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I'll kip ma fingers crossed for nw

Good plot but you did not use the technique of suspense to lead us in

biolabee: Good plot but you did not use the technique of suspense to lead us in

Dt will keep us hungry 4 more

Silently followin.....
By the way, try to keep your readers in suspense. It will make the story more interesting.

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Ride on......

Hello,
readers and follower(s), i am sorry for not updating for a long time,i am just returning from the r.c.c.g camp ground-where there had been no network-i will update the story soon

Divepen: Hello,
readers and follower(s), i am sorry for not updating for a long time,i am just returning from the r.c.c.g camp ground-where there had been no network-i will update the story soon

great to know we've been experiencing JESUS together.... Now let's have the update

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U are wasting too much time to update...


wandering why

Brother,i thought i wasting my time

Divepen: Brother,i thought i wasting my time

no oo.. We are right behind you

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Ok wlcm bk..errm u have a nice story i lyk the name i had so wanted to read a story lyk tis on nl...dat said; i fink ur rushing d story. dnt u fink they should get to knw each other pretty well b4 she'll make d move on him? well as a writer u need to carry ur readers along tho its no easy task..i av a feeling u can pool it off if u push d rite button..uhrrh ok u've got watchout for typographical errors(they r so many of dem already) plus use ur figuratives(metaphors)superbly and ur will av readers all ova ya..i fink av said enough...gudluck

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i dnt mean to condasend jst my penny's worth

not a bad start tho,... *Too much typos are taking the shine of it... *Where are the suppence, and dont keep us waiting

divepen, update oh.

Keep this good work up, but come update abeg

Ade died in his heart,he step back looking at speechlessly,
'what will i do now' he thought
'oh,lord i need your help'.
He move toward her and gently take her hand,he look into her desiring-eyes -which refuse to loose hold of his body.He smile as he remember the word of Nigerians
'Bodi no be firewood', but then he remember his watchword
'i have made a covenant with my eyes,how will i think of a lady or how will i be moved by a lady to sin against God.'
'just this once?'he asked.
she nod.
'just this once!' he said again.
He draw her hand nearer and then he bend slightly towards her perfumed hand and kissed it.
'That's all',he mutter as he sigh in relief.
'that's what?'
'i just kissed you'
'no,you didn't'
'but i kissed your hands now,remember you only said i should kiss you once and you did not specifically tell me to kiss you anywhere'
'no now' she grumble
'it's remaining forty minutes to practice and we have done nothing..would you mind if we start now...' he said as she started wiping tears off her eyes...
What a relief,
'only the seeing eyes knows what it is beholding' he thought as they started singing.
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'That's him',she wispered as he pass by her side,to sit at a front row.
'who is this one?' Ade asked himself. This is not the first time he will be seeing the girl in that fellowship and he knows that she is in the commercial unit but he is sure he has seen her somewhere before ,but he can't place his hands on the exact place.
The preacher of the day start by talking of loose ladies who will want to give anything to be with a guy they love,
'hey handsome',they might start.
'hey handsome?' he repeated as he roll his eyes to remember where he had heard that phrase.
'hey handsome!!' he whispered...
'hey handsome!!!' he repeated,and again he let go,if only he had thought on them maybe he would have slept on his bed that night...

No giv up, just come cont ur story

diz story is very very slow.infact d slowest story on nl xo far.pls update 2 make pple lyk ur story

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Nice work, little error. Complete ur story man.

ehhhhhhhhhhhhhh!

noblebright: ehhhhhhhhhhhhhh!

wat happnd

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