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Read and assess my poems.
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I'm no expert,
just playing with words

Odillz, Let me book space first wo.




I know who you are. This is........
Chai, why you like to dey change account like chameleon sef
Ayamlaykorn

laykorn:
Odillz, Let me book space first wo.




I know who you are. This is........
Chai, why you like to dey change account like chameleon sef
Ayamlaykorn

M back na
oya judge me

Odillz:

M back na
oya judge me

But, but.
But who am I to judge a fellow human being
Ayamlaykorn

laykorn:

But, but.
But who am I to judge a fellow human being
Ayamlaykorn

Okay.
Attend to my poems.

Odillz:
MISERABLE FOLA.

Day chamelionedchameleoned to night,
And as he walked past like a bullock,
The usual smells got up from their corners,
Shook dust off their buttock,
And attacked his nostrils like fore-runners.

Physically miserable with saggy jean,
Blotchy skin and dust polished sneakers.
Another day lost,no job found.
Pounding head and aching jaws,
Redhot eyes,Fola is a mess.

Dark cottage,no porridge,fowlfoul stench.
Knees on ground,body slowly lowers.
"I quit".
"I fold the day".
"I am gone".
Morning announces his repose,
Neigbours gather for Fola's dispose.

Dark dept,shallow pit,six feat.feet
Dirgy cries,more mourn,no feast.
Fola.
Breath and scent undesirable,
Miserable,Fola is miserable.

cc:
Sc rypt.
Stan dd.
Laykorn.
He rzumpther.
Mynd 44[/color][/b]

I corrected some typos up there. I like your use of similies and your rhymes are awesome too. But sincerely, I read and re-read this but didn't get the message. My brain is dull. Please explain.

I think, I think he committed suicide.
Ayamlaykorn

laykorn:

I corrected some typos up there. I like your use of similies and your rhymes are awesome too. But sincerely, I read and re-read this but didn't get the message. My brain is dull. Please explain.

I think, I think he committed suicide.
Ayamlaykorn

Thank you.
Fola is depicted as a guy who doesn't live the comfortable life of having a decent job,a decent house and even a decent food...So he sees himself miserable enough and gave up after another wasted day of not getting a job and hunger..

Odillz:

Thank you.
Fola is depicted as a guy who doesn't live the comfortable life of having a decent job,a decent house and even a decent food...So he sees himself miserable enough and gave up after another wasted day of not getting a job and hunger..

You mean he commited suicide?
Bad.

Let me check the other two.
Ayamlaykorn

laykorn:

You mean he commited suicide?
Bad.

Let me check the other two.
Ayamlaykorn

Waiting o

Odillz:
ICICLE.

The spirit feeds on frame,
Of hurtling fame.
Dark ethos,coquettish game,
Explore eugenics.
Scream eureka!
Life and icicle.


Esteem weakens,courage fails.
We become weak,we become faint.
We destroy ourselves.
We are evanescent,
Like an icicle.
Scream eureka!
Life and icicle.


When chips are down,
We are repudiated.
Living,hanging,searching for bailiff.
Hanging,tapering piece of icicle.
Scream eureka!
Life and icicle.


Dance in idyll,
Wail in peril,
Watch vicissitudes.
Catch an ice,
Toss a dice.
Scream eureka!
S-c-r-e-a-m!
I,
Life and icicle.

Cc:
Sta ndd.
M ynd44.
S crypt.
J amean.
L aykorn.

This one is deep wo.
You just made me feel so vulnerable, like a piece of of icicle.

Shouldn't the 'eurekas' be in upper case, Oddilz?

Ayamlaykorn

Odillz:
ASABE.

Partaker in the Painted veil called life,
Symbol of fruithfulness,
Symbol of motherhood.
Bent on fufilling destiny,
While turning around
Like a dog,
Trying to settle on a rug.


Thorny beauty as that
Of modern witches,
Asabe.
Supressed by mute
Echoes of pain,
Her skin caressed by
Fierce harmattan sun.


Wrapped in painful
Comfort of her Lord
Enuch,
Symbol of barrenness.
Asabe,
The once innocent Tendril.


Torrential downpour On leaking thatched Roof.
Hers is the tragi-Comic Schedule,
For she continues,
Dawdling as the call Of eagles on day old,
Chicks.


On face depressed With,
Oily tears.
Asabe reaches for Life,
And desire,
And dreams,
And death.

Cc:Laykorn.
Herzumpther.
Standd.
Scrypt.

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Ayamlaykorn