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StephenP (m)
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I've been feeling really patriotic recently and I don't know why but this is what I came up with.
I am Nigeria.
For all her good and bad I take her in and love her Though she has been abused, and broken unable to see my devotion 'Cause all she has known has been commotion and more sun Heat that bleeds sweat on necks without movement Long treks cause traffic is dense and hours have been spent only to move a few steps
And when night falls the darkness is blinding Candles and lanterns light the way because NEPA is hiding But we do not fear the dark
Nigeria lives And dances, moves her body to the music Afro-beat, hip-hop, reggae, soukous, We live in the music Toasting to a days hard work with bottles of Star and Guinness
Nigeria lives! though the economy crashes upon her with bombs of bad leaders They rape her of her glory, they use her and turn their head when she cries Nigeria lives! rich or poor, she survives Poverty reflects the reasoning that forces us to provide no matter the means or effect
She lives in constant schemes to deplete riches of men Even thieves have mouths to feed besides theirs she said Even good men must bend the law for a portion of greed Hunger forces them to steal, but greed convinces them to kill
And so Nigeria You are my beautiful disaster You are my plate of soaked garri and groundnut on a lazy afternoon You are dirty streets and overflowing gutters Mothers carrying their young wrapped upon their backs at the market place Fights erupting at junctions “how u take jam me, abi you no see road abi you dey craze”
You are my first love and after school love letters read under the mango tree You are noisy and scary rides on Danfo buses Pure water and gala from the street hawker during traffic pauses You are deadly roads that lead me home
And though my love for you weathers all storms I can’t help but wonder if all the damage will ever be undone When you can become the vision of greatness that we all carry in our spirit Pride for a country we barely visit. We rep the green white, green and say we miss it We say we love her, yet we are complacent To rebuild her, to treat her like the queen, the mother Land of glory and origination
Some say she has refused it She will never learn they say She’s dug too deep into poverty, gluttony and crime And has become a concubine of a rich man who taps her oil Drains her bare and leaves none to provide for her own soil
They say show her you love her But I don’t know how It’s like trying to convince a heart I have incessantly broken to trust me now I am Nigeria Both good and bad I carry her burden I sing her praise loud Her toxin chokes my lung, and the humidity grabs the pores of my skin Forcing me to open my eyes and remember where I am and where I’ve been So that I may know who I am, Who I'll always be, Naija 4 life
© Copyright July 2008 <- Thou shall not steal copy this poem . . . especially you StealingCaringSoul. It is under the Copyright Act.
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stillwater (f)
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Woooow, finally I got a wow moment. That was captivating. It was comical (because I laughed when I read some lines especially the Nepa and soaked garri thingy) and excruciatingly thoughtful . I like how you make use of words. Referring Nigeria to a concubine of a rich man was classic. You've got some talent, bro  . These are interesting quotes. . . Even good men must bend the law for a portion of greed Hunger forces them to steal, but greed convinces them to kill And has become a concubine of a rich man who taps her oil Drains her bare and leaves none to provide for her own soil I am Nigeria Both good and bad I carry her burden I sing her praise loud Her toxin chokes my lung, and the humidity grabs the pores of my skin Forcing me to open my eyes and remember where I am and where I’ve been So that I may know who I am, Who I'll always be, Naija 4 life
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syren
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And has become a concubine of a rich man who taps her oil Drains her bare and leaves none to provide for her own soil
Yeah that one did it for me too  Your words are gold Stephen and extremely insightful. 
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StephenP (m)
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@stillwater and syren, I'm happy you girls liked it.
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rotimy (m)
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Very thoughtful and comical. I love the wordings, so powerful and rich! Please write for us I AM AN AFRICAN
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StephenP (m)
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Very thoughtful and comical. I love the wordings, so powerful and rich! Please write for us I AM AN AFRICAN
Thanks. I'D try to write on that topic but I prefer to write on topics I feel like as opposed to writing what others want me to.
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onyinye2 (f)
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i loved how you described your "love" for nigeria in a sense of a woman. the way you described her emotions and senses was incredible. what she likes and how she acts. i mean i don't know if i could ever put as much imagery in my poetry. got any tips??
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StephenP (m)
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i loved how you described your "love" for nigeria in a sense of a woman. the way you described her emotions and senses was incredible. what she likes and how she acts. i mean i don't know if i could ever put as much imagery in my poetry. got any tips??
Thanks. I don't know what to tell you, it basically just comes to me.
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onyinye2 (f)
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Thanks. I don't know what to tell you, it basically just comes to me.
can you at least give me a critic on my poems??
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