, 2015 |
Fatalveli: Ur yansh dey smell |
Re: . by Onemansquad(m): 6:51pm On Jan 11, 2015 |
Fatalveli:dnt mind d yong man i don welcome am wit hot knock |
Re: . by Flakkydagirl: 10:30pm On Jan 11, 2015 |
D9ty7: I hail the writer and every other person readng this story. I beg to agree with D9ty7's observations,this story doesn't sound right,neither does it sound real.Hw come the young students re falling in love and crushing. With the few description of Hadijat,she's quite young and her body shouldn't be much developed. To make matters worse,you're talking about ur younger bro of 14 having sex,you make it sound like its something right.A boy that should have received the beating of his life at that moment. Don't forget this is a forum with other young readers and writers,its usually not good to infuse sex and sexual vibes or undertones among teenage students.And everything doesn't have to be able sex or flirtatous tone. You really have to reconstruct this piece,and flirting is a strong word to use for young students. That assembly saga was too fictional,nothing real about it and not believable too. Then Mr Taiwo's action's are brutal,we're talking about a private school here.so how can a teacher act like that unless he has just received an appointment letter from Shell or Chevron. How come he's reading on a monday morning instead of performing what he's been paid to do. I'm not trying to kill your work.I'm just saying what I observe,you can do better.Take time to construe your grammers,spacings and passage and a beautiful piece would emerge. |
Re: . by Nobody: 2:27am On Jan 12, 2015 |
Madam flakky i hail thee. Please come and update my husband na. |
Re: . by kekilika: 9:23am On Jan 12, 2015 |
I am getting my pen and paper. Seem this is the new biz in town. Just conjure incoherent storyline . NB: Flakkydagirl, nice criticism. Op, got me vexed when he said they flogged for wristwatch. Haba!!! How does that add to the purpose of me being there? |
Re: . by NOTORIOUSFATAL: 4:40pm On Jan 12, 2015 |
I'm kinda speechless ma'am, i'm a kind of person dat listens to corrections and since you and d9ty7 have the same view about it, i'll try to focus and deliver the best. Tanx ma'am Flakkydagirl: 1 Like |
Re: . by Fatalveli(m): 8:40pm On Jan 12, 2015 |
. 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: . by stuff46(m): 1:41pm On Jan 13, 2015 |
Fatalveli: just arrived. would come back to read it |
Re: . by kinwayne(m): 2:47pm On Jan 13, 2015 |
Cool story line boss. Great piece... *Oliver twist* give me more! |
Re: . by Fatalveli(m): 10:37am On Jan 18, 2015 |
I'm a nuisance, I go stupid, I go dumb like the 3 stooges...... I'm Lil Tunechi, sowie Fatalveli. Update drops after arsenal's match! Typing.......... |
Re: . by Fatalveli(m): 1:20pm On Jan 18, 2015 |
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Re: . by Champele(m): 2:34pm On Jan 18, 2015 |
Oya what happen or.......,im loving the story not minding the critics.its kinda real,everyone have his/her different experiences in life.i heard someone doubting the possiblity of flirting at that tender age,he/she should ask me when i start fingering.lolcarry on joor |
Re: . by harjibolar10(m): 7:07pm On Jan 18, 2015 |
Fatal, sorry...wale... No, fataveli, what happen now? Come tell me wah happen now!!!! Keep'em coming |
Re: . by Fatalveli(m): 7:10pm On Jan 18, 2015 |
Keep ur comments Cumming, I sight u @ harjiborla 'n' champele |
Re: . by Nobody: 7:50pm On Jan 18, 2015 |
harjibolar10:i don continue who offended the gods o |
Re: . by stuff46(m): 10:48am On Jan 20, 2015 |
Fatalveli: continue here na |
Re: . by Psalmwise(m): 3:19pm On Jan 20, 2015 |
Wow tank God I came early...,make I drop mai bag here Folowing like a mosqitoes... #coming back |
Re: . by Fatalveli(m): 7:43pm On Jan 20, 2015 |
Gud evening guys! Hw ya'll doin. Sowie 4 the wait, I've been extremely busy dat why. Update surely dropping tomorrow. |
Re: . by harjibolar10(m): 7:13am On Jan 24, 2015 |
Bluestarry:Oga me sir That's nice, I'll be back thou For now, I dey as I dey, cos I lost my phone... Anyways, continue, I will surely meet up whenever I'm back Keep the stories flowing Oga Fatalveli... No ask of me ooo |
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