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biife
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TEXTURES OF DARKNESS
glimpses of foggy feelings outlined in rough texture of darkness cataclysmic sadness enshrouded in sunken sockets of eerie eyes in broken skull
my fears are my self immortal thoughts bargaining an end adult eyes immobiled by painted devil dilating pupils picturing a final closure deathly sight of holes of hidden hearts
my fears are my self unshared soul divided by self self-shut self-hidden self-sold in dungeon of nothingness in cold blood of sudden cessation
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beneli (m)
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Nice poem biife! Have you considered posting your poems on the poetry section? It's on the left hand corner of this Literature page.
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biife
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thanks!
posting it here was by accident, i\'m glad someone like the poem.
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queeneli (f)
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nice one biife
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biife
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thanks dear,
i\'ve just posted another poem in the poetry section; it\'s titled: gsm [god send mine]
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dominique (f)
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i don't really get poems, but this one seems nice. what is it about?
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biife
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the poet persona here is expressing certain feelings that he nurses inside; negative thoughts that literally eat away his well-being,
as it appears, from the refrain [the one-line stanza], his fears are unfounded- the poet persona strikes one as a depressed mind.
but interestingly, he realizes this, he sees himself as being isolated from others mentally and physically, he ascribes this to his being knocked out of existence as it were.
hope i tried!?
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cooljoe (m)
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TEXTURES OF DARKNESS
glimpses of foggy feelings outlined in rough texture of darkness cataclysmic sadness enshrouded in sunken sockets of eerie eyes in broken skull
my fears are my self immortal thoughts bargaining an end adult eyes immobiled by painted devil dilating pupils picturing a final closure deathly sight of holes of hidden hearts
my fears are my self unshared soul divided by self self-shut self-hidden self-sold in dungeon of nothingness in cold blood of sudden cessation
Men you more than tried, this poem is nice. Top draw, if you wish, will you please write another, possibly about christmas.
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dominique (f)
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nice work. i'll try to appreciate poetry better
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biife
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thanks very much, cooljoe [please understand, i don\'t believe in christmas!]; but i\'ll drop another line none the less.
and thanks dear dominique,
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biife
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DOMINIQUE!
i\'ll be patient, even if it will take eternity.
with your mind\'s hand hold the pen and with the pen caress the face of your paper, or, use your mind\'s fingers to rap on the keyboard of your pc, invoke it and spread your thought across the page it reveals,
let your thoughts break unhindered, let it flow like the teardrops that course across the land of your face,
let it flow still, over the mounds of your bosom feel the hot teardrops as they warm your heaving heart; they belong to you,
think of the thousand tears of teardrops in the storehouse of your eyes, that beauty emblazoned in the recesses of your soul;
senorita, won\'t you pour me a drink from your bosom?
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biife
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what do you say to this?
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cooljoe (m)
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@ biife,
I love and appreciate creative writing, keep it up bro.
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