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Sin: New Necessities by Nobody: 6:15pm On Jun 13, 2016
SIN: NEW NECESSITIES

1.
such a deceit they say yet so difficult
to disregard. what's this embrace
that's so difficult to ignore?
i've tried to wash away
these thoughts
staining
mind

like black greasy engine oil on pure
white cotton fabrics. vessels do
try to stay strong in the face
of flogging waves; but
let's face it we all
seem to sail
towards
a lie

so many ships were sunk by these
gruesome waves; yet we keep
sailing; somehow we keep
failing to see how to live
thro' this necessary
mess. so we fail
win, fail, win
fail, win
fail


2.
this necessity are pretty-hued flames
which make us meals yet burn our
homes and obliterate treasures
into smoke and ashes. warm
us up during cold nights
we even got a squad
to put them out
when they
rage

night after night we seek warmth
inch by inch we drift closer to
an embrace with these lies
it's so easy to embrace
cuddling & kissing
away realities
declining
lust

it's sensual to slide into half-truths
especially when they bring us
into memorable orgasms
swift muscles-spasms
resulting in sleep
retrogression
recession
lesion


3.
the world has coloured retrogression
into bright hues of cheerful deceit
lies, lies, lies, lies, lies and lies
lay shelved at various malls
cancerous preservatives
keep them prolonged
we buy new lies
daily on sale:
we stock
death

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Re: Sin: New Necessities by joseph1832(m): 9:48pm On Jun 13, 2016
Your poem has the form of Nonet poem, but the meter structure doesn't match. It is very irregular.
Re: Sin: New Necessities by Nobody: 1:12am On Jun 14, 2016
joseph1832:
Your poem has the form of Nonet poem, but the meter structure doesn't match. It is very irregular.

Thanks a lot for your review. Most of my poetry fall within "Free Verse"... I write freely.
Re: Sin: New Necessities by joseph1832(m): 9:30am On Jun 14, 2016
artmostfair:


Thanks a lot for your review. Most of my poetry fall within "Free Verse"... I write freely.
Yea, most poets poem usually fall within Free Verse form. Try experimenting on other forms of poetry, it makes you a versatile poet.

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