Can You Put In The Next Line To Rhyme?

Any takers?

What do you mean Seun, I don't think my eyes make jest.
I posted my lines here yesterday, at the Poser's request
So what happened? Is it a knock on my/our scoff
of the idiotic topic that you would deign to take it off???

I still don't think you got a right topic for this project
Maybe if you suggest another, we can see better prospect.
Don't just take off all you do not like, talk's free, no?
The fun is really in the talking, not just blind follow follow.

Let's rhyme. Let's put our words to use. Let's flow
But don't let's begin with topics that're way too s/low.
"The leaders we deserve", was that what he said we'd send?
Ptuah. We'll never get them anyway so why pretend.

Abeg talk something better o jare, well I won't suggest.
It's yours to do, we'll just write, or we'll just protest.

KT

this poem's got a bad start.topic is great tho and anything worth doing is worth doing well,so
isuggest we start all over with a R.E.A.L.rhyme.
                   
                                      leaders we need
                                      if we'll but agree
                                      that to lead exceed
                                      the want of greed

                                      it's all so plain
                                      that greed is the chain
                                      that all but reigns
                                      in our leaders veins
                                      so leaders we have but leaders we want

that's great mukina,
                                         
                                         if they'll but leaders be fit
                                         then they will the pace set
                                         in the way of morality
                                         for a greater sense of nationalism
                                         so leaders we have but leaders we want

 
   TO EACH LEADER
   (reim dich oder ich fress dich!  )

   AND TO YOU

   indeed!
   we will bleed,
   if greed
   does lead.

   with speed,
   its seed
   will succeed
   if we cede.

   don’t heed
   its plead;
   there’s no need
   for this weed.

   we’d
   be freed
   if we did impede
   its misdeed.

make all of una come togeda form rap group. no dey waste una talent for hia ooo. Because i swear me i no fit rhyme two words sef.

I could swear I had a rhyme here someday
Where is it now?
Anyway,

Our land is a whore
steady switching beds.

"What she needs"  they conjecture,
"is a good head"

But she needs much more -
good heads to bear the head.

She had one once, yet she got him sore
He lasted 7 months and he was no more

If she were to have just one more
she only but looks back in looking forward

So from today onward
Let her stare reality in her callous face:

She cannot afford a good head
For a good head sits on heads

She has no heads to bear up a good head.

point of correction,nanaboi, our land is not  a whore. our leaders are

hey guys,took time out to compile what we've written so far with some slight variations and additions.what do you think about it? any more additions?

                                      leaders we need
                                      if we'll but agree
                                      that to lead exceed
                                      the want of greed

                                      it's all so plain
                                      that greed is the chain
                                      that all but reigns
                                      in our leaders veins
                                      so leaders we have but leaders we want

                                     yes, leaders we have
                                     who have no heart
                                      for the common man
                                      nor mind to depart

                                      from their wicked path
                                      and life of sham
                                      they've signed a pact
                                      with so little impact
                                      SHAME! is the word to describe our leaders

                                      indeed we will bleed,
                                      if greed does lead
                                      with speed,its seed
                                      will succeed if we cede

                                      leaders we do want''
                                      leaders we want, leaders we need
                                      whose desire to rule supercedes
                                      the want of greed but leads
                                      in deeds of noble breed   
                                                                                           

                                      leaders who rip off our benefits
                                      leaders who live off our sweat
                                      leaders who disgrace nationality
                                      leaders who have no patriotism

                                      if they'll but leaders be fit,
                                      then they will the pace set
                                      in the way of morality
                                      for a greater sense of nationalism

                                      so leaders we have but leaders we want
                                      pave our roads with tar not sand
                                      our street with houses not shasm
                                      our presence with respect not suspect
                                      our lives with comfort not murmur
                                      our hearts with pride not spite

                                      leaderswho are no pliant slaves
                                      but valiant and brave
                                      who will stand up to vices
                                      of cruel and abusive injustice

                                      ethnic segregation and deprivation
                                      and the corrosive monster called corruption
                                      leaders who are heroes
                                      to lift us from this
                                      that is the leaders we want!

*blushing*

@Chichimma: Daalu! Your words are so encouraging. 

I started this topic as a way to express my feelings on the way this country is being run,
its good to know others feel the same too

a lot of the poems here are so good,if not for the msg they express,they can be used in any poetic competition.

but u and i know,what the leaders we have will feel about that, because,



                       leaders we have,sweat and strive
                       to make sure their regimes survive.
                       they'll intimidate,harass and incarcarate,
                       till all opposition capitulate.

                       with one view point and one only,
                       oppossing will be a folly.
                       EFCC,ICPC potent tools with which
                       opponent are stifled and some even impeached.
                       
                       draconian laws meant to subjugate the masses,
                       cause soldiers they are,but without khakis.
                       public funds stolen and invested in private ventures,
                       what the future hold for us,we are not sure.

                       now 2007 is here,where will they take us next,
                       they'll kepp things as they are at best.
                       so i'll just sit at home and bend my head in shame,
                       because i know,come 2007,it'll just be more of thesame.

sup Teno

       been down with pneumonia.that explains d absence.
trying to take the msg out, hmmm
i'll be careful if i were u though.
newspapers will want money before they'll publish,thats why i don't believe anything i read in them
only sure truth in papers are adverts,comon they are an extention of the system which we are talking about.
so i'm not suprised.

let me step aside a little for others to contribute.

cheers

yeah we should, guess we should not underestimate the nairaland audience.


walking around everyday as if in a daze,
     submitting to the antics of our leaders.
with 2007 around d corner,here comes the next phase.

     possible culpability can we be accused of,
accept things as they are regardless of what,
     guess of this suffering, we can't get enough.




Teno take over let's see how far we can take this

                                      leaders we need
                                      if we'll but agree
                                      that to lead exceed
                                      the want of greed

                                      it's all so plain
                                      that greed is the chain
                                      that all but reigns
                                      in our leaders veins
                                      so leaders we have but leaders we want
                                         
                                     yes, leaders we have
                                     who have no heart
                                      for the common man
                                      nor mind to depart

                                      from their wicked path
                                      and life of sham
                                      they've signed a pact
                                      with so little impact
                                      SHAME! is the word to describe our leaders!


                                      leaders who rip off our benefits
                                      leaders who live off our sweat
                                      leaders who disgrace nationality
                                      leaders who have no patriotism

                                      if they'll but leaders be fit,
                                      then they will the pace set
                                      in the way of noble morality
                                      for a greater sense of nationalism

                                      indeed we will bleed,
                                      if greed does lead
                                      with speed,its seed
                                      will succeed if we cede
 
                                      don’t heed
                                      its plead;
                                      there’s no need
                                      for this weed.

                                      we’d
                                      be freed
                                      if we did impede
                                      its misdeed.


                                      leaders we have,sweat and strive
                                      to make sure their regimes survive.
                                      they'll intimidate,harass and incarcarate,
                                      till all opposition capitulate.

                                      with one view point and one only,
                                      oppossing will be a folly.
                                      EFCC,ICPC potent tools with which
                                      opponent are stifled and some even impeached.
                       
                                      draconian laws meant to subjugate the masses,
                                      cause soldiers they are,but without khakis.
                                      public funds stolen and invested in private ventures,
                                      what the future hold for us,we are not sure.

                                      now 2007 is here,where will they take us next,
                                      they'll kepp things as they are at best.
                                      so i'll just sit at home and bend my head in shame,
                                      because i know,come 2007,it'll just be more of the same   

                                      walking around everyday as if in a daze,
                                      submitting to the antics of our leaders.
                                      with 2007 around d corner,here comes the next phase.

                                      possible culpability can we be accused of,
                                      accept things as they are regardless of what,
                                      guess of this suffering, we can't get enough.


                                      Leades we do not have today;
                                      Leaders we shall have some day.
                                      We shouldn't pick our leaders in a hurry.
                                      Doing so in the past has made us sorry.
                                      Leaders we do not have today.
                                      Leaders we shall have some day   


                                      leaders we do want
                                      leaders we want, leaders we need
                                      whose desire to rule supercedes
                                      the want of greed but leads
                                      in deeds of noble breed   

                                      so leaders we have but leaders we want
                                      who'll pave our roads with tar not sand
                                      our streets with houses not shasm
                                      our presence with respect not suspect
                                      our lives with comfort not murmur
                                      our hearts with pride not spite

                                      leaders who are no pliant slaves
                                      but valiant and brave
                                      who will stand up to the vices
                                      of cruel and abusive injustice,

                                      ethnic segregation and deprivation
                                      and the corrosive monster called corruption
                                      leaders who are heroes
                                      to lift us from this throes
                                      of this misplaced scepter of leaders

                                      And for each lost word, each vain spat in lure
                                      for our well deserved voice will not again go
                                      unclaimed, unasked for, ignored - that for sure.
                                      We now see clear. And we will never stay low.

                                      No more, no more. Yes, no more.
                                      Give us leaders, but not like we had before

that's about it.is it long enough or should we beat john milton to it? tho i think we've about said it all but then , we want it as long as possible.so any more additions?










             
   


                                     

IMHO, the best verse came from nanaboi.

But then, a quick spit. . .

Good leaders? Street dreams, street~dreams!,
with the masses like street urchins, to feed we lick~bins,
while they floss in 26 inch~rims,
as a common man, always had dreams of making it big in Vegas,
then i woke up and suddenly realised my ass was still Lagos,
hustlingbustling,
flies off my body i be tossing~ 'em,
sweat pours down in bullets,
toiling while see that politician livin' life to the fullest,
we all wish for what's supposed~to~be,
but reality contrasts my thinking, so it's opposed~to~me,
like a class of dullards, we live in failed promises,
strivin' to make a living, delayed promises,
but when the night's done,
the morning comes,
because even the Moon has to step down for the Sun!,

@ gbadex

hmmmm, that waz tight,can u make this into a song,
u'll never know u might becomeour prez's next idris abdulkareem.

rap was not what i had in mind when i started this, but reading your lyrics,
i've gotta ask ne1 who can spit on this to do so,
let r voice be heard pips.

peace,i'm out.

i'll be waiting