[b] ****************Three limericks*****************,[\b]

If life was a journey, will you walk for miles
If you can't give money will you lease a smile
live life its the only way you learn
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When you smile let your heart and teeth be pure
You don't need the pen, a smile can end the war
Laugh it off, its a sure way to get strong
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If my heart was a dartboard will you hit the bull eye
Or will you just feel reluctant and kiss it goodbye after a few tries
Give and accept love, its the only way to get young

********* Candle Tear Drop *********
Tender as I am
Dangerous I could me
Tall and glued to the open
My attire so spotless
My luminous soul they harness
Poised for relaxation, romanticism or perfect evening
Kindle me with care all I asked
Greater show of brightness, I am tasked
Warm and soothing
Melting, dripping with time passing
Deeply burn till there is no me anymore
Blown out by the ones I love
And my flames dance up above
It is a privilege to have your face magnified
Once gone, forgotten by those I sacrificed
Another of my kind now takes my place and position
Alas same fate awaits him with much anticipation
Stay here long
Shine more bright
Be my song
For all the night
From candle to wax
Let the candle stick weep

Kruzilano:
********* Candle Tear Drop *********

I love this.... Great piece....

amberacious:

I love this.... Great piece....

thanks alot

**********************Feast of the ancestors*****************



Daybreak on a fertile land
The moon met only the lucky ones who sleep sound
Patience is finally over, palace of mgbago call
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To our ancestors and gods
Who shall pray to them for us
For our soil has breed forth new gift

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Call relatives both home and in diaspora
Let the gray hair meet the young
Only the best wrestler beat his chest..village king Kong

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Traditional music sets, please roll the drums
Pour more wine, bring more yam
We had spent most of our time in farms

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Ada nneyi thrills the crowd, ijele follows suits
Men grab palm leaves , boys scampers with joy
The chief priest is honored, his his white yam soaked in oil

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Bountiful harvest indeed, indeed my barn is bound to full
Another planting season so close
Her harvest is pregnant, sleep with hoes


(the new yam festival in nneyi umueri, anambra state)
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Nice piece of work. you sure are talented, keep it up.

Kruzilano:
[b] ****************Three limericks*****************,[\b]

If life was a journey, will you walk for miles
If you can't give money will you lease a smile
live life its the only way you learn
°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°
When you smile let your heart and teeth be pure
You don't need the pen, a smile can end the war
Laugh it off, its a sure way to get strong
°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°′°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°°
If my heart was a dartboard will you hit the bull eye
Or will you just feel reluctant and kiss it goodbye after a few tries
Give and accept love, its the only way to get young

Hi Kruzilano. This poem striked my heart in a pleasant way. Your concluding line was read over probably a hundred times. The truth is plain; only love - enough of it can make young whatever is deemed old.

This would have ended in the previous paragraph if not for your opening sentence by which you indicated that the poem is to be of three limericks. I think your idea of limerick is slightly different from mine. A limerick is a five line per stanza poem with a rhyme scheme of aabbc and it is usually humorous in nature. It's very uncommon to see limericks express strong emotions like you're trying to do in your poem. That's what knew.

Is this a variant style of the limerick just like we have for the two sonnets?

llaykorn:





Hi Kruzilano. This poem striked my heart in a pleasant way. Your concluding line was read over probably a hundred times. The truth is plain; only love - enough of it can make young whatever is deemed old.

This would have ended in the previous paragraph if not for your opening sentence by which you indicated that the poem is to be of three limericks. I think your idea of limerick is slightly different from mine. A limerick is a five line per stanza poem with a rhyme scheme of aabbc and it is usually humorous in nature. It's very uncommon to see limericks express strong emotions like you're trying to do in your poem. That's what knew.

Is this a variant style of the limerick just like we have for the two sonnets?

wow first I must say i am honored to have u leave a comment on my thread... thanks alot... regarding the title.. it was suppose to be of 5 line 2 stanzas buh I decided not to and see how d outcome... I intentionally omitted one line, broke it down to 3 line per stanza.. apologies to poetry tho...

Teensway:
Nice piece of work. you sure are talented, keep it up.

. thanks a lot ...... I doff....