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Bigtee (m)
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NIce story but whats up with the nollywood home video mentality, stopping when it gets interesting. nice effort, Hook up with me, i'm an upcoming writer too and i can hook you up with some good website where u can improve your skills with. thumbs up
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K2DaC (f)
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no i don't care if u criticize my story really i don't just
don't insult me because it gon' be one
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K2DaC (f)
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once again u guys im not a writer ohhh i don't wrtie that good , i just come up with story lines, get it?
but i write stuff like these for fun
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K2DaC (f)
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but thanks to the people who said nice things lol afterall nice things are nice to hear thnks diddy for having my back  |
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Teezy (f)
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KC, girl dts a good story u got there, don't listen to none of these peeps trynna put u down, aii. Its a good start mami keep it up  |
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K2DaC (f)
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thnks t  |
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Teezy (f)
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u welcome hun |
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diddy4 (m)
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i got your back anytime girl.
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Outkast (f)
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K2Dac, I liked it, we're awaiting more.
Your writing style is reminiscent of Authors like Eric Jerome Dickey, Sister Soulja, Mary.B.Morrisson.
Many people on the forum, probably aren't familiar with their work and are not used to the style of writting or the use of language, so bear with them.
Girl go on, keep writting.
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K2DaC (f)
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awww yeah i read their books i love erick J dickey n Omari tyree n sistah souljah thnks diddy i got urs too |
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hot-angel (f)
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Post the next part already. Or do i have to start writing my own stories too?  |
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2fine4u (f)
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like fo real, am so dyin to kno what happened to Shawn boi, that wretched cheat  i hope the girls rip him apart  @ KC, u got a fan here so please i want more of tha story |
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K2DaC (f)
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lmfaoo yall hold on don't worry and lizzy write it |
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K2DaC (f)
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Brandy: This is some pathetic shitt right here! Shawn i can't believe you. You know what if you can tell this little girl whats going on i will.
Toya: Lil girl? who are you calling little girl , bitchh you don't want none.
Brandy: (Laughs and gets in her face) girl im not the one to be messing with so lay off that.
Shawn: Brandy stop please
Toya: (sigh) Shawn tell me who she is before i loose it
Shawn: Toya i don't know how to tell you this , she's my,
Brandy: Girl. Yes im his girl now be gone bitchh because he don't want you.
Toya: (shock) She's your girl? wait i don't understand
Brandy: Oh my Gah , this bitchh is slow.
Shawn: Brandy shut the mess up damn! could you just give Toya and I some time?
Brandy: Nigga who is you talking to like that? You know what I'm going to just leave yall i know your ass will be wanting me later on , ASSHOLE!
Brandy steps outside.
Toya: How long has she been your girl Shawn?
Shawn: She's not my girl! Listen ive been seeing her,
Toya : (yelling) for how long Shawn?
Shawn: 3months
Toya slaps Shawn right in the face.
Toya: (crying) How could you do this to me? I love you so much Shawn, i thought you loved me , so you mean to tell me you've been faking this love shitt all this while?
Shawn: Baby, i love you but i gotta be real with you i love her too.
Toya: (still cryin) Why Shawn? Why? after all i've done for you. We've been through so much together and you threw that away all on her? I can't believe you.
Shawn: Baby im sorry, i swear to you i am. It just happened, it was when you and i got in that huge arguement
Toya: I don't care why you did it, i was faithful to you. Ive been nothing but faithful to your ass all this while. You know what i will never forgive you for this you can have that bitchh because its over, im out!
Shawn: Toya! come back ( touches her)
Toya: Don't touch me! i fuckingg hate you! (leaves and crys)
As Toya steps out , Brandy goes in.
Shawn: Brandy what the hell is wrong with you?
Brandy: she was going to find out somehow. Look now that she's gone im here.
Shawn: Brandy do you know what you just did? Why did you have to come up her anyway?
Brandy: Look Shawn you can't always eat your cake and have it. The girl had to find out someway.
Shawn: (sigh) Damn what am i going to do now? I love her i can't let her go.
Brandy: You don't love her you love me Shawn.
Shawn: Truth is, I love you both.
Brandy: (sigh) Shawn you know how much i love you, i want to be real serious with you now that shes gone. I'll do anything for you. You know that baby.
Shawn: Brandy i don't have 2 hearts baby. Look , i need a break! the love of my life just walked out on me. I need some time off please.
Brandy: Aiight I'm going to let you slide on this one. Since niggas always want that break shit and want their girls to be understanding.
Shawn: yea, thanks.
Brandy: Well im going to get going. do i get a kiss?
Shawn: Brandy, i just can't
Brandy: Aiight i understand. Bye,
Shawn: Aiight Later.
---------------------------------------------- Aiight i tried , wrote this in like 30mins haha. but i guess ill continue later.
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hot-angel (f)
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I guess u got all up in your head uhnn?
Well i still want some mo drama. Toya's too cold. I hope she gets all crazy later on tho. lol.
Good job KC, at least u are creative. Hell the best i can do is say "mary had a little lamb".
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K2DaC (f)
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i don't like the 2nd part lmfao , if yall don't like it i definetely understand would u like to help me write it lizzy? ill just tel you what to write about im serious. |
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hot-angel (f)
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Girl puh-lease. You better do your job. I'm not putting my head in the ish u got up in here. I'm going to go read Zane now. |
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K2DaC (f)
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ohh zane good author bur Omar tyree rocksssssss |
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2fine4u (f)
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i like it buh like hot-angel said, Toya is too calm. i expected her to be all up on Brandy or on Shawn instead of just walkin away  Shawn's cheating ass needed more than a slap from Toya buh KC nice job tho, am still gon be waitin for the next episode u got me into it already |
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Kadeejah (f)
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KC wow dts good girl! keep it up! i guess i gotta come back sometime just to read the rest |
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K2DaC (f)
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Toya is spose to be sweet yall remember? lol thats why shes not that crazy but don't worry ill make it better
thanks yall so much
jazzy thnks about the cussing thing its going to be boring w/o it lol
but thnks for the suggestion i guess ill cut it short
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hot-angel (f)
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Post the next part!
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K2DaC (f)
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Okay it will cost you 2bucks
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diddy4 (m)
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hey k2 u have 10 mins to post the next part or else?
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K2DaC (f)
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diddy no k2 please lol , anyways what r u going to do to me. I'm waiting |
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diddy4 (m)
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you don't really wann@ know.
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K2DaC (f)
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Hmmm i can't im not in a good mood right now im not showing it but my effin dad just crushed my dreams. So i got this contract at this Modeling/Acting agency got the interview tomorrow and he said i can't go. And they pay you for taking their pictures/ advertising their clothes. I really want to do both the modeling/acting thing.
Yall don't know how crushed i am.
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diddy4 (m)
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im still waiting for my sister to join me. my peps aint got no say. she is doing the modelling thingy. i feel for you though. i know how it is. don't worry. just pray to God this night and aks him to change your father's heart by tomorrow. trust God, he's gon do it. give it a try but its gonn@ come from your heart.
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K2DaC (f)
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I know my dad he wont let me. Trust me. but ill pray. don't really think it'd work
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diddy4 (m)
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thats why it wont work cuzz the faith aint their. you know your dad but God knows him better. wonder why he wont let you do what u wann@ do to get them cheese.
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