I really enjoyed Ur write-up, u are well appreciated. keep it up!

Wow love this I can't wait oooo to know what happen next. #Goodwork

nice story can't wait for d next update

As I was walking down a path
In the woods one day
I came across a vision that
Caught my eye
There was a lady standing
Right there beside a well and
I heard her wisper
"What u wish for, u can have"
Then the vision went away
I thought that I had lost her
The girl I had been waiting for
I cant believe I just saw her
She is the finest thing
I ever could imagin
Now I want her next to me,
Cause I want, cause I want more
Whoahhhhhh....











Mehnnn! This is what I want, I love this! But...but...I don't want to put this "but", but anyways let me put it shaa...but I want it to look more like phillipine movie, suspense. Yes suspense, and the wealth...reduce it a bit. Make the love part (kissing, huging, holding hands etc) much longer, and more romantic. I want some feelings that would gladens my heart and tickles my bum bum, u knw wat I mean

Good write up man,am really enjoying d story

Mhen nice one.. I park ooo. come and update.. loving this. but the gulf in class is so enormous

bros, u try oooo...abeg wich kind yeye test b dat? I feel lyk slapping d club manager. If not for blossompiration

nice work bruv, buh sometin, sometin is missing. in my supervisors voice "find it and fix it"

As e dey hot bro keep it coming.. mean while dis land is not for sale beware!!!

Nice one bro,but add a little suspense to it. It shouldn't be too predictable.

Nice one

Mehn.. Its. Fascinating .. I feel it, am enjoying it.with that said......

There are always side attractions in every movie,drama, play or novel which will link up to the main characters at the end...

Pablo may b dirty..drug peddler or something n that would hurt his chance with Blossom(js an idea)

Lastly, please check ur use of English, don't overlook any word or sentence, don't assume we'll understand especially when there is no twist in d act or character or setting, always b distinct in conversations n always make use of active sentences

Try to b less predictable tho its a general challange, try an teach us things like mayb history, new tech,streets in Lagos, Lagos life coz I know for someone that his mum sells something in aswani plus d escription of the area can b found in Ilasa,real Isolo,Ishaga,Mushiin,Ladipo,Real Ejigbo, 7 n 8.. For someone to drive to Bannan Island 4rm any of these areas mentioned will pass countless hold up... Follow mushin worse,oshodi through third mainland may b better buhb4 u get to third mainland na die.... This kinda info is captivating nteaches ur readers... I havnt been to newyork buh I know most avenues through novels

Always take time n make sure u exhaust every description of anything... Leave no stone unturned.... As it is ur 2paged chapter 12 can make become 12pages 4 someone with better narrative skills....

WELDONE

Where are you na..come and kwontinu o..

u beta com gimme the updates b4 i gun u down, u na 1 kill person? Nyc stori i must say,...no worry i get chinua achebe's number make i connect u kiakia

Great story, keep it up

Love ur story,pls keep it up.

Wow, can't believe my story made yesterday's front page, I was so busy yesterday that I didn't even check nairaland, I just came online this morning only to see the suprise. Thank you all for your criticisms and encouragement. In the spirit of happiness, im gonna be posting a lot of updates today. Once again thank you all.

Nawao...
@buzzboy we've been waitinq fah..
Nice story buh ah feel the way u make their wealth look is outrageous-2015 range rover.. Black ferrari.. Damn bruh..lol.
BTW, Ah fink the story is nice.. Ahde wait ooooo

please am following ur story. i woke this morning and all I did was to see if u had posted more of the story.plz more of it.keep de good work

plz can't wait for more of the stories

plz plz plz send de remain story

Where is the a lot of update na..buzzboy why are you exaggerating na... Update Abeg, waiting patiently

Abandoned thread I suppose.. @buzzboy, tell us whatsup na,

Abandoned thread I suppose.. @buzzboy, tell us whatsup na,

Buzzboy:
Wow, can't believe my story made yesterday's front page, I was so busy yesterday that I didn't even check nairaland, I just came online this morning only to see the suprise. Thank you all for your criticisms and encouragement. In the spirit of happiness, im gonna be posting a lot of updates today. Once again thank you all.

In M.I voice,

Why didn't you call?
Or even write us?
Staying for your updates all night?
Did you missed your flight?
Waiting for those updates..

Ogbeni cun continue ur story now Ewo ni werey gaan

Oga wetin gan sef, why this igara now? We dey wait now ,,,,,,,,,,haba

nice write up bro
waiting for more updates
more grease to your elbow

u want us to beg n beg before u continue de story na wao

Im so sorry you all. Typing...

Dedicated to missmossy, girlhaley, and ebigbola.
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Pablo was fuming with anger. How could Blossom stoop so low. It was just yesterday when one of his friends came up to him with the latest gist. 'guy, I wish you dey club yesterday, you for see drama' the guy began. 'which kin drama' Pablo asked uninterested. 'naso one guy wan sing, before we know wetin happen, all the speakers burn, 'really' pablo asked sarcastically. 'I never finish o, naso people begin shout for the guy head. Na God even save am say the wine bottle wey I target for hin head miss am, con scatter for floor, me wey I don dey ready to scatter im body with bottles if e sing nonsense'. 'wetin con happen? Pablo asked. 'The guy con carry guitar and mic start to sing one Bez son about fire abi na rainbow I no know, but the guy get voice sha, the beta part na when im babe run enter stage kiss am, the girl fine no be small. I even snap their pictures, con see am'. He brought out his phone and showed pablo the pictures. Pablo opened his mouth in shock. He saw Tope and Blossom, his own Blossom kissing. Guy wetin happen, you know dem? His friend asked him 'no, the girl just to fine o, he replied. That was yesterday, now he was thinking of ways to put an end to Tope. He knew he had lost Blossom but he had to make Tope pay. Tope had to feel pains too. He did not want to kill, he thought of sending his thugs to beat him but the area Tope lived didn't favour the decision. You don't send thugs to beat another thug in a land of thugs. He thought for a long time till he got an idea. He stood up, took his car keys and headed out.
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The day could not get any worse for Kemi Ojo, Tope's sister. Firstly, she was flogged for latecoming in her school. She forgot her biology notebook which was going to be marked and used as her continuous assessment so she automatically scored zero. Soon the closing bell rang and the students of goverment college obalende cheered happily and packed their bags for the day. Her sister was absent in school today due to a mild sickness. She packed her things and was about to go when she discovered that her purse was missing. She checked her class and her bag two times without luck. She started crying, not because of the purse but because of her transport fare that was inside the purse. Now, she had to trek home and the distance from her school to her house is not a laughing matter. She braced herself up and started the Isrealites Journey with all focus and concentration when the worst happened, thunder struck, and the rain began to pour down heavily as if it was angry at her. She kept walking because she knew that with each step she took she was getting closer to her destination. Suddenly, she noticed a silver Toyota Camry following her, she began to walk faster. The Toyota started horning, increasing is speed. She became scared and started walking faster, struggling to see clearly under the rain. The car finally caught up with her. 'hello' the dark driver said, she just kept on walking. 'you look wet and tired, why not let me drive you home. She didn't even answer or turn her face, she just kept walking hoping that he would get tired and go. 'are you not Tope's sister? That question made her stop. 'look, I am your brother's friend, let me just take you home safely. She thought about it for some seconds and finally entered his car, she saw no harm since he knew her brother. He gave her a towel to clean her face, hands and legs. Thank you' she said. 'anytime dear, what is your name' he asked. 'Oluwakemi' she answered. 'nice name, My name is Pascal Onyeka but I'll like you to call me Pablo'... He said and sped away.
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N.B. Im so sorry to you all, Ive been busy like mad, please bear with me, I dont want to rush the story and I hardly see time to write. Na the small time wey I get, I dey sacrifice, just to update. Im going to be updating tommorow morning.
Your comments, observations and criticisms are always welcome.