If You Are A Good Poet Please Rate This Literary Piece 4me

WILL YOU PLEASE STOP GOING TO POETRY.COM?!!!

I'll comment if you would kindly place a copy here.

in my opinion, this is quite superfluous
WHAT ARE YOU SAYING?
there is no flow to this poem
literary writing is about communication, you should be able to connect with your audience through your words, but most times we make the mistake of crowding our writing with "big words" in our bid to impress the audience.
lonelypal, i must say, you've lost me on this one. but i'll like to see more of your work, 

lonelypal, you asked for a rating and i gave you one. if you cannot handle constructive criticism then why ask for it. besides  all that talk about tones and levels and as you said ", audience with sound poetry knowledge to deduce the theme and the various poetic devices employed by the poet", is a bit too far fetched don't you think. from what i've read you are still at the amateur level of any form of literary work, poetic license or not.
i will still reiterate  my position on your work, SUPERFLUOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Lonelypal, sumhow u were quite complacent on this 1 but i agree with u on this against colors, analyticaly speaking,the lines were nt forced nor contorted as u did nt lack the elements of an emotionaly inclined verse, Its clever n better yet speaks poignantly though the expression was intricately woven,u were able 2 achieve that special poetic effect bt if i may suggest,work on simplicity n style, cheerz man,ure good at it!