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| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by AlamienDagash(m): 9:42pm On Aug 23, 2017 |
stephenGee12:thanks bro will work on it. |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by hormobolanle: 10:59pm On Aug 23, 2017 |
hmmmmm some people will just be finding for trouble not bin in d mood to read all dis while Daz y it seems like am not online n now I kn av got alot of catching up to do princ007 happy birthday in arrears Llnp alamiendagash am kinda confuse o it is one of d twin dat kill d parent Abi uncle?cos Iyam not understanding |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by Hadampson(m): 8:50am On Aug 24, 2017 |
Akinwale14:Yes oh Let EmpressT serve us some JUICE  |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by Hadampson(m): 8:53am On Aug 24, 2017 |
herosakin777:Welcome bro. What would you like to take? |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by Hadampson(m): 8:55am On Aug 24, 2017 |
AlamienDagash:I don come as e dey hot oh |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by Hadampson(m): 8:57am On Aug 24, 2017 |
hormobolanle:  |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by AlamienDagash(m): 10:50am On Aug 24, 2017 |
hormobolanle:Na dem uncle Buh the uncle lied and tell hasan that his bro killed em parents and run away and said same to husayn |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by rachealfst(f): 12:05pm On Aug 24, 2017 |
Thanks for the mention. Well done, following. 1 Like |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by ChizzyMaris(f): 12:29pm On Aug 24, 2017 |
AlamienDagash:Thanks dear. Hadampson, any refreshments? |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by AlamienDagash(m): 1:00pm On Aug 24, 2017 |
Part Three Hasan has already loathe his bro acutely, he was in his new bedroom entrusted to him by his uncle, nuhuh tries his best to exhilarates him, but the more he try the more hasan became morose. HUSAYN Its been a month now, Husayn has suffered a lot, he'd encounters with many ordeal, he is livid with life, he is no longer ecstatic, to cover up, he took an oath upon himself that he'll always be staunched and honest, maybe God will consider him and forgive his brother, he has berserk a lot now is time to desists it, he had to let the past be. “he is so pang as he lurched into the market, everything now seem to exist multiple, “ your brother killed your parents, it was by accident, you got to run, run! This echoed to him and he faint. Husayn opened his eyes slowly as snail walk, he was at someone's home, two people are looking at him, he shook his head to see clearly but immediately he feels a severe pain in his head, he feel a bandage wrapped round his head. “easy you don't need to worry said a feminine voice he rubs his eyes and could see a woman and beside her was a man looking sympathetic. He sighed a heavy relief and closed his eyes. ****** ****** ****** Husayn was in uncle John trade shop,regularly husayn and John would went to the market in the morning and came back at noon, husayn was always ambidextrous, he dare not to be dire in working cuz he don't want to be a nuisance to his saviour. Husayn was resting in the shop, at the context some lousy men barged in whistling, he wishes no strife will arise but he was left stunned and perplexed over what his bare eyes witnesses. Thanks for reading. 2 Likes |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by Akinwale14(m): 1:45pm On Aug 24, 2017 |
Hadampson:Lolzz OK no p |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by Akinwale14(m): 1:52pm On Aug 24, 2017 |
AlamienDagash I must confess this story is wonderful and interesting,,,more update pls 1 Like |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by souloho19(m): 2:42pm On Aug 24, 2017 |
Hmm...this uncle must be uncle scar..nice one bro. I'm following 1 Like |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by AlamienDagash(m): 4:54pm On Aug 24, 2017 |
Akinwale14:thanks mehn |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by Blecool(f): 5:10pm On Aug 24, 2017 |
Following bumper to bumper... But can u please break down some of u grammar ehn. I dnt have to read dis wit a dictionary na(smile). Nice story u gat here 1 Like |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by adontcare(f): 5:16pm On Aug 24, 2017 |
Thank God for husyne's life. Well great story line. But some places u used past tense instead of present continuous tense. |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by ghostwritter(m): 6:27pm On Aug 24, 2017 |
I like what I had read but pls improve on ur tenses, your conversational quotes, ur suspence, reduce the unecessary vocabularies and most of all make ur story captivating with every post. Readers get bored if stories lack all the above...I dey ur back. 1 Like |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by Eyinimofeoluwa(f): 7:28am On Aug 25, 2017 |
Hmmmm Nice one tho |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by Hadampson(m): 10:34am On Aug 25, 2017 |
ChizzyMaris:Ogogoro dey. Shey make i bring am? |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by uminem02(m): 11:08am On Aug 25, 2017 |
AlamienDagash:I don arrive!!...thanks 4 d mention |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by ChizzyMaris(f): 8:33pm On Aug 25, 2017 |
Hadampson:No o, make I dey sip my sachet water.. |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by AlamienDagash(m): 4:28pm On Aug 26, 2017 |
adontcare:thanks a lot I'll work on it. |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by AlamienDagash(m): 4:28pm On Aug 26, 2017 |
Blecool:thanks dear I appreciate but please stop flattering me 1 Like |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by AlamienDagash(m): 4:34pm On Aug 26, 2017 |
ghostwritter:OK Boss I really appreciate your support thanks a lot I'll try harder |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by Nobody: 1:15pm On Aug 29, 2017 |
I have arrived. Hadampson, shift yourself go one corner, make I see road well. Lemme go and start reading. |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by yhungbrowhne(m): 6:15pm On Aug 29, 2017 |
AlamienDagash: thanks BRo m grateful for this |
| Re: Beyond The Closed Doors by ChizzyMaris(f): 1:47pm On Sep 01, 2017 |
I think this story will be interesting. But the narration is a bit scattered and I don't seem to understand what's going on exactly. So like ghostwritter said, "I like what I had read but pls improve on ur tenses, your conversational quotes, ur suspence, reduce the unecessary vocabularies and most of all make ur story captivating with every post. Readers get bored if stories lack all the above". But most important is the tenses and quotes, that would make it easier and less stressful to read. Ride on. |
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