Please, Critique My Poem

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spizzlenik (m)

Please, Critique My Poem

« on: October 25, 2009, 03:40 AM »

I write mostly short poems. here is one for y'all

HEARTBREAK

Beautiful lashes
Someone pondering
Awesome beauty

Emotion clashes
Love wandering
Something building

Money splashes
Heart thundering
Love budding

Stale bashes
Nothing gathering
Everything breaking

Ugly gashes
Dull blundering
Heart broken

gbolahanh

Re: Please, Critique My Poem

« #1 on: October 25, 2009, 06:26 PM »

cute.

POSAKOSA1 (m)

Re: Please, Critique My Poem

« #2 on: October 25, 2009, 10:13 PM »

nice. I like

spizzlenik (m)

Re: Please, Critique My Poem

« #3 on: October 25, 2009, 10:17 PM »

Quote from: gbolahanh on October 25, 2009, 06:26 PM

cute.

Quote from: POSAKOSA1 on October 25, 2009, 10:13 PM

nice. I like

thanks

bluespice (f)

Re: Please, Critique My Poem

« #4 on: October 27, 2009, 04:23 AM »

i'm not sure how i feel about this Undecided

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