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Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by mcdokwe(m): 7:45pm On Oct 10, 2013
I guess Mrs Jonathan is also responsible for your poor grammar and articulation... pity I couldn't get myself to read through
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by Chimaritoponcho: 9:35am On Oct 11, 2013
mcdokwe: I guess Mrs Jonathan is also responsible for your poor grammar and articulation... pity I couldn't get myself to read through
her grammar has improved drastically sef
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by Therock5555(m): 6:50pm On Oct 11, 2013
Em atleast make i talk some thing.

1) ur story make sense but e dry.

2)i wan know if ur are through with sec skul bcus ur write ups is really filled with errors(no pun intended)

3)pls are u from akwa ibom state? Bcus u kip on calling those names but the one that is provoking me is the way u spell my name- its UDUAK and not UDAUK, abeg correct that. Its my name so i hate when pple mispell it.

4)make use of ur commas, full stop, exclamation marks, apostrophs an other tenses, it makes us understand better.

Example: "prince, are you not eating before you go to school?" my mother asked.

"No mummy, i would eat in school" i replied back.

U see the space and my punctuation marks i used. Do it like that it would be more easier.

5)space ur work, it makes the post longer and easier to read.

I actually jumped all ur updates to comment bcus it was hurting my eyes. I would come and check back on u. This ur story is front page material if u polish it well, mistakes are bound to occur so dont too bother urself, just avoid making them too often.

I fit use a whole 5000 words encouraging and slamming and correcting u. But i have only one promise for u.

If i come back and see this story has improved i would bring my entourage of fans over here, u want comments abi, u go see am tire then, dont just lose focus.

Nland is ur stepping stone to greatness.

Peace..

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Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 11:31pm On Oct 11, 2013
mcdokwe: I guess Mrs Jonathan is also responsible for your poor grammar and articulation... pity I couldn't get myself to read through
oga why saying lik this now..?. Are you trying you to say that you dont understand what am explaining in story?. Besides i wrote a simple english for everyone to understand and not fooling ppl with grammers. Pls follow up. Just correct me where i go wrong. Well thanks for commenting sha.

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Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 11:34pm On Oct 11, 2013
Chimaritoponcho:
her grammar has improved drastically sef
let me ask you this question. How did you get to know her grammer has change ?

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Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 11:48pm On Oct 11, 2013
The rock5555: Em atleast make i talk some thing.

1) ur story make sense but e dry.

2)i wan know if ur are through with sec skul bcus ur write ups is really filled with errors(no pun intended)

3)pls are u from akwa ibom state? Bcus u kip on calling those names but the one that is provoking me is the way u spell my name- its UDUAK and not UDAUK, abeg correct that. Its my name so i hate when pple mispell it.

4)make use of ur commas, full stop, exclamation marks, apostrophs an other tenses, it makes us understand better.

Example: "prince, are you not eating before you go to school?" my mother asked.

"No mummy, i would eat in school" i replied back.

U see the space and my punctuation marks i used. Do it like that it would be more easier.

5)space ur work, it makes the post longer and easier to read.

I actually jumped all ur updates to comment bcus it was hurting my eyes. I would come and check back on u. This ur story is front page material if u polish it well, mistakes are bound to occur so dont too bother urself, just avoid making them too often.

I fit use a whole 5000 words encouraging and slamming and correcting u. But i have only one promise for u.

If i come back and see this story has improved i would bring my entourage of fans over here, u want comments abi, u go see am tire then, dont just lose focus.

Nland is ur stepping stone to greatness.

Peace..
thanks ROCK555. Am your brother in the lord, and also your brother from the same state. I have seen your commenting and i plead with you to continue the good work by putting me through where i go wrong. As for the mistakes, its due to the fact that after typing it i refuse to check and correct my errors. Punctuations makes are necessary too, so i promise to correct and put things in the right place where they are need. Thanks for commenting big bro.

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Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 9:35am On Oct 12, 2013
***CONTINUETION***


Miss Grace was cruel to us that day in school due to the fact that i intentionally disobeyed her. she summoned everyone outside and commanded us to frog jumps, picking pins, and all sort of punishments that could make someone faint instantly. Some students disobeyed her, those who had a rough way of living vanished from the school compound, while some students abscond to search for a place to hide.

"ah...pls madam can you please tell us what we'd done wrong that made you decide to torture us this way?" i worriedly asked her.
She fixed her eyes on me and came closer to warned me.

"Prince..., do you think you can disobey me and go free?" she questioned yelling on me.

After sometime, Grace kindly respected herself and walked away. sweats poured all over me and grieved came upon me. I felt worried for all the wrongs & misbehaviors as i bent my head downwards. Later on, some of the students were squating at their spot started complaining that their knees were weaken, while some blamed me for not releasing them from my so called school mum's hand.
Few moments later Uduak on her picking pin stand, tumbled on the ground and fainted.

"ah! Somebody pikin don faint oh!" one of the students shouted.

I quickly lifted up my face when i hear that someone has fainted. I look around and saw Uduak lieing on the ground, she was breathing slowly and weak. Uduak could not stand to her feet anymore.
I stood up and ran to the school clinic and gave report. I left the clinic and located our principal's office, while Uduak was taken to the clinic for immediate treatment. During break hours i went to check on Uduak, and this time she was her normal self again.
"hey! Uduak, how are you feeling now?" i'd happily asked her. Uduak was now in a good condition

"am fine" she'd replied still sleeping on the foam

We chatted for sometimes before the school close that day. I kindly took Uduak to her home before heading to my own direction of my house.
I got home very late. I could feel my little stomach rumble continously because i was very hungry, tired, and i needed some rest. I greeted my mother and when she answered i move to the bed and threw my body on the foam.

my mum turned to gaze towards me, "Whats wrong? "My mother politely asked

"nothing mum" i said and made an heavy sigh.

moments later i shut my eyes and slept off.
Two days later Grace did'nt see me in school. But by 4 :00pm on wednesday evening someone visited my house.

Someone knocked at the door so my mother quickly went for it.


=TO BE CONTINUED=
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by Therock5555(m): 11:14am On Oct 12, 2013
360prince: **CONTIN(A)EUTION**

Mrs(Miss) Grace was cruel to us that day in school, due to the fact that i intentionally disobeyed her. she called us all to go out and do something lik(e) frog jump, picking pin, and all sort of punishment that can make someone faint. Some people disobeyed her and vanish from the school compound, while some student abscond to hid.

"em...pls ma, can you pls tell us what we did wrong, that you decide penalising us this way?" i asked.

She fixed her eyes on me and came close to warn me,

"prince..., do you think, you can disobey me and go free?" she said and walk away.

I could fel(l)t sweat pour on me, and grieve came over me. I felt sorry for my wrong behavior and bent my head down ward. Later on, some student started complaining that their knees were wake(weak), some blamed me for not releasing them from my so called school mum('s) hand.Few moments later uduak fainted.

"ah! Somebody pikin don faint oh!" one of the student shouted.

I quick(ly) lefted(lifted) up my face, i(and) saw uduak laid(lieing) on the ground, she was breathing slowly and she was also weak that she can't(could not) even stand to her feet anymore. I stood up, ran in(to) the school clinic and gave a report. I left the clinic, and located my principal's office. Uduak was taken to the clinic for treatment.

During break hours, i went to check on her (uduak). By this time she was herself again.

"hey, there(Uduak), how are you fairing(feeling)?" i asked.

"am fine" she replied.

We chatted for sometimes, before the school close that day. I kindly took her to her place before heading to my own house. I got home that day late. I was very hungry and tired, greeted my mum and throw myself on the bed.

"Whats wrong?" My mother asked.

"nothing mum" i said and made a sigh.

Moment later i shut my eyes and slept off. Two days later mrs grace did'nt see me in school. By 4:00 on wednesday she came.

A knock on the door(someone knocked on the door), (so) my mum went for it.
=TO BE CONTINUED=

Check my words in bracket and use it to read again.

What kind of phone are you using self. If u have shift key it would help with spacing.

Thank you, your write up is becoming alittle better, pls add suspence
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 2:14pm On Oct 12, 2013
The rock5555:

Check my words in bracket and use it to read again.

What kind of phone are you using self. If u have shift key it would help with spacing.

Thank you, your write up is becoming alittle better, pls add suspence
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 2:15pm On Oct 12, 2013
The rock5555:

Check my words in bracket and use it to read again.

What kind of phone are you using self. If u have shift key it would help with spacing.

Thank you, your write up is becoming alittle better, pls add suspence
. Thank you sir.
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 3:38pm On Oct 12, 2013
Chai.... E no easy at all... See as prince the suffered for him school mother hand. But all those one na small tin now, because very some i go take control. Hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha. I don modify all my write up.
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by Chimaritoponcho: 12:10pm On Oct 13, 2013
Omg @360prince u r d luckiest pesin on d literature section 4 havin ROCK as ur teacher i jus hope u'd b a gud student

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Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by mcdokwe(m): 4:07pm On Oct 13, 2013
360prince: oga why saying lik this now..?. Are you trying you to say that you dont understand what am explaining in story?. Besides i wrote a simple english for everyone to understand and not fooling ppl with grammers. Pls follow up. Just correct me where i go wrong. Well thanks for commenting sha.
I am saying you should not ridicule someone else when obviously you ain't better
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by Therock5555(m): 8:55pm On Oct 13, 2013
Where dis 360na abi u don lose inspiration like carzolagrin, come cont. Ur last update was perfect. Btw. Its 'continuation' not 'continuetion'
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 11:58am On Oct 14, 2013
Chimaritoponcho: Omg @360prince u r d luckiest pesin on d literature section 4 havin ROCK as ur teacher i jus hope u'd b a gud student
am trying my best. You know it not easy, even when i write. I believe that i wrote everything well, but it some how suprising when someone will just correct you. Thanks tho..
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 12:02pm On Oct 14, 2013
The rock5555: Where dis 360na abi u don lose inspiration like carzolagrin, come cont. Ur last update was perfect. Btw. Its 'continuation' not 'continuetion'
my oga am here. Am not suspendin this thread oh. Beside i will lik to know why the last page of this thread is not show when you open it from the literature section.
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 12:05pm On Oct 14, 2013
The rock5555: Where dis 360na abi u don lose inspiration like carzolagrin, come cont. Ur last update was perfect. Btw. Its 'continuation' not 'continuetion'
. My oga am not quittin on this thread. Thanks tho..
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 1:19pm On Oct 14, 2013
***CONTINUATION***


By 4:00pm Someone knocked at the door and my mother went for it. My mother opened the door and i could hear her laugh with someone familiar.

"wow.. You again? Please come in. " my mother welcome the person.

"good afternoon mummy." Miss Grace greeted again as she walked towards my mum..

Grace was offered a chair to sit, she dropped her big hand bag and made use of the stool chair.

"mummy how is work ?" Grace asked.

"we thank God oh! everything is moving fine." my mum kindly replied giving her space to balance the chair.
When i noticed Grace present i stood up to leave the room for two of them, but my mother observered my tricky moment. Mother quickly gave a hand job to do... She gave me a bag containing beans with a tray and ordered me to select them one by one.

"mummy wetin be this na? "

" you know what to do.. Or do you expect me to show you how to do them?" my mum asked and i nodded.

I sat down counting beans. my ear phone were stocked in my ears and the music banged in my head. I could not hear what they were discussion. I began to select the beans.

"Prince.. Are you not gonna greet me?" she asked But i was too busy. The music was so loud that i could not listen to her speeches.

Sooner, i completed what i was doing and i advanced to where my mother stood. I plead with my mother to grant me the permission to leave the house.. I told her that i wanted to visit my friend Uduak. My mother agreed but then, she instructs that i should come home early.
Miss Grace would not allowed my mother to speak further, she interrupted us.

"hmmmm, Prince you said you're going to Uduak place, right?... can i accompany you there ?" Grace asked.

"no madam." i replied immediately.

My mother must have realized i was angry, so she came closer to settle our misunderstanding. My mum calm me down and told me to allow Grace go with me.
I did something crazy because the house was mine, i had the power to controll her. I told my school mother to sit & wait for me, while I reach to the bathroom to frashen up. After my bath, i rub cream on my skin, i wore a simple cloth.

"am ready... lets go" i announced when i came out.

"Mummy let me accompany your son, and when i return i will see you again before i take my leave " Miss Grace uttered. She waved bye to my mother.

We both walkout and headed to Uduak place. when we arrived there, Uduak and mother were in but when her mother saw Grace, good day turns bad......



**TO BE CONTINUED**
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 2:31pm On Oct 14, 2013
***CONTINUATION***


On our way to uduak place Miss Grace and i started discussing, we laughed and joke about issues,
We debated on many things concerning this life, love etc before Grace changed topic of discussions

"Prince do you have a girlfriend?". Miss Grace asked.
"no. I dont have girl,"

"why will big boy like mestay without havin girl friend?" i question her back.

"prince, you are very handsome, gentle,But i dont see you around girls."
"apart from that I L*** you, before she could finish what she had to utter I spoke in.

"now here we're!" announced moving forward against the door.

I knocked on the door, and someone with a familiar tiny voice answered from inside. Uduak came out and hugged and kissd me but when she noticed the sight of Grace she immediately turned and ran into the inner room.
The next events that happened that day was like drama to me. I waited to watch the event, Perhaps as one of their actors

"na who be dat witch were beat my uduak huh..?, you wan come kill my daughter again!?" her mother shouted out louder.

Uduak mum ran into house and later came out with a mighty stick to pursue Miss Grace. I tried begging her but she couldn't listen , I instructed Uduak to calm her mother down, But all that our advices were just in vain.

"mother!, pls stop this act of your pls!" Uduak pleaded But her mother turned and bounced on her.
I stood up when i saw the seriousness uduak mother had, i warned concerning her behaviors, i also informed her about the gathering crowd, But she turned and gave me a slapped that made me spin round for 2 minutes.
I could see stars of different colours and lines which no ordinary eyes can see.
Before i could say lack!, Miss Grace was no way to be found, She actually escaped from uduak mother's hand to save her life.
Uduak carried me to my house that day, because i was a little beat blinded.
I couldn't see clearly with my eyes due to excessive blows.

" i'm sorry prince, i shouldn't have informed my mother that Grace was the actually person who gave us punishment, pls forgive me?" Uduak pleaded with me.

"it's okay." i mention.
Uduak escorted me to my front door, and greeted bye before walking out my sight.

That night my mum saw my swollen face she requested for the person who injured me. I told her everything,but i didnt mention the actually person that gave me the punch. That night she shouted that she will see to the end of all this rubbish.
My mother display how she would have beaten the person back, i sat on couch and watched her in demonstration of her skills.


******************
did my mother actually go fighting ? smiley

**TO BE CONTINUED**

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Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 2:40pm On Oct 14, 2013
mcdokwe: I am saying you should not ridicule someone else when obviously you ain't better
. Ok sir. I promise never to ridicule someone again (two hands up). But encourage me to do better. Thanks
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 7:50pm On Oct 15, 2013
***CONTINUATION***


That very night was a sleepless night for me, because my mother did'nt allow the whole compound to have peace of mind. When my mum observes that my face had swollened more more, she shouted distracting all the tenants. I couldn't do anything but relaxing on the soft couch,and watch her shouting untill veins appeared on her neck.
Lateron my mother became tired of talking she barge into her room and relaxed herself on bed, and later she slept off.
I moved into my own bedroom and throw myself on the bed, I was still on the foam awoken while thinking about how Uduak mother's silly actions during that afternoon when i got there. By 2:00am in the morning i was hungry, and i headed towards the kitchen to serve myself food to eat, but When i got there it appears that all the pots of food where empties.

" Na were my mum hide food na?" i said while moving toward the pots storage to searched for food.

I opened a pots they appeared cleaned and empty . many absurd thoughts came into my mind that night. I finally headed back to my room, thats how I remembered that my mother did'nt cooked, she abandoned the cooking to take care for me by dressing all my wounds.
I slept that morning with empty belle untill when it Was time for breakfast.
I haven't forgotten about school for once apart from the few days i spent at home due to the pains my the punishment, But with my injured face i had determinations of attending school. The following week i promised myself to be at school no matter what happens. I reached to school late again, but i was'nt punished because the seniors who were in-charge of post that day saw my swollened face condition without me informing them they understood the huge pains feeling.
My walkin movement was damn! terrific, i actually cat-walked to school because i was unable to move well or perfectly.
One senior saw the sight of my face, and he interrogated the other senior that was standing close to him.
"oh boy! Na bee bit that boy for him eye ?" one of the seniors questioned without being specific, he tap the other dude by his side, but the young man ignored him.

"your papa. You wont pretend you didnt hear me. Would you?" pinched the other guy who didnt had no concerned.

"as you see the boy the go why wouldn't you ask him yourself, or abi na me the bee bit?" the other senior answered him back &
They started cursing theirselves playfully, while focusing.

I got to my classroom after i'd settle down i asked Emeka if any test was written when i stayed absent from school.

"idiotttt you no fit talk?" i had insulted him when he didnt respond immediately
"no test was taken, but it was announced in the assembly last week that the test will start this week" Emeka informed me. I question him about Uduak where about, and Emeka informed me she hasn't been in school for days.
when i was about opening my lock desk ubong approached towards whispered.

"oga! Lover boy, your wife has been badly brutalize by nobody" Ubong announced while smiling and he swiftly moved to his desk.

I recalled everything that happened to her and i jolted quickly, throwing my locker keys aside...

"i haven't seen her!" i mentioned in my heart,and ran outside with full agility to check on Miss Grace

**TO BE CONTINUED**

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Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 8:29pm On Oct 15, 2013
***CONTINUATION***


I walked towards Miss Grace room door and lightly knocked on it.
Miss Grace question who the person was and i pronounced my name and She invited me in.
Grace was sitting on a stool peeping through the window, while her back faced towards my direction ,but When she turned to face oppositely she shouted out loud and saw marks on her face.

"madam!, What happened to your face?" i asked boldly.

"off course you knew what happened to me" Grace explained while maintaining the same sitting post.

"yah! I remember exactly what happen" i'd mentioned while nodding my head. She looked at me and gazed wildly towards me in suprised. Grace jolted up from her seat and approached me.

"Prince what happen to your eyes?" she requested with her sincere & passionate voice.

"na the same hand were slap you that day slap me too" i'd replied immediately.

I explainned smiling but my swallon eyes wouldn't allow me grin any longer.

Grace was shocked because she thought that Uduak mother would'nt do this against me. Grace acknowledged Uduak and me were best of friends,She instructed me to assist arranged some file stuff before returning my class. School that day was a little hectic &stressful , I reached my home lately feeling tried as my body pain greatly increased.
I ate my afternoon meal before picking up my economic textbook and relaxed myself on a wooden bench outside the outskirt compound while reading for my preparation on the coming up test.


**TO BE CONTINUED**

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Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by petereddy(m): 11:16pm On Oct 15, 2013
Nice story sire but I must confess its below par.Do more to proof read ur story as often as u can.Like Rock has said,u need to space ur work for it to be readable,also punctuations in ur story isn't properly in place.In short make ur work more reader friendly.It seems to me dat u are doing more of undetailed summary than the story u are telling.Your story has content but u are failing to bring our the true elements in ur work.All thesame uve tried but u can do far better

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Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 8:15am On Oct 16, 2013
petereddy: Nice story sire but I must confess its below par.Do more to proof read ur story as often as u can.Like Rock has said,u need to space ur work for it to be readable,also punctuations in ur story isn't properly in place.In short make ur work more reader friendly.It seems to me dat u are doing more of undetailed summary than the story u are telling.Your story has content but u are failing to bring our the true elements in ur work.All thesame uve tried but u can do far better
. Thanks peterreddy. Ehm i must say you are really helping me here. As for the spacing, it not really my fault. I spaced my writings and do everything necessary but after summiting it turns out not spacing again. So pls what will i do?. Am using a phone to do this write up asha202. I promised to bring in more element of the story for readers interest. Thanks jor!.
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by Taiye4Christ(m): 12:54am On Oct 17, 2013
Hi Prince.
To be frank, you have quite a long way to go, as far as writing is concerned.
But the most important thing is that you have begun the journey. Like they say, 'The journey of a thousand miles begins with A step'. You have taken that step, i dare say.
I like your courage and determination, your passion for what you are doing and the readiness to accept corrections, to learn and to better yourself. These are vital tools you need as the writer you aspire to become.
Few words of advice, if i may.
-Please, pay heed to the points raised by ROCK. They are basic and very important.
-Type your updates, at least, one hour before you post them. Spend that time reading them over and over again, making corrections where you feel necessary (you may not have much time, I know, but it's not about the quantity of your updates, but the quality). Better not to update at all than to update shabbily
-Also, get one of your friends to proofread your works and offer constructive and valuable suggestions.
-Read wide. Read other people's works, literary and otherwise. It will enrich your vocabulary, as well as polish your grammar. English no be our papa language, but we fit improve the way we dey yarn am by reading and listening to good English.

On a final note, you 've got a great great story here. How far it travels? It depends on you. Don't let your story down.
I have taken my time to say all these because I can see a light, a potential, the seed of a writer in you, if properly harnessed.
Keep the dream alive... IT'S IN YOU.

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Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by festwiz(m): 11:35am On Oct 17, 2013
Dude work on

.1,Typographical errors
.2,Punctuation
.3, Organization.
.4, Read more literature to know how to make the content of your work feel lively.
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 1:20pm On Oct 17, 2013
Taiye4Christ: Hi Prince.
To be frank, you have quite a long way to go, as far as writing is concerned.
But the most important thing is that you have begun the journey. Like they say, 'The journey of a thousand miles begins with A step'. You have taken that step, i dare say.
I like your courage and determination, your passion for what you are doing and the readiness to accept corrections, to learn and to better yourself. These are vital tools you need as the writer you aspire to become.
Few words of advice, if i may.
-Please, pay heed to the points raised by ROCK. They are basic and very important.
-Type your updates, at least, one hour before you post them. Spend that time reading them over and over again, making corrections where you feel necessary (you may not have much time, I know, but it's not about the quantity of your updates, but the quality). Better not to update at all than to update shabbily
-Also, get one of your friends to proofread your works and offer constructive and valuable suggestions.
-Read wide. Read other people's works, literary and otherwise. It will enrich your vocabulary, as well as polish your grammar. English no be our papa language, but we fit improve the way we dey yarn am by reading and listening to good English.

On a final note, you 've got a great great story here. How far it travels? It depends on you. Don't let your story down.
I have taken my time to say all these because I can see a light, a potential, the seed of a writer in you, if properly harnessed.
Keep the dream alive... IT'S IN YOU.
. Good day sir. Am very glad with the courage you guys have given me. I must say it a big enlightenment her for me, to have you guys as my directors. I have learnt alot from you and the rock. I really dont know how to praise you right now. As for the corrections, i promise that to be my main section to work on when ever i write. Same to goes to my vocabularies , am gonna improve it, and add more element to it. Thanks for commenting. Pls keep on showing me the right thing and God will surely reward you.
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 1:34pm On Oct 17, 2013
festwiz: Dude work on

.1,Typographical errors
.2,Punctuation
.3, Organization.
.4, Read more literature to know how to make the content of your work feel lively.
. Festwiz, thanks for commenting on my thread. Am so happy to have guys like you, commenting on what i wrote. It a great honor that you have given an unknown guy like me. I have seen all the sections you want me to deal with. I here by promise you that i will look into those sections, because they are the main elements of english. (i dont really know whats happening to my spacing, i have done all this, but it like something is wrong somewhere or it depends on the type of phone that is being used). Pls can you tell me what to do?
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 3:03pm On Oct 17, 2013
***CONTINUATION***


Throughout that very evening i'd no passion for engaging myself in doing house works,reading, or helping my mother on what she'd intended preparing. On one blissful hour of the brighten day i avoided doin nothing except sleeping.
I indulge myself in sleeping throughout that whole day thinking about how to tackle the principal's test which would commence the next day. Quiet i was dreaming with grieve and disbelieve that wont make it perfect or succeed on my test score grade to make my school mother praise me.
The thought of Uduak struck my mind and i began thinking the more, My brains were calculating in a clock wise motion, differed thoughts ran into my already occupied head.
Meanwhile, i haven't seen Uduak for the past 3 good days and so thought about her, i planned visiting her place.
I kindly lose stressful thoughts away from my mind, & advanced closer towards my mother asked her for a favor.


"mother i would like to meet Uduak at her place to informed her of the coming up test tomorrow"
i'd announced while struggling with my wetted palms.

"what?", "but why." my mum questioned me instantly looking so worried.


my mother faced me immediately, actually her face expressed something else like " you're not leaving this house today." she stood quiet the sign i saw written on her face started fading.
I maintain peace and pleaded playfully wit my mother telling her that i needed informing Uduak,since she didnt attend school. My mother hesitated for sometimes before she permitted me to do what i favored. It pleases me that my Uduak was at home the moment i arrived her apartment,
She doesn't stays at home always because she either help her mother in the farm or she goes to the market whenever she returns back from her school.
I was lucky to meet her that moment at her home but her respons were hurting
She was sitting freely under palm fruit tree in her compound recieving the natural God gift air.
I quickly approached where she had relax and greeted but she wouldn't answer me.

"hey!, Uduak what are you doing here ?" i asked when i saw her holding a book. I moved closely to hear her reply.
"i'm dancing" Uduak answered, looking up to me with disgust.

Uduak stood up and entered into their house and later she returns with wooden chair.


"erm....,am not here to stay for long.
I came here to inform you about the test tomorrow on economics." i'd spoken while standin


Uduak picked up the the wooden chair without uttering any words,she returned it back where she took it from.
She acted that day strangely and upset against me, i couldn't understand what happened.
Maybe she was angry because our principal test always reward failures with canes.....

Uduak sat down and greeted me good bye after she had returnd from where she went to drop the chair.
I couldn't pronounced speech tho, i humbly faced the direction i'd came, and headed towards the direction of my home.



**TO BE CONTINUED**
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by festwiz(m): 3:44pm On Oct 17, 2013
360prince: . Festwiz, thanks for commenting on my thread. Am so happy to have guys like you, commenting on what i wrote. It a great honor that you have given an unknown guy like me. I have seen all the sections you want me to deal with. I here by promise you that i will look into those sections, because they are the main elements of english. (i dont really know whats happening to my spacing, i have done all this, but it like something is wrong somewhere or it depends on the type of phone that is being used). Pls can you tell me what to do?
try makin g your conversation in thread form(checkout 2go),and try limiting the use of nouns,like in your last post,talking about "uduak under the palm tree...",no need to repeat this again.
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 4:26pm On Oct 17, 2013
festwiz: try makin g your conversation in thread form(checkout 2go),and try limiting the use of nouns,like in your last post,talking about "uduak under the palm tree...",no need to repeat this again.
. Festwiz. Am sure you really want me to progress?. Thanks for the corrections. I will do exactly what you said.
Re: My Complicated Love Story With My School Mum by 360prince(m): 4:40pm On Oct 17, 2013
festwiz: try makin g your conversation in thread form(checkout 2go),and try limiting the use of nouns,like in your last post,talking about "uduak under the palm tree...",no need to repeat this again.
. Mr festwiz, how can i make my converstation form appear?. If you notice something in my thread you will see that any place we play the part of talking, i will ended up saying "WE CHATTED"to make everything short, due to my phone inability to space. Am using asha202 to do my typing, so i guess it because am using phone thats why my conversation is being expressed or display.

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