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Janji (m)
Review My Poem - Making Friends
« on: July 05, 2008, 08:29 PM »

Prior
To the feeling of being inferior
Some may smell so good with "Christian Dior"
But they lack a strong interior

Against interacting is a sword
Held to their throat if they dialogue a word

They conclude that making friends isn’t necessary
But the way they cry inside is extra ordinary

Some would always make friendship tarry
Looking for friends to carry
And adding more friends to their diary

But for some
The habit of making friends is yet to come

They find it hard to express
And this leaves them in depress
For they wish they had friends in excess

I ask
Why can’t they voice out?
So that they could sprout
And appreciate what friendship is all about

This writing is their call out
Giving them the right route

That to make friends is simple
Example
Break your inner shackle
As you move with your ankle
Say "hello" and cause a sparkle

But if they return a frown
Never loose your crown
Don’t let reject make you drown
But remember
That there is someone in the next town
Even downtown
That needs you, for they are down

So interact and don’t feel inferior
For a little confidence
Would prove to others, your essence
And in the end, magnify your presence
Hence
Live and extrovert
Draw people close like an advert
So that your presence creates a concert

So don’t let your friend counts go inert
But be a friendship expert
prophetwis
Re: Review My Poem - Making Friends
« #1 on: July 14, 2008, 02:37 PM »

that was a fin entry .i enjoyed the rhyme.but please make more use of poetic licence to make it flow more.when writing poetry u are allowed to break conventional english grammatical rules
Janji (m)
Re: Review My Poem - Making Friends
« #2 on: July 14, 2008, 07:26 PM »

men, while scratching my head
i really don't understand the poetry license thingy
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