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Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 4:19pm On Dec 13, 2014
Thavybe:
I hate reading stories, i prefer seeing a movie....But this is really good and i av to admit i read every bit of d story....But since u want critics, i av to tell u despite da good write up, the story is very PREDICTABLE, as in i already knew what was going to happen b4 reading it...I think u shud add more suspense and sometin i call WRITERS EDGE( make pple tink dey knw wat will happen and den you put a twist to it by writing sumtin diff frm deir thoughts)...overall its still a good story


thanks for d comment...yh i guessd as much dat it was predictable...maybe coz im writing it for fun buh aniwaiz tnx for d comments@evrione grin
Thavybe:
I hate reading stories, i prefer seeing a movie....But this is really good and i av to admit i read every bit of d story....But since u want critics, i av to tell u despite da good write up, the story is very PREDICTABLE, as in i already knew what was going to happen b4 reading it...I think u shud add more suspense and sometin i call WRITERS EDGE( make pple tink dey knw wat will happen and den you put a twist to it by writing sumtin diff frm deir thoughts)...overall its still a good story


thanks for d comment...yh i guessd as much dat it was predictable...maybe coz im writing it for fun buh aniwaiz tnx for d comments@evrione
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 6:05pm On Dec 13, 2014
I wasnt thinking,I didnt want to think.

I lunged at him and punched him,he fell down from the chair. Blood came out of his nose....

"You bastard"he screamed as he came at me,he kicked me and punched me simultaneously.

"You bastard! I knew it. You are not my son,you can never be my son" He laughed sarcastically.

I wondered what he was talking about....I pushed him away and was about to hit him again when he said ...

"You are a bastard! You are not my son"
I dropped my hand.
"What are you talking about"

He cleaned the blood trickling from his nose,and stood up to face me. He laughed again

"I guess laila must have told you about our little affair" He laughed again,my fists clenched,I wanted to break his teeth.

"She was sweet" He laughed again as he downed the beer from the can " sweeter than your mother"

I couldnt take it anymore. I raised up my hand to hit him when he said

"Your mum cheated on me with my best friend" He wasn't laughing again,I dropped my hand

"What are you saying"

" Im saying you are not my son"

I couldnt believe it.
I just turned and ran upstairs to mums room.
I met her on the floor coughing seriously,I went to meet her,to lift her up,and i saw blood coming out of her mouth,before she fainted.

"Jesus!"
***-**********************
"She has cancer of the blood,its been there for somewhile now and it has become malignant,If she had come earlier then it would not have been this bad.
Im sorry,Mr fanan,but there is nothing we can do."

I just kept looking at the doctor.

Mum had been diagnosed of leukaemia four years ago but rather than treat it,she devoted herself to church activities and distanced herself from her loved ones. She was able to hide it because i didnt suspect she was sick even though within four years she had aged a lot.
If only i had known.


Dad really loved mum,but she broke his heart when she cheated with his best friend to have me. Dad was impotent,so for six years mum couldnt conceive.So she slept with his best friend,he found out and got angry,ever since then he started going to clubs,started drinking but i still cant forgive him for what he did to laila .


*****************

the story will soon end tnx for following.
Re: Laila A Short Story by hemjaylee(m): 8:03pm On Dec 13, 2014
Nimk Laila
Abeg do kwik
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 8:21pm On Dec 13, 2014
hemjaylee:
Nimk Laila
Abeg do kwik

should end tomorrow...tnx for following
Re: Laila A Short Story by hemjaylee(m): 8:33pm On Dec 13, 2014
Nimk:


should end tomorrow...tnx for following
datz nyc 2 hear
Itz notin
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 7:11pm On Dec 14, 2014
will try and update tomorow
Re: Laila A Short Story by hemjaylee(m): 9:14pm On Dec 14, 2014
Choi Nimk
Watz rong now
Y u dey do us like dis o we don...*not sayin*
Re: Laila A Short Story by hemjaylee(m): 9:15pm On Dec 14, 2014
Nimk:
will try and update tomorow
if datz it
Lemme keep my sweet palm wine till 2moro
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 10:05pm On Dec 14, 2014
hemjaylee:
if datz it
Lemme keep my sweet palm wine till 2moro


looool...tnx for following all d way...God bless

#happysunday
Re: Laila A Short Story by zyzxx(m): 7:00pm On Dec 15, 2014
Nimk, 2 kisses for u. don't end it yet
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 7:53pm On Dec 15, 2014
zyzxx:
Nimk, 2 kisses for u. don't end it yet


lol ,am sorry i ave not updated it...ive been going to the hospital...i promise to try and update wen im strong
Re: Laila A Short Story by zyzxx(m): 8:02pm On Dec 15, 2014
Nimk:



lol ,am sorry i ave not updated it...ive been going to the hospital...i promise to try and update wen im strong
Ah!!!!! Sorry sweetheart, pls take care of ur self, don't force urself to about. Sorry en...
U heal in jesus name dear, amen.

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Re: Laila A Short Story by Crocz(m): 6:56pm On Dec 16, 2014
Nimk:



lol ,am sorry i ave not updated it...ive been going to the hospital...i promise to try and update wen im strong

Eh yah..get well soon sweetie
Re: Laila A Short Story by zyzxx(m): 9:51pm On Dec 16, 2014
Nimk how is ur health dear, pls get well ooo...
No other means to reach u... sorry dear
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 5:42am On Dec 17, 2014
thanks guyz @ crocz and zyzxx......thanks kiss
Re: Laila A Short Story by zyzxx(m): 9:38am On Dec 17, 2014
Nimk:
thanks guyz @ crocz and zyzxx......thanks kiss
thanks, gud morning and hw is ur health nw?
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 7:01pm On Dec 20, 2014
zyzxx:
thanks, gud morning and hw is ur health nw?


jes got discharged from d hosp
Re: Laila A Short Story by zyzxx(m): 7:14pm On Dec 20, 2014
Nimk:



jes got discharged from d hosp
believe Me,, my mind came to u dis afternun, Eyah sorry sweetheart, d lord is ur strength, hope u are nw ok very well?
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 4:40am On Dec 22, 2014
zyzxx:
believe Me,, my mind came to u dis afternun, Eyah sorry sweetheart, d lord is ur strength, hope u are nw ok very well?


yh buh still runnin in n out of d hosp
Re: Laila A Short Story by zyzxx(m): 8:45am On Dec 22, 2014
Nimk:



yh buh still runnin in n out of d hosp
pls be ok, u knw christmas is @ hand.
I want u to eat all d fud dat day cheesy cheesy

Gud morning.
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 10:44am On Dec 22, 2014
zyzxx:
pls be ok, u knw christmas is @ hand.
I want u to eat all d fud dat day cheesy cheesy

Gud morning.


Will be fyn soon...it was a surgery so datz y tnxxxxx kiss
Re: Laila A Short Story by zyzxx(m): 11:02am On Dec 22, 2014
Nimk:



Will be fyn soon...it was a surgery so datz y tnxxxxx kiss
I don't no, I think it just drip or something, sorry sweetheart. What d nature of sickness?

Aww u are sweet thanks kiss
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 11:12am On Dec 22, 2014
zyzxx:
I don't no, I think it just drip or something, sorry sweetheart. What d nature of sickness?

Aww u are sweet thanks kiss


*blushing* hehehe im better now jare....itwas appendix ish
Re: Laila A Short Story by zyzxx(m): 11:20am On Dec 22, 2014
Nimk:



*blushing* hehehe im better now jare....itwas appendix ish
Ok... Thank God u are ok nw...
My Nimk is back wink wink
Re: Laila A Short Story by Onemansquad(m): 11:27am On Dec 22, 2014
Nimk, aw is ur health, hope u ar doing gud
#welcum bk
Re: Laila A Short Story by Crocz(m): 10:08pm On Dec 22, 2014
Nimk:



*blushing* hehehe im better now jare....itwas appendix ish

And that little sac has no role in the digestive system except to cause people probs angry


Get well soon sweetie...and I'll be waiting for the update on our story, when you have fully recovered ofcourse grin
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 11:14pm On Dec 22, 2014
iyaf blush finish....my head e haf sweeellll



Tnx so much guyz...ya d best.....i will update wen i can walk well sha...buh tnx once again..

Really needed this ...tnx

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Re: Laila A Short Story by zyzxx(m): 11:19am On Dec 25, 2014
Merry christmas Nimk
How are u dear?
Re: Laila A Short Story by Nimk(f): 9:57pm On Dec 25, 2014
zyzxx:
Merry christmas Nimk
How are u dear?


merry xmas to u too

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Re: Laila A Short Story by zyzxx(m): 9:05am On Jan 03, 2015
Nimk:



merry xmas to u too
Nimk, Apy new, where av u been?
Hope u are Gud?
How is ur health?

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Re: Laila A Short Story by funmo(m): 8:47am On Jan 29, 2015
hello queen Nimk

happy birthday beautiful


stop being proudly an Oau student and become a humbly an Oau student.... but u fine sha!! proud on jare

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