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Why Transgender Africans Turned Against Chimamanda Adichie / 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] / Behind The Clouds By Ifeoma Okoye (2) (3) (4)
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Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by boolet: 11:58pm On Aug 28, 2015 |
leggo |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Segadem(m): 12:07am On Aug 29, 2015 |
OMA4U:Yeah,this starting is better but not in anyway near how a novel should start. Let me give a trial: It was a cool beautiful Sunday morning like every other Sundays ,but for Mr. so, so, so and Mr. so,so it was a hot Sunday for them as their team at a check point saw a bike headlight approaching.... 8 Likes |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 12:18am On Aug 29, 2015 |
The poster above me is a winch 2 Likes |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 12:22am On Aug 29, 2015 |
format your story properly... |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Segadem(m): 12:23am On Aug 29, 2015 |
front page after how many months? 1 Like |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by bosunjohns(m): 12:23am On Aug 29, 2015 |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Segadem(m): 12:24am On Aug 29, 2015 |
tony4life58:how? |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by cyprus000: 12:51am On Aug 29, 2015 |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 12:52am On Aug 29, 2015 |
akpobi:gehngehn!! 1 Like |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by WebSurfer(m): 1:05am On Aug 29, 2015 |
continue bro, Udu hails 1 Like |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by slap1(m): 1:16am On Aug 29, 2015 |
Front page? |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by begwong: 1:23am On Aug 29, 2015 |
The story should have been concluded before hitting the FP biko! 1 Like |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by BobUg28(m): 1:24am On Aug 29, 2015 |
Great story with nice plot and chive of words. You have a very good concept on which the story can thrive but you need to work on some areas though. 1...SPACING/PARAGRAPHING: you need to space your work in such such a way that your readers 'll find it more convenient to read without getting bored easily. 2...CHARACTERIZATION here, the relationship between the sergeant and the Officer should be clearly outlined. What's the reason behind the vendetta that exists between the two police officers? It'll even help stretch your work further. 3...PUNCTUATION like Omao4 stated earlier, you need to work on those areas. Cheers! 1 Like |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by rittyben(f): 3:19am On Aug 29, 2015 |
Nice one. If he starts telling you about the relationship between the characters now don't you think it will affect his suspense? BobUg28: OMA4U: 4 Likes |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by oliidell(m): 4:34am On Aug 29, 2015 |
Segadem: I prefer OMA4U's. Again, why should a bike's headlight be on/visible on a cool beautiful morning. 3 Likes |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Segadem(m): 4:57am On Aug 29, 2015 |
oliidell:Figuratively, "a cool Sunday" was used to complement "a hot Sunday" ( that's literature for u). |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by rapmike(m): 5:01am On Aug 29, 2015 |
And this made frontpage? Not criticizing the writer but this is quite generous from the moderators. To the writer, welcome to Nairaland Literature section. Have not really had the chance to look through your work, but it seems that some of the bosses have already landed here. I will leave you in their hands for now. Larrysun, where are thou? This is your forte. |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by ketekete: 5:09am On Aug 29, 2015 |
I dey feel you, keep it up. |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by bennieman: 5:46am On Aug 29, 2015 |
I don't get why this is on the FP. The story has not even started yet! |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by fakooblak(m): 6:00am On Aug 29, 2015 |
Nice work bro, keep it up, but work on d corrections...., |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by akugbemike(m): 6:18am On Aug 29, 2015 |
Congrats OP, but please don't give us half baked beans o. |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by galadima77(m): 6:25am On Aug 29, 2015 |
Op please dont get lazy on us ooo. Some of us aren't any good at writing. We all can't be, but take advice/corrections from your readers. Following all the way from Minna, Niger state. |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by afo4real(m): 6:37am On Aug 29, 2015 |
interesting |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by benedict100(m): 6:40am On Aug 29, 2015 |
Bring It On coz we're ready to hear ur story |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Ebyce(f): 6:43am On Aug 29, 2015 |
interesting!! |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 6:55am On Aug 29, 2015 |
You really have a good plot and it can even get better if u follow those advice you've been earlier given. work on the suspense u want to create on ur readers. the work doesn't have any. u know suspense makes ur reader glued to ur piece. |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by InfinityEstates: 7:01am On Aug 29, 2015 |
Seriously? This is on FP?? A story with just two updates? There are several super interesting stories in the Literature section that haven't even made FP and this made FP. I'm not going to even talk about the corrections he has to make, others have talked about it enough. MODs there is God o. |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by countsparrow: 7:06am On Aug 29, 2015 |
I dey come... |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Kezifils(m): 7:08am On Aug 29, 2015 |
At the rate the op is going, this story is never going to end and most follower will loose interest. |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by ScobaXL: 7:15am On Aug 29, 2015 |
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Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by DeNoble1(m): 7:17am On Aug 29, 2015 |
OMA4U:Oga you for write your own. Did he ask you to critique his story for him? Humble opinion my foot. What is humble about this your rude exhibition of ITK? 1 Like 2 Shares |
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