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Shaz (f)
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Nice to see your staying active on this rap section, so i might as well help out in a few things.
Noonebody has been born with the rap skills and all, it takes things to make things work. Usually on other rap forums, you get people to analyse your verses - also known as 'feed'. No one does that here which is a big shame, thats why the talents here keep dwindling. Anyhoo, I'll try 'feeding' this one. .
makavele is back on da scenario~making hits like two brothas at a game of mario~gambling's sweet the rhymes are there, but whaddu mean 'back' when you never were here? and what does the 'game of mario' and 'gambling' have to do with 'making hits'??
there's alot on my mind~am going to let it go hit me wit the music~ and let me start to flow just a filler. . nothing spectacular
da industry aint easy as you people think am spitting out lines to make ladies wink not a strong line either
jumpin in and dashing out~like TITANIC, you're sure to sink am tarzan and wit a length of rope i could swing the first line really din't have a meaning, sorry have you ever tried multies?? eg.
like titanic, you are sure~to~sink i'm leaving pricks smashed with no drugs to cure~this~sick
something like that. . it gives your verses more reps than single rhymes
motherfcukerz said my name shouldn't be up here but nairaland's worst nightmare is right here why rhyme with the same word, 'here'??
i've got lyrics with canines that could tear your bone marrows, wats all over u,? its called F-E-A-R when you separate words like 'F-E-A-R', then it's meant to be pronounced as single letters not a word. and if that's what you intended, then, those things don't rhyme
i'm climbing higher up nairaland's rap tree its going to sweep you all like katrina's wind nice sim - the katrina wind thing- but still you haven't worded that bar well
you niggaz 'bout to hit the graves like PAC versus BIG it's a touch of difference when am handling the M-I-C the end?? that was not even close to a good closer. . i doubt Hybrid would even take this for a 1 Star rating, not to talk of two
anyways, that's just ma 2 cents.
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