Abigail watched Children sing and giggle out in the snow. It was the 23rd of December in America and she wasn't feeling Christmasy at all.

Her son, Dike, now Rick was held down in Rehab, for his alcohol and meth addiction.
Her daughter, Amara, now Becky had eloped in India with her woman lover.

Abigail sipped from her favourite chipped mug, when she saw a butterfly on her window pane and she noticed her bald head again. She was dying.

Illuminatus:
You have an interesting story idea. The first line told me that much. But you need to polish this. It seems jumbled and too consize. Rephrase some sentences and add a couple more and you'll have a better story.

I wish I could write more. But a concise story is what I wanted to make. A flash fiction piece.
Thanks for reading!

I'm going to start writing because of you. So start I can starve you with flash fiction.

(~_~)

Keep It Comin. I like this genre.

The weather changed. Dark clouds gathered above & a strong wind started blowing, bending trees & scattering dust & dirt everywhere.

A chill entered Etete as watched this strange phenomenon, transfixed to the spot, wondering what was the meaning of this.

" Jesus!" Etete shouted shrinking away from the being that was standing in front of him into his house.

The dust that had gathered as a result of the wind that was blowing made it impossible to see clearly.

A white light was shining from were the eye should be and It seemed to be wearing a white garment.

" Yes," the being said, light coming out of it's mouth. " I am Jesus. I was, am and is, and will forever be."

It was has if a high voltage ran through Etete body. He fell to the ground on his knees & prostrated before Him, closing his eye tightly, his body was not his any more.

TickTockTick.

Nothing happen, all was silent again. Etete opened his eyes & looked up only to see the boy that was preaching to him looking down at him strangely.

drippingink3:
I'm going to start writing because of you. So start I can starve you with flash fiction.

(~_~)

Please do. Let's get into a duel.

Gabrendo:
Keep It Comin. I like this genre.

Thanks for reading. Come again.

RemenZack:
Please do. Let's get into a duel.

I just a learner.

RemenZack:
Please do. Let's get into a duel.

duet abi duel?

Babacele:
duet abi duel?

A Duel.

I think I will take up the challenge. But Please RemenZack I still a learner so you have to be easy with me and make correct were needed.

drippingink3:

A Duel.

you can make it both a duel n a duet . lols.

RemenZack:
Please do. Let's get into a duel.

so how are we doing this.