A sunny day I'll say
A day to pen down my thoughts
A day to take a break from the air I chose to breathe
Taking in and breathing in the air I once breathed

That world I found myself I enjoyed
A fortress of solace I built
Where all I did was took a peep inside
And search my mind when I had to

Without the fear of being insecure
Cause I knew I was save with me
But slowly with the passage of time
I let myself go with the flow

And the current of the flow was different
From the world I knew myself to be part of
And without looking back for a moment
I kept going and going

And now I can't help but wonder
Who the better me is
The one that went with the flow
Or the one that was in my world

Wow, beautifully written poem. Nice one ma.

Thanks sir

Pranaya:
Thanks sir

Sir? ayam just 16.

Delicious22:
Sir? ayam just 16.

Lol. Respect is reciprocal

Pranaya:
Lol. Respect is reciprocal

Wow, ayam honoured. Wait let me call Chimamanda Adichie to come and see this master piece.

Delicious22:
Wow, ayam honoured. Wait let me call Chimamanda Adichie to come and see this master piece.

Funny you

"And the current of the flow was different From the world I knew myself to be part of And without looking back for a moment I kept going and going"


That's what caught my attention.

Pranaya, still awake?

Pranaya:
A sunny day I'll say A day to pen down my thoughts A day to take a break from the air I chose to breathe Taking in and breathing in the air I once breathed
That world I found myself I enjoyed A fortress of solace I built Where all I did was took a peep inside And search my mind when I had to
Without the fear of being insecure Cause I knew I was save with me But slowly with the passage of time I let myself go with the flow
And the current of the flow was different From the world I knew myself to be part of And without looking back for a moment I kept going and going
And now I can't help but wonder Who the better me is The one that went with the flow Or the one that was in my world

What's the rhyme scheme of the poem?

ShaqFu:
What's the rhyme scheme of the poem?

i doubt if it has any. I wrote what was on my mind.

Delicious22:
Pranaya, still awake?

I was

Pranaya:
i doubt if it has any. I wrote what was on my mind.

I see. Yet you wrote in quatrain form. Not bad all the same. Next time, be sure to check out different poetic forms and follow their rule. it helps makes you a better poet.

Pranaya:
I was

Hope your day is going smoothly?

ShaqFu:
I see. Yet you wrote in quatrain form. Not bad all the same. Next time, be sure to check out different poetic forms and follow their rule. it helps makes you a better poet.

Noted. Thanks

Delicious22:
Hope your day is going smoothly?

Yeah.