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StephenP (m)
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I said yes I would wait for you.
I stood back and watched you hold him,
Turned away when you kissed him,
Folded my arms like you folded my love,
Stared in pain,
Jealousy fed the flame,
Wanted to hate him,
Cause waiting weighed me down.
Your lies were gravity so my feet never left the ground,
Couldn’t float on clouds,
Though the butterflies in my stomach took me high.
It felt like you lifted my love and hung it to die,
I watched you touch him and it killed all I had inside,
The tears I cried,
Brought no closure,
The anger I released,
Fed on my spirit like a disease.
Erosion of the heart,
Remnants of disillusion.
You said, “It’s me baby
I just don’t know how to tell him”
So I played the common fool,
Threw away the golden rule.
I became your tool,
Made me disposable,
You used me till you were through.
I said yes, I would wait for you.
Should have listened to your reply,
Should have heard in the silence of your smile,
You were only planning to stay a while.
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blissfullynaughty
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Why on earth have people started posting poetry in the main literature section when there is clearly a Poem section?  |
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ariblaze (m)
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neat,
sad
it sounds helpless
got a title for it yet?
JILT
comes to mind
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StephenP (m)
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Why on earth have people started posting poetry in the main literature section when there is clearly a Poem section? Damn. Calm down cause it's not that serious. I didn't realize I posted there instead of the Poetry section where I posted my other poem. Happy now? neat,
sad
it sounds helpless
got a title for it yet?
JILT
comes to mind
I haven't come up with titles yet but Jilt seems pretty simple. |
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davidylan (m)
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Shoot boy! That's great.
It reads more like the verses of a song though.
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LadyT (f)
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Its really good. I can't write nothing like that!
I'm not 100% sure I understand the line should of HEARD the silence in your smile . Silence to what hun?
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StephenP (m)
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Its really good. I can't write nothing like that!
I'm not 100% sure I understand the line should of HEARD the silence in your smile . Silence to what hun?
Thanks sweetie. I decided to change it "known that". I hope it reads better now?   |
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davidylan (m)
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Thanks sweetie. I decided to change it "known that". I hope it reads better now? no. the original line was better. |
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StephenP (m)
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Ok. Back to heard.
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Tetchiness (f)
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Silent smileis "I want to suck your blood"  |
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stillwater (f)
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A silent smile is like all other forms of nonverbal communication, in which, according to the poem, the jilted lover failed to read into but rather took for granted. @Stephen I'm not a critique of literary works and I probably don't know the terminologies associated poetry but you do have talent. Put it to good use.  |
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StephenP (m)
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A silent smile is like all other forms of nonverbal communication, in which, according to the poem, the jilted lover failed to read into but rather took for granted.
Yup. |
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nonso3k (m)
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cool.kind of like the poem,it makes some sense
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StephenP (m)
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cool.kind of like the poem,it makes some sense
Thanks |
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