Theblessedman, now I surrender totally. I agree you are the best. This story is quite amazing. A first time writer with over 800thousand views, with 150+ pages and stil counting? The funniest thing is you even said you're not a university or higher institution student but you've managed to come up with this amazing and breathtaking, suspensefilled story? Chop kiss abeg. You are a great writer. Just like honourable356 once said, you are up there among the best. Keep it up. Am your biggest fan. I heart you so much dear.

paqman:
[b][/b]we hail the son of shango
my acknowledgment, the suspense is astonishing
my criticism, slow update but and you are forgiven with reason .
your mistake in the story, you should just try and add a little self control to the character, but it really spice up your story .
na my mind I talk ooo , who am my to critisicise another man work , all the same brother I hail

am compelled to second your opinion bro. Tbm is the best.

wow

I honestly can't fathom anything that can hinder a man with yhur intellectual talents from attaining the top Mr TBM. Considering everything yhu've stated about the level of yhur education is what really makes it ironically unbelievable seeing what yhu've done with the story so far.

Pleas don't relent. Continue...yhu' gonna end up at the top someday.

Well well well, thumbs up to you. Nice update, keep it up

SmartestPopQUEEN:
I honestly can't fathom anything that can hinder a man with yhur intellectual talents from attaining the top Mr TBM. Considering everything yhu've stated about the level of yhur education is what really makes it ironically unbelievable seeing what yhu've done with the story so far.

Pleas don't relent. Continue...yhu' gonna end up at the top someday.

our very own mama. Happy new yr o

manuelFORBES:
our very own mama. Happy new yr o

same 2 yhu dear.

SmartestPopQUEEN:
I honestly can't fathom anything that can hinder a man with yhur intellectual talents from attaining the top Mr TBM. Considering everything yhu've stated about the level of yhur education is what really makes it ironically unbelievable seeing what yhu've done with the story so far.

Pleas don't relent. Continue...yhu' gonna end up at the top someday.

wow! My very own model! I hail u ma o. Longest time. Hows family and Matilda. Its nice having you here maam. I miss u

Darous, i have being following this ur story as a ghost reader from the begining and i must confess i am glued to ur amazing suspence here. sometimes ur lack of update makes me want to back out but i always i ask my self do i pay u for this work,do i buy u the mb u use to update, do i contribute the idea on what to write?NO why then ll i back out, Darous in two words i say thank you As ur story is getting to the end i have 1 question to ask; what happen to ur girlfriend JOKE, because she is the character i like most in this ur story and i don't like the heartbreak she is getting from u

Smarkie:
Darous, i have being following this ur story as a ghost reader from the begining and i must confess i am glued to ur amazing suspence here. sometimes ur lack of update makes me want to back out but i always i ask my self do i pay u for this work,do i buy u the mb u use to update, do i contribute the idea on what to write?NO why then ll i back out, Darous in two words i say thank you As ur story is getting to the end i have 1 question to ask; what happen to ur girlfriend JOKE, because she is the character i like most in this ur story and i don't like the heartbreak she is getting from u

bro..i sincerely appericiate the commendations. Am truly elated for it. Thanx. About Joke, u just hav to wait and fold ur arms as the subsequent updates unfolds every hidden answers needed 4 d story to end. Thanx

Theblessedman, now I surrender totally. I agree you are the best. This story is quite amazing. A first time writer with over 800thousand views, with 150+ pages and stil counting? The funniest thing is you even said you're not a university or higher institution student but you've managed to come up with this amazing and breathtaking, suspensefilled story? Chop kiss abeg. You are a great writer. Just like honourable356 once said, you are up there among the best. Keep it up. Am your biggest fan. I heart you so much dear.

I've been following this story from the beginning. I always check for new updates because I can't wait to know what next. All I can say is that you are a great writer and your story is even interesting more than most films I've seen. Thanks for the story and I will be looking forward to reading your next

Happy sunday. TBM. Any update today? Atleast to celeberate madrid loss 4 us. Keep up tha gwud werk. You're dowing gread

PrinceOFprince:
Happy sunday. TBM. Any update today? Atleast to celeberate madrid loss 4 us. Keep up tha gwud werk. You're dowing gread

lolz. Thanx bro. But am updatin today.

TheBlessedMAN:
lolz. Thanx bro. But am updatin today.

Patiently waiting for you o

TheBlessedMAN:
lolz. Thanx bro. But am updatin today.

waiting since 2000BC.
today is Tuesday o

I Just finished reading the story up to the latest episode...an I have this to say, a learner doesn't just pick up a pen and write something as lengthy, intriguing, and entertaining as this.

This is unarguably something inbuilt or inborn ... or should I put it this way? an untapped talent that the owner probably just discovered few months/years ago..

Yeah, it has been there all long but it just need someone, something, or an event to touch the right spot for it to explode...it did and COUNTLESS was born.

And what a story it was!
The literacy giants would attest to this even though they were hitch here and there screaming "I am a first timer"!

I won't be surprise if this story ends and he came up with another one.. capable of pulling the crowds in their thousands.

**Criticism**
I couldn't go as far back as episode one and read again in other to be able to give a full review but I base my criticism judging by what I could remember and most on the few months updates...

Even through the story hasn't been concluded yet, major characters in the story are forgotten totally or left completely in oblivion as the story wore on? It doesn't work that way and it is a no no no...however, I have this intuition that you have some surprise up your sleeve for your audience.

Every major characters in the story must be involved one way or the other in bringing the story to a grand conclusion unless we are looking at a PART 2 which at the moment appears highly unlikely!

Secondly, it seem the length of the story is beginning to take a toil on the writer that he sometimes fail to give fill description of the event probably afraid of prolonging the story (he smiled). Don't do that! No mater how long it takes, the audience can wait provide you are updating consistently when you should.




PFolar....did you say that Theblessedman claim that he is not a higher institution student (and temigurl and smartestpopqueen agreed with you) inspite of the words he made use of in writing this story which I could very much argue that it is not words used frequently by secondary school students to mingle?
Funny enough, either he is home schooled or he is probably the "BLESSED" man and a true son of sango as he calm.

tojahh:

Shey wa OK?

what i do?

chisiudeh:
You drink Heineken Hungryman size that you cant open your own thread or what?? Why are you trying to reap where you did not sew?? No let Sango sama ur oblong ekwo .
Go open a thread for your story then we can reason with you.

And y'all are doing a great job in making him popular.

Bros in Erigga tongue Gerrout you toomuch... I enjoyed every bit of it from page 1 - 152... Keep up the good work

GodblessTheblessedman... Evenntho he is already bless as the name said it

Thanks to everyone that one way or the other, made a comment on the story so far. Am immensely grateful to you guys.

Honourable356, your comments have, has or had always been a fuel to my car. A shekau to my Bokoharam, a gigabite to my phone, a fertilizer to my farm. And a Lionel Messi to my Barca. Let me stop there b4 I start saying things like, a Bakayoko to my chelsea or a F9 to my WAEC. *laughs.


Thanx boss. I hope to forever stay humble to you all. Its still your shangoic writer: theBLESSEDMAN.

114. COUNTLESS.


Kpa!! The slap landed on her face unexpectedly just like how recession landed on nigerians faces, few months after Buhaspital was elected as their president. Chioma was taken aback, just like you, when you heard that fuel price has raised from 87naira to 145naira.

Unknown to her was the fact that I've been wanting to slap that treachery face of hers for a long time and that Longtime stretching back to the night she executed my wife with her silly pranks.

Am not the type that takes any pleasure in hitting or beating the opposite sex, but not even Gesus krhist himself can withhold the urge to slap her at that moment. Most especially not after seeing the kind of sinister grin that dominated the possesion of her beautiful face when she stepped inside the main sitting room of the mansion.

I eyed her scornfully for some seconds. She was claded in a skimpy cocktail dress that stops just below her knee and a pair of stilettos on her feet. A small handbag hung freely on her shoulders.

Holding her left cheeks, she stared confusedly at my face. "whats tha hell!" She lamented. She squinted with an inquiry look into my face. "I said whats that for?" She asked again after seeing that I wasn't ready to talk. "don't tell me you're still holding grudges against me..."

"foolish girl...so you were expecting a merryband to welcome you? A muderess!" I blurted out. "Gawd saved you I don't have a gun!..... Nothing would thrill me more than send a bullet to your ugly skull..you this fragments from the ugly pits of hell!" I ended with gritted teeth. I walked back to the 3 seater sofa opposing the entrance and settled down. I returned my gaze back to the shock striken Chioma and watched as she shook her head pitifully, took some steps and sat down on the sofa beside me. She buried her heads in her palms and started shaking her legs slowly.

Ten minutes of total silence passed and still none of us made any attempt to use our mouth application. The silence was getting boring to me and I stretched forward to pick the remote controller of the giant plasma T.v hanging on the wall. After pressing all the required buttons, the t.v screen came on and displaying on it was the replay of the 3-0 elclassico match of the season which Barcelona won.

That got my attention and I instantly became more engrossed in it not minding the deadly stare Chioma was giving me.

"how does it feel to have all this?" Chioma eventually spoke. I glanced at her and saw that she was refferring figuratively to everything I now have. "the funniest thing is that I was the brain behind everything you now claim to have....hmmm...and all you could do is blame me for making you what you are today. How ungrateful of you Darous..?"

"hey," I adjusted on my seat to face her. "for the record, I never asked you to do anything....secondly, you're a murderess. And its not just anybody you killed...you killed my wife!..." I shaked my head slowly as I fumed inwardly at her. She wore an expressionless face. Her eyes bore nothing but darkness in them. "and I don't think any sane husband would ever be grateful to the person who killed his wife...so incase you are here so I can be grateful, am afraid you just dialed a wrong number." I ended and returned my attention to the t.v screen.

She reclined on the sofa and folded her arms below her brests. I could feel her gaze striking side-ly at my face. Then out of the silence, she spoke.

"you talk to me as if you are a saint....how dare you!" She voiced out but got no reply from me. "we've both operated in the grey, but the only difference right now is i'm the only one willing to admit it."

"shut up!" I fired with a stern look, but she only let out a scoff and continued.

"why should I? Tell me? Why should I shut up? Am only saying the obvious. Whether you like it or not...you aided in killing her..."

"gawd! I will..." I fumed with a clenched fist as anger continue to boil inside of me.

"you think you are better than me because you can't admit what you did?"

"hey! Thats not the only difference between us. " I retaliated standing up and facing her squarely.

"yes...you're right...I also don't judge other people for their misdeeds..."

"no...you got me wrong....have always been the same man have always been."

"and i'm also who have always been...remember right from the incident at the hotel? Nothing has changed ever since....its just that you are too rigid... Darous..."

"me? Rigid?"

"yes..."

"so, if someone doesn't like to be used like a toy, the next thing you say about them is being rigid?....gawd! I can't believe am even having this conversation with you."

"thats your problem...you're too blind to any view point that isn't yours. I've been avoiding you this past few months because I don't want to talk to you..."

"maybe you probably realise that someone tends to end up dead whenever we talk."

I sat down again and placed my legs on the table.

"so what are you saying now?" She asked with a squeezed face.
"nothing...all I know is that am done with you. So you can help yourself out when you're tired of my sitting room...and never come back." I declared and restraightened my gaze to the t.v screen.

"can I ask you a question?"

"you just did!" I retorted nonchallantly.

"I'll ask anyways... What about my own share?" She asked.

Shifting my attention to her, I scoffed. "hope you are not asking what I think you are asking?"

"exactly! Thats exactly what am asking...and if you don't want me disturbing you again...then set me free with my own share of the loot." Her expression now portrayed a very serious one. I remained silent pondering on which line of action to take. "oh! you think I will just let you have everything I worked so hard for? Alone? Nah...over my sexy body." She arranged herself in a serious demeanour.

"what happened to you helping me to become rich?" I stated to remind her of what she said to me on the night of Adedoyin's death.

"Trust me...I wanted to. But you being stingy isn't making it any easier for me. Besides, who says I don't know how to handle being rich? O boy...abeg answer me and lets get this over with."

"okay." I finally said. Trying to counteract the situation, I said. "give me your account number. I'll send...."

"are you stup*d?...what do you take me for? Some cheap slùt that you can just pay off with some nairas?" She fired rhetorically.

"then what do you want?" I asked when I saw the darmness in her countenance.

"you don't want to get me angry Darous...cos if I do, you won't like the outcome of it." She hissed and settled down on the sofa. Anger was visibly singing in every breath she took.

"Chy...listen..."

"no...its you that needs to listen...am not here to joke atall.."

"okay..why don't you give me sometime to think this through?"

"you mean enough time to come up with a trick to trick me?..."

"don't get me wrong..."

"2hours is all I can give you...and it starts now...for your sake, I hope you come up with something better than that chinko offer you're offering..orelse, you'd be sorry you didn't." She hissed and headed straight for my kitchen. I slowly rose from the sofa and marched towards my room to commence a serious deliberation on how to handle the matter.

Promptly 2hours later. Chioma called me down to the sitting room where we resumed our dialogue.

"you must be a big ba*tard!" She blurted out angrily after I'd told her that I'll give her a few part of my wealth. She picked her handbag and brought out an envelope. She threw it on the table. "open it" She beckoned me with the gesture of her hand and shifted her gaze sideways.

Reluctantly, I picked the envelope and brought out its content.

It was the picture she took after she'd placed my hands around Adedoyin's lifeless neck on the night she drugged me again.

To say I was flabbargasted after seeing the pics will definitely be an understatement of the year.
Rather, I was dumbSTRUCK, deafSTRUCK, blindSTRUCK, lameSTRUCK and inshort, strokeSTRUCK.

Warning! try pronouncing 'strokeSTRUCK' at your teeths risk.

"what tha fvck is this?" I asked her, still in my shocked mode and with the pics still in my jiltery hands.

"are you blind?...ofcos thats the picture of you, murdering your dead wife....and all I need do is send that to the...."

"will you shut up!" I curt in. Standing up on my feet. I threw the pictures on the floor.
"what silly game are you trying to play here?" I blurted out loudly. "answer me...or you wan make thunder fire you?..." I picked the pictures and tore it into tiny shreds. I faced her with an angry face just to scare her but she just laughed loudly and eyed me scornfully.

"you think tearing those pictures will end everything? You seriously think those are the only copy i have?...iish....definitely you don't know me quite well."

"you are definitely a devil!" I lamented.

"that picture is meant to be my leverage incase a situation like this happens and its also an eye opener for you." She stated with a smirky face.

"an eye opener?" I queried.

"yes. To show you I have the power to ruin your life anytime I wish. Have always do good on my promises. I promised to help you with Adedoyin after the hotel incident and I did." She paused briefly and continued. "I also promised to make you rich and I did..." She pulled my chin and brought our face level at eachother. "now I can promise to ruin you and we both know I would." A satisfactory smile dominated her face as she sees how worried and depressed I was. "but it doesn't have to end like that." She said with a voice of optimism.

"what do you mean?

Dropping back to the sofa. She said, "I mean there's a way we can both benefit greatly from this."

Working some saliva back into my mouth. "how?" I managed to ask.

"if we get married." She declared.

"what! Thats never going to happen." I fired.

"then we both know whats going to happen if we don't get married." She finalised with a mean expression that got me asking myself: WHAT SHOULD I DO?



TBC

Marry her at your own risk................. just get her killed and enjoy your money with whomever catches your fancy. At least she has been the architect of your problems since day one. Kill Her!!!!!!!!!!!! so u can live in peace and not rest in peace

Thumbs up man

i bliv that as the son of sango wey you be, sang must give you idea on how to navigate the issue. but as lord of mekwe wey you be, make you no go fall hand when she tempt you with mekwe.

She want to marry him so as to get him killed and inherit the property

Wow!!! This guy is great....thumbs up bro