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ibkaye
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Motunrayo Part 1 (Ps, the first couple aren't very descriptive) Voice Recording - http://www.esnips.com/doc/08448290-9eb9-49f2-a659-1b871f66affc/Motunrayo-Part-1I noticed the sound got a bit fuzzy at the end so I have posted the written version so that you can makeout what I actually said if you could not hear properly, sorry. Akin was a very strong man, young but fearless. He possessed the strength of a lion and the wisdom of an owl. As much as Akin was tough he was also very stubborn and quick to anger. He had once killed a snake with his bare hands. He seemed to always get his way.
Akin lived alone in a hut left to him by his late parents in the village where he was brought up. Left as an only child to fend for himself, he was used to being alone. He very much preferred it that way. Tall and very handsome, adored by many girls in the village he was. But to the elders, Akin was as an outcast, both his parents had died mysterious deaths and that was enough to cause the ignorant minds of the villagers into believing that he was the cause. Foolish people he thought.
One day, whilst eating kolanut by the side of his hut, Akin spotted a girl walking through the bushes, she was carrying a bucket, probably to fetch water he thought. He recognized her instantly, that long hair, that body, that beautiful face, it was Motunrayo. He had lusted after this girl ever since the day he laid his eyes on her but the she had rejected him the many times he had attempted to woo her.
He wanted her as his wife but refused to plead with her. He believed that men should never have to beg , especially a woman. Akin stood up and followed her.
After fetching the water, Motunrayo , tired and hot laid down next to the stream, she wanted to relax before making her way back home to prepare her family’s meal. Suddenly, Akin appeared in front of her, shocked by the sudden intruder, Motunrayo briskly stood to her feet. She recognized Akin immediately and wondered what he was doing.
Akin greeted her and asked how she was, she replied him but her failure to return the question annoyed him. Motunrayo lifted her bucket when he asked her when she was planning to finally accept his andproposal adding that her that her stubbornness was getting too much.
She ignored his comment told him that she did not plan on marrying him. When he asked her why, she shrugged her shoulders and adjusted her oshuka. Akin could not stand anymore rejection from her, her refusal to oblige angered him. Aware of his mood, Motunrayo carefully laid it the bucket on her oshuka and began to walk away but he pushed her down causing the bucket to fall. Akin tore off her wrapper and raped her, her cries were hushed by the sound of the noisy stream.
Akin believed that this was the only way for them to be together. If he succeeded in getting her pregnant, knowing the shame it would bring to her entire family if she gave birth out of wedlock, her family would be forced to hand her over to him in marriage, it was the only way.
TO BE CONTINUED. |
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ibkaye
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Motunrayo Part 2 Voice Recording - http://www.esnips.com/doc/55a3a498-2017-442e-8e1e-4ef9f8111bc9/Motunrayo-Part-2Motunrayo knew no joy ever since that fateful day. After much taunting and pleading from her parents, she was forced to marry Akin. Though aware of her unfortunate ordeal, they still insisted on her marrying him. She was pregnant and that was all there was to it, it was also made intensively clear that the secret of her rape was to remain undisclosed at all costs, as if it did not, such an event would bring great shame onto the family name and Baba Motunrayo refused to allow his name be rubbed into the dirt.
Motunrayo was absolutely devastated at the lack of sympathy her family showed, annoyed at both their ignorance and unfairness. Her family had betrayed her.
Akin knew that his plan would work. It came as no surprise when he was called by the Adeyemo’s to collect his wife, he was delighted. The people of Ojo Village were stunned at the sudden marriage announcement, it did not seem like innocent Motunrayo to go for such a person to settle down with, little did they know.
On numerous occasions, Akin had tried to get her to understand his intentions but Motunrayo refused to hear. She did not see him as a husband but rather, a monster, but 4 months pregnant and carrying his child, she had no other choice. Akin provided for her to the best of his abilities, he was not necessarily a bad man but like many, contained habits that needed to be controlled, especially when it came to Motunrayo.
There was never a day without an argument, whether small or big, Akin and Motunrayo had always managed to quarrel. Her sharp tongue and lack of respect for him angered him to no bound. Akin had always restrained himself from beating her as he did not want to harm his baby, that is, until one day, Motunrayo stretched him beyond his limits. He beat her severely causing her to lose the baby.
Akin was devastated and blamed Motunrayo for the death of the baby.
The next night, whilst laying on her mat….
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ibkaye
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Motunrayo 3 Voice Recording - http://www.esnips.com/doc/adf6f4bb-1363-4434-819a-75f04737d1fa/Motunrayo-Part-3The next night, whilst laying on her mat, Akin was busy sulking outside by the side of the hut, distraught by the death of his baby and angry at his wife. He had concluded that it was Motunrayo’s plan all along to get him angry so that he would beat her and by doing so, kill the child. Without a baby in her stomach, she would have an excellent opportunity to run, not only from him but the village. He became even more livid at the end of his conclusion, what a ‘clever’ and devious girl she was.
Akin entered his hut, making his way towards Motunrayo who appeared to be deep in sleep. He lay beside her and tapped her gently on the shoulder. Refusing to wake up, he tapped her continuously until she finally lifted herself.
Annoyed at the disruption, she asked him if he knew what time it was and warned him to leave her alone, laying her head back down on the mat whilst doing so. Akin told her to get up and that he wanted to make love to her as to make up for the loss of the baby. Up and alert by his request, Motunrayo pleaded with him to leave her alone.
Akin told her that he could not do such a thing, that in order to consummate the marriage, they must sleep together. She reminded him that he had already slept with her before and without her consent, her persistent pleads did not seem to get through to him.
Akin also reminded her that he was her husband and that it was his right to sleep with her. He told her that he did not want to hurt her. Motunrayo knew she would not be able to stand against him, forced to oblige, she gave in and he made love to her.
A few months down the line, Motunrayo found out she was pregnant, Akin was overjoyed.
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ThiefOfHearts (f)
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wouldnt exactly call that making love. Continue sha  |
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ibkaye
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Hahahaha, will do |
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St☆rStruck (f)
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OMG!!! I absolutely love your accent.
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ibkaye
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Lol aww thanks  |
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boliatiepa
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OMG!!! I absolutely love your accent.
This encapsulates what is wrong with the world. So superficial. Serious effort put into a work and only the grainy surface attracts any comment. Not that there is much to appreciate in the work anyway. Can't empathise with any of the characters. |
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ibkaye
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This encapsulates what is wrong with the world. So superficial. Serious effort put into a work and only the grainy surface attracts any comment.
Not that there is much to appreciate in the work anyway. Can't empathise with any of the characters.
Ok thanks for the pointer, I'll try to make it more easier for readers to do so as I continue. |
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jay bee (m)
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Gud stuff. well done pwetty
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ibkaye
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Gud stuff. well done pwetty
Thanks a bunch |
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tubabie (f)
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@Ibkaye Hey nice one. your story has potential to get better. I like the murder poem, it had the connection and empathy an earlier poster pointed out was lacking in the story. Am sure you'll get there  , When u write about the characters dont assume we know all the emotions they may be feeling, u are still scratching the surface of the beautiful plot. Let us feel Motunrayo's anger, hurt , frustrations, fears and joy if any; same goes for Akin .Hit us with the emotions and get our imaginations running. Looking forward to the next, i hope my criticism will be taken in a good light o cos u may just want us to sit back and enjoy without voicing out nothing. |
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St☆rStruck (f)
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This encapsulates what is wrong with the world. So superficial. Serious effort put into a work and only the grainy surface attracts any comment.
Not that there is much to appreciate in the work anyway. Can't empathise with any of the characters.
Sucks for you, huh? |
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ibkaye
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@Ibkaye Hey nice one. your story has potential to get better. I like the murder poem, it had the connection and empathy an earlier poster pointed out was lacking in the story. Am sure you'll get there , When u write about the characters dont assume we know all the emotions they may be feeling, u are still scratching the surface of the beautiful plot. Let us feel Motunrayo's anger, hurt , frustrations, fears and joy if any; same goes for Akin .Hit us with the emotions and get our imaginations running. Looking forward to the next, i hope my criticism will be taken in a good light o cos u may just want us to sit back and enjoy without voicing out nothing.Thanks a bunch tubabie I understand what you mean about feeling the emotions of the characters, will try to improve on it on the coming parts Sucks for you, huh?
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StephenP (m)
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I remember "The Club" from the Role Play thread . . . you already know how I feel about it. |
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ibkaye
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I remember "The Club" from the Role Play thread . . . you already know how I feel about it. Yeaaaah I know na  |
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St☆rStruck (f)
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just letting you both know that I'm still here lol
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ibkaye
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Lol you give me jokes, yeah I know of course |
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tpiah
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you have a very nice British accent I agree- the love scenes are quite skimpy brief but that's understandable. |
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gillo25
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i feel so sorry for the girl god help her
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ThiefOfHearts (f)
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Fo some reason I can hear the *wavs
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FL Gators!
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Did you stop reading at the ending or was that a technical problem?
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ibkaye
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you have a very nice British accent I agree- the love scenes are quite skimpy brief but that's understandable. Lol thanks Yeah, I kind of made certain scenes brief so that each part did not turn out too long or too skimpy, I guess that took away the chance for readers to empathise with the characters more i feel so sorry for the girl god help her
Hehe, it could get better for her, who knows, thanks for reading Fo some reason I can hear the *wavs
wavs? Lool you haven't lost anyone jor  Did you stop reading at the ending or was that a technical problem?
Think it maay have been a technical problem, but then the written version is also available if you missed out on anything |
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hollandis
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ibk my pikin,one day i know say you go make me proud
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Jairzinho (m)
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really cool voice,you're certainly not in bauchi or kano or which other location you've been using.
Your initial intros had a lot of 'ems , and awkward pauses,the motunrayo story went really ell only the accent kinda affects the traditional pronounciation of those names.
keep it up !!
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stillwater (f)
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"Club" was funny.
Words come to you easily. That's a good sign you'll turn out good. Keep it up.
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