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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Kimkardashain(f): 9:42am On Jun 30, 2017
ramsey stared ahead at the turn of events before him,he opened his mouth in surprise,20 minutes ago he had thought that tasha would bow her head in apology but here she was shouting at him,
she look flushed,her cheeks were beet red in anger.she gripped the door handle and yanked it open.gesturing him to leave, gosh he muttered to himself he had really behaved like an asshole,he shouldn't have accused the dead father,he hurriedly switched to the apology mood
"am sorry tash,i never meant to loose my temper,i shouldn't have accused your dad," ramsey stared into her eyes,they were turning misty,he cursed himself for making a lady cry.
"am sorry tash pls, may i sit?" ramsey could swear he saw temper fly through those beautiful blue eyes in a split second,and was replaced by what ramsey would call forgiveness.
"uhm,am about to go to the lab to see my dad........" tasha said closing the door and leaning against it.
this can't be happening ramsey thought why would rick ask her to see her dad on the dissecting table!

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Kimkardashain(f): 11:11am On Jun 30, 2017
this cannot be happening,how can ricky allow her to see her dad's corpse on the lab table, don't he think that she might just break down.ramsey thought to himself,this is insane,
"tasha i don't think thats a good idea,....i mean you seeing your dad on the lab table,like an animal about to dissect,think about it..." ramsey implored
tasha sat down and gave him the'i think your making sense look' before getting and began pacing the sittim room,
"i think your right,gosh why didnt i think about it before,but am curious about something,why would rick arrest your dad,?" tasha asked hoping she put it right..

"i don't know too,i suggest we go down to the station and ask rick,i honestly don't think my dad is capable of murder," ramsey said hoping to high heavens that his faith in his father is worth it,
tasha shrugged and let her shoulder slump,

"i need to take my bath,help yourself with coffee," she walked into the bedroom leaving ramsey alone to his thoughts.

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Kimkardashain(f): 11:11am On Jun 30, 2017
this cannot be happening,how can ricky allow her to see her dad's corpse on the lab table, don't he think that she might just break down.ramsey thought to himself,this is insane,
"tasha i don't think thats a good idea,....i mean you seeing your dad on the lab table,like an animal about to dissect,think about it..." ramsey implored
tasha sat down and gave him the'i think your making sense look' before getting and began pacing the sittim room,
"i think your right,gosh why didnt i think about it before,but am curious about something,why would rick arrest your dad,?" tasha asked hoping she put it right..

"i don't know too,i suggest we go down to the station and ask rick,i honestly don't think my dad is capable of murder," ramsey said hoping to high heavens that his faith in his father is worth it,
tasha shrugged and let her shoulder slump,

"i need to take my bath,help yourself with coffee," she walked into the bedroom leaving ramsey alone to his thoughts.
could ramsey be the killer?
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Kimkardashain(f): 11:32am On Jun 30, 2017
he laid down the tubes on the table filled with different kinds of surgical equipments,the room looks like a theatre,and he sings along with the nusery rhyme being played on the ipod beside him,
tonight is gonna be one of the best night of his life,
he brought out his phone and punched in some numbers and dialled the number,
he murmured to the other person and smilled to himself,and continued placing the other equipments,he grabbed his hunting bag and car keys ,and headed to his car,he needs to head towards his next angel,to the woods
****
juliet sat behind the drivers seat and sulk she occasionally shake her head fiercely ,why would her fiance refuse to buy a bigger house, she had wanted to show off to her friends how rich and caring her fiance is,she needed to punish him a little,she is going to woods
kicking the ignition to life she headed to the woods

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Toyin223(f): 11:40am On Jun 30, 2017
Weldone
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Kimkardashain(f): 1:57pm On Jun 30, 2017
Toyin223:
Weldone
Tnks for commenting
Re: Fear (Mystery) by EvaJael(f): 4:11pm On Jun 30, 2017
Kimkardashain,you didn't see your sis here for a while and u didn't ask of her ehn? #cryingoutta thread
Re: Fear (Mystery) by PoliticalThuG(m): 4:57pm On Jun 30, 2017
Mumu story
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Kimkardashain(f): 5:54pm On Jun 30, 2017
EvaJael:
Kimkardashain,you didn't see your sis here for a while and u didn't ask of her ehn? #cryingoutta thread
ah no nah is nt lyk dat.
am sorry pls 4gve me,
plss
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Nobody: 9:08pm On Jun 30, 2017
Juliet! Long throat!
Go to the woods and i volunteer to come and carry your corpse.
Mtcheewwww, some girls sha. A house is a house whether big or small.
Twinnie you are doing great and I can proudly say that Ramsey is not the killer.

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Nobody: 9:13pm On Jun 30, 2017
PoliticalThuG:
Mumu story

Bros! I wonder when you will grow up.

If all the stories are 'mumu stories' Please stop reading them unless you are also a 'mumu guy'

Btw, I'm very generous, so i promise to dash you one cup of sense and another cup of maturity if you can pen down a story of yours no matter how stupid it is.
Even one paragraph will be enough.

Don't bother quoting me cuz i won't reply, I just felt like giving you that generous offer of sense.

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Kimkardashain(f): 8:55pm On Jul 01, 2017
1700 and smtin views people, were are d comments, wat u guys do is wait 4 me to squeeze out tym to update,and u will read,and run to oda thread to also read,witawt droppn a little comment,is bad,i hv tried to ignore it 4 so long but its painful,i kip oda threads lively,bt myn is quiet lyk a cemetary, am nt a writer bt i try 2 do smtin interestn oda dan deal with drugs and people all day,
u guys dnt nid to rub it on my face to tell me am a big failure,
i tink am stopping dis story ryt now,
Divepen1 pls delete dis work 4rm NL
marianneada,kimberlywest,queenitee,evajael,mhizgap,Akinwale14 ,odas dat i 4get 2 mention, thank u 4 reading and d encouragement.
Re: Fear (Mystery) by EvaJael(f): 9:11pm On Jul 01, 2017
Kimkardashain:
1700 and smtin views people, were are d comments, wat u guys do is wait 4 me to squeeze out tym to update,and u will read,and run to oda thread to also read,witawt droppn a little comment,is bad,i hv tried to ignore it 4 so long but its painful,i kip oda threads lively,bt myn is quiet lyk a cemetary, am nt a writer bt i try 2 do smtin interestn oda dan deal with drugs and people all day,
u guys dnt nid to rub it on my face to tell me am a big failure,
i tink am stopping dis story ryt now,
Divepen1 pls delete dis work 4rm NL
marianneada,kimberlywest,queenitee,evajael,mhizgap,Akinwale14 ,odas dat i 4get 2 mention, thank u 4 reading and d encouragement.
Don't try it o. They'll come in time. I started hidden diamonds like this. The thread was really dull but soon,it progressed to what it is today. It's just the nairaland norm dear. Continue for the sake of your sisters sweetheart. I love u

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by mhizgap(f): 9:12pm On Jul 01, 2017
Kim Dear please try to be cool okay we love you and I love to be afraid because of fear.


I swear if this story goes into extinction I will fight with you till the lords coming.


Kim Kim I was just playing o.


Shebi I have commented just see it as one thousands comment.


#crying
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Kimkardashain(f): 9:16pm On Jul 01, 2017
EvaJael:

Don't try it o. They'll come in time. I started hidden diamonds like this. The thread was really dull but soon,it progressed to what it is today. It's just the nairaland norm dear. Continue for the sake of your sisters sweetheart. I love u
tnks sis,bt my mind is made up,
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Emperor380(m): 9:29pm On Jul 01, 2017
Aunty you are doing a great job keep it up pls don't let them hold you back.

My case and urs is thesamd but am trying my best to make do with the little commentz i get believing that readers will start commenting soon.

Don't worry I will be an active member of this thread from now on.
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Toyin223(f): 10:14pm On Jul 01, 2017
Kimkardashain:
tnks sis,bt my mind is made up,
Please Didn Try It For God Sake
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Divepen1(m): 4:00am On Jul 02, 2017
Kimkardashain:
1700 and smtin views people, were are d comments, wat u guys do is wait 4 me to squeeze out tym to update,and u will read,and run to oda thread to also read,witawt droppn a little comment,is bad,i hv tried to ignore it 4 so long but its painful,i kip oda threads lively,bt myn is quiet lyk a cemetary, am nt a writer bt i try 2 do smtin interestn oda dan deal with drugs and people all day,
u guys dnt nid to rub it on my face to tell me am a big failure,
i tink am stopping dis story ryt now,
Divepen1 pls delete dis work 4rm NL
marianneada,kimberlywest,queenitee,evajael,mhizgap,Akinwale14 ,odas dat i 4get 2 mention, thank u 4 reading and d encouragement.
.


See Kim sha... Most times, when I write people don't drop comments. But I just rely on people's view. Then, I had a blog, so I see the way people stream down to the blog and search results. That gave me hope.

What I used to do is to know why people are not dropping comments..
And these are probable solutions.

1. Like Lleigh does( I will buy an e-gun to scare her one of these days), she would repeatedly mention you on each post update. People are following numerous stories, so they don't always have time to check for update. But upon being mentioned, they read it and drop comment or just pass by. Yet, it's effective to an extent.

2. I understand you might be using small phone etc... But you need to take a great effort to capitalise the beginning of each sentences. It's called optics on it's own. That would make readers see it as a potentially good stories.


You are not overreacting. This is a norm for every writer on Nairaland and I'm happy you've gotten to this stage. It's that point of frustration that many would fall into and make them start growing. Nevertheless, some people just die down there and that would be bad for you, the readers, and your work. So as to avoid totally sinking in the deep sea like the Titanic, just dust yourself and keep writing, lift your head up.. Meanwhile my boss, Audreytimms had written almost a full page like 32 posts before someone dropped a comment, now the story has more than 100 pages.


Let me go through your thread and see what I can do to help with structure. God help us.

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Darkcrisp(f): 5:50am On Jul 02, 2017
Please, do not give up on this beautiful book. Your story really has potential, and I (we all) would love to see you take it to the next level.

(Did I mention that I'm a huge fan of mystery, and I even have some mystery story ideas I'm yet to develop? And you want to give up on this one just like that? Please don't).

You've come up with a great storyline. Please continue or I'll haunt your dreams (for real).

However, you should work on your first word capitalization like divepen1 suggested. You should also pay more attention to your punctuation and spacing, and this amazing story will be a masterpiece.

You're great.

With love, your new fan.

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Lleigh(f): 7:02am On Jul 02, 2017
Kimkardashain:
1700 and smtin views people, were are d comments, wat u guys do is wait 4 me to squeeze out tym to update,and u will read,and run to oda thread to also read,witawt droppn a little comment,is bad,i hv tried to ignore it 4 so long but its painful,i kip oda threads lively,bt myn is quiet lyk a cemetary, am nt a writer bt i try 2 do smtin interestn oda dan deal with drugs and people all day,
u guys dnt nid to rub it on my face to tell me am a big failure,
i tink am stopping dis story ryt now,
Divepen1 pls delete dis work 4rm NL
marianneada,kimberlywest,queenitee,evajael,mhizgap,Akinwale14 ,odas dat i 4get 2 mention, thank u 4 reading and d encouragement.

Kimkardashain I wish I could give you a hug as I can feel the frustration coming through.

I am new on nairaland and I had the same problem. I saw the popular writers had loads of views and comments. I had none.
So I went to these stories to find out why and figured out somehow they all knew each other.
It was like a party.

I then started watching people who read my work and who didn't comment. I would then mention them in the next update.

It's disheartening, but my question to you? Do you love writing? If yes then continue.

Don't stop.

Do It for you.
It's more painful when you take time out of your day to write.

Don't delete it.

Email me too.

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Nobody: 7:08am On Jul 02, 2017
What! Kimkardashian, My twinnie, I'm on my knees, Please don't do this, okay?

Just like Divepen1, rely on the number of views and as time goes on, the ghostreaders won't be able to resist the urge to comment.

You are doing a great job, please don't stop now. I'm dying to know what will happen to Tasha. Continue please.

''sobbing''

For the sake of your sisters, please continue.
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Nobody: 7:10am On Jul 02, 2017
Congrat twinnie, It's made FP.
For that, you willl have to drop 10 updates today or else...
I will squeeze them out of you, don't ask me how!
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Kimkardashain(f): 7:12am On Jul 02, 2017
Yea am using a small phone to update,dats becus my laptop is full of research work,u cnt imagine hw busy i am,bt tnks everyone dat contributed,tnks 2 my sisters,and Divepen1 bro tnks 4 d encouragement,Lleigh,Darkcrisp,Toyin,tnk u guys,Emperor380 tnk u nephew,
heart u all

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Vectormike(m): 7:15am On Jul 02, 2017
Why is this on FP?

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Nobody: 7:20am On Jul 02, 2017
Vectormike:
Why is this on FP?

Today is sunday, so let me keep my mouth shut and my fingers to myself.

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Re: Fear (Mystery) by Kimkardashain(f): 7:25am On Jul 02, 2017
KimberlyWest:
Congrat twinnie, It's made FP.
For that, you willl have to drop 10 updates today or else...
I will squeeze them out of you, don't ask me how!
jeez,tnk u twin, am grateful, bt 10 updates? 10 updates? jesus! kimberly!
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Kimkardashain(f): 7:40am On Jul 02, 2017
KimberlyWest:

Today is sunday, so let me keep my mouth shut and my fingers to myself.
lol,pls oh, dnt bash him,btw kim,where is our oda sis queenitee
Re: Fear (Mystery) by ExInferis(m): 7:48am On Jul 02, 2017
You're a shameless ripoff.

First you appropriated a famous celeb's name..

Then you have a town called Sleepy Hollow?

From "The Legend of Sleepy Hollow"?

Washington Irving's estate should sue your ass.

Be original.
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Vectormike(m): 7:52am On Jul 02, 2017
KimberlyWest:

Today is sunday, so let me keep my mouth shut and my fingers to myself.
Better do.
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Darkcrisp(f): 7:53am On Jul 02, 2017
Vectormike:
Why is this on FP?

Hello? Do you have anything to offer?
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Lilyjoe567(f): 7:58am On Jul 02, 2017
ExInferis:
You're a shameless ripoff.

First you appropriated a famous celeb's name..

Then you have a town called Sleepy Hollow?

From "The Legend of Sleepy Hollow"?

Washington Irving's estate should sue your ass.

Be original.

Why do you gotta be mean?

You've got a problem with the story, say it nicely
Re: Fear (Mystery) by Vectormike(m): 7:59am On Jul 02, 2017
Darkcrisp:

Hello? Do you have anything to offer?
I do. Please take your ugly face away.

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