emaculate99:
My Rhythmless Song
.
Silence speaks over the noise
Timeless walks in over my time
Dancing to the tune not played
Yet I sing my rhythmless song
.
I sat down with my flute
Playing a rhythmless song
Over and over again
But none is listening to me
.
Of who I seek to listen to me speak
In this deafening silence
Overtaking my heart in this graveyard
.
But, like a thought unknown in a known place,
I found you coming my way
Listening to my rhythmless song
Which you found interesting
And full of rhythms.
.
© Emaculate Ife

You learner?

Well, another great piece from you.

Keep writing like this and better and watch your fan base grow cuz you write good.

I observed that your personification and oxymoron usage in the poem, I guess such usage were employed to evoke the true meaning and message to the poem.

On a lighter note, what I find funny is your punctuation having its own paragraph.

timpaker:


You learner?

Well, another great piece from you.

Keep writing like this and better and watch your fan base grow cuz you write good.

I observed that your personification and oxymoron usage in the poem I guess such usage were employed to evoke the true meaning and message to of the poem.

On a lighter note, what I find funny is your punctuation having its own paragraph.

emaculate99:

Wow! thanks very much boss. The '.' was used to make the stanzas stand out. I will work harder on ur review boss.

timpaker:

Well, it made it look a little bit disorganised. A stanza is usually made with a paragraph, so give back the lines the 'full stop' it deserves and use your 'enter' key to create the stanzas.

Chuksemi:
This is better than you think it is. I can't critic this, I am still an underdog.