The Little Girl In Blue

It was quite colourful from your imaginative narrative.

I love the natural disposition of the storyteller. No impressionism.

Mamaput,

Strange story for children,I doubt if any kindergarten would like your story!Animal rights rights people would probably sue you for suggesting pigs have beers in their fridge,I want to see how the story develops.

Keep the story coming Mama

The problem with satire with lots of images is you loose the reader easily,you probably need a teacher/lecturer to make you understand what the writer is trying to potray.I read Animal Farm so many times than I care to remember before I understood what its all about.
In this generation of Electronic Media you loose your readers with too many imageries nobody wants to spend time interpreting the intension of the writer,they just click on the next link.

A beer drinking pig is better than a child eating wolf any day.
I want it to be a modern day story.
The little girl in blue even has a flying bed that will come her way soon and with it she travels all over the world and mets different animals groups of people. She even travels to the under water world and one day even to the moon just to see if the man on the moon exists.
By the way she also meets people around her area.

Many animals from far and wide came to attend the court.
The the fat goat with the short legs was the lawyer of the duck, the rabbit that lived in the house was the lawyer of the cat.
The rabbit had a big job getting the cat to shut his mouth because the cat as every one knew was very rude. and may just end up annoying everyone.
The duck was rude too but since every one knew the duck was mad, it did not  matter what he said.Because he was mad. Mad ducks have unlimited freedom to say and do what they like.
Well the pig banged a Toy hammer  on a desk that the little girls mother had put out for them and the case started.

Funny enough no one knew how the fight started or who started it.
But the judge had a duty to do   besides little girl and her mother were also  annoyed.
Little girl because her hand was still paining her and the mother because of the bill.
Both of them were sentenced to spending the whole day together getting rid of the sluges that were spoiling the lettuce on the yard.
The duck was very happy about that but the cat that was a spoiled brat found this quite disgusting, He also found that it was not fair that the duck was happy with the sentence. But try punishing a mad war happy duck.
All the animals went their way satisfied with the sentence and happy that there was something to talk about.
Some animals even stayed to make fun of the duck and the cat picking  sluges.
A  hen even started making fun of them that was a big mistake .
Before it knew what happened  , it had a bucket of sluges thrown on top of it.
The hen went to complain to the cock , but the cock was afraid of the duck and did not go to challenge the duck and the cat.
We all know that an icdent like that can make two foes to friends , at lest for some time.
The mad duck allowed the cat to go that he will get rid of the slugs alone ,and the cat was very happy to go.
From the window of the little girlöls room he watched the duck having the time of its life getting rid of the slugs.
To crown it all the little girl had forgiving the cat and had brought him a blow of milk.

Thanks

One day the little girl was strolling with her cat very boared, she walked down the road in the opposite direction of the house were the  fat goat with the short legs , the lama and the crocodile lived she was not in the mood to take an umbrella along.
At the end of the road she turned off  in the direction of the playground passed the boring play ground and the more boring Icecream stand and walked to the forest. She just kept walking deeper and deeper and the cat kept telling her that they had gone to far and it was getting late.But the little girl did not listen.
All of a sudden she came across a big wolf, The wolf was surprised to see the little girl but the little girl was more surprised.
The cat ask "so are you going to eat little girl up"? like you ate little red riding hood.
"Thats just a story answered the wolf " Stop lieing answered the cat go on and eat her i know thats what you want"
"sorry that my cat is so rude  the Little girl had found her toung , "I am the little girl in blue"
" I know " the Wolf answered his eyes on the cat "everyone here knows you "
The little girl was surprised that she was knowen here in the forest, More surprised than seeing the wolf.
The wolf took her to the village square of the forest animals , but not only animals a witch also lived there.
The wolf was the forest sheriff and it was his duty to see that everyone abide by the laws.
The forest animals even had a jail but till now no animal had ever been locked up.
As it was getting late , the wolf sent  the fox with a letter to the little girls mum so that she will not have to worry.
All the animals of the forest wanted to take a look at little girl but the cat wanted to know what was so special about the little girl.
He started making rude faces and lifted his paw to make an indecent sign.
The wolf locked him up for 5 minutes in the jail.
The cat was the first animal to see the jail from inside,a bear made a picture for the next day newspaper.
The cat stuck out his tongue
But the other animals wanted an all night party with cake and icecreams.
The witch backed and the fox  that had come back provided the drinks.
It was nobodys birthday but the animals were always happy for a reason to celebrate.
At last the wolf said it was really late and little girl had to go home.
So to get her home safe they lent her a magic bed that could fly . The bear made more pictures for the newspaper and everyone wanted to be in the picture so they all crowed round little girl pushing the cat out of the way,At last the wolf blew his whistle little girl has to go home NOW.
Little girl climbed the bed with the cat , The cat was offended he was not on the picture, but little girl assured him he made headlines on his own with the jail incdent. The cat could live with that.
The wolf explained to the little girl how the bed worked.
The bed had metal rods round it like a baby bed , a sun ,wind and rain protection.
All she had to do was tell the bed were she wanted to go,
She asked the bed to take her home and in a twinkle of an eye she was home,
Her mum was waiting for her at  the door.
As little girl took her bath she wished that the bed was hers so that she can travle travelthe whole world.
The next day when she got up , she thought she had dreamed it all but when she looked out of her window the bed was standing there and all the yard animals around it.
on the bed was a letter that the cat had opened but he could not read,Little girl ran down took the letter from him and slaped slappedth it over the head "just sniffing at it" he said offended Forest had giving the little girl the bed as a gift apparenapparentlyd after dropping little girl , wanted to stay with her,
The bed could not talk but it could read little girls thoughts and also wanted to go on adventures all over the world.
Little girl was the happiest person alive on this day

Orikinla's persistent "please don't self-publish" is entirely self-serving, since he's a book publisher.

Theres nothing wrong with making self-serving statements as long as they aren't portrayed otherwise.

apoligies to my dear friend Orikinla about the thoughtless way this post was expressed

Orikinla,

As a writer and publisher you need to accept criticism,all publishers have their own criteria for the kind of books they publish,when writers can't find publishers willing to take a risk on them thats when they turn to self publish.
The internet has opened the door to a lot of writers/musicians as you don't need big coperations anymore.Mamaput's story on this forum is a kind of self publishing though she is not making any money.

Seun,
Allright. But as at present, I don't have the global distribution network of my dream. Let me do my homework first.

If you test the story on 3-5 children and they all seem to love it, a ghostwriter might be a worthy investment.