She showed Nnamdi the note and he said maybe it was a treat for ist class passengers and encouraged her to go. "If you don't come out in 2 minutes ,I will come and get you out of there myself,he said to her.

She was ushered inside the cockpit by a beautiful air hostess.Both pilots were white, they introduced themselves to her and asked if she was enjoying the flight.

Nnenna told them that she was enjoying the flight.The head pilot asked if she had ever been to Mauritius .Just as she was about to reply him,she felt a hand on her waist.
"Turn around "she heard a familiar voice say ,she turned to see Nnamdi on bended knees.


He brought out a ring with most exquisite rock she had ever seen and said ,"will you take off with me to unending destinations?". "Make me happy forever babe! And she said yes !!over and over again.
The pilots laughed and clapped at a job well done.

He took his wife to be. His peaches ,into his arms and planted a soft and tender kiss on her lips.This was the beginning of their journey.

I would like to commend you for this piece of writing, you did your best.
Now there are two things I would like to bring to your notice, and that is the lack of conflict in your piece. It seemed most of your protagonist's journeys were perfect, as also indicated in your title "the perfect journey". You could try to throw stones at your protagonist thereby making horrible things happen to her. At the end, let us know what choices she made to get out of her problem. This stirs suspense in a reader's mind.
Also, try to cut out sentences and even paragraphs that don't put the story where it should go. Some of the details you gave about how your protagonist boarded her flights were unnecessary.
Nevertheless, you did a nice job writing this. There are three rules in improving ones creative writing skill:
1. Write.
2. Write some more.
3. Keep writing.

Thanks a lot for the corrections

Another correction is make ur story long I noticed that u will jst type small n post

Another correction is make ur story long I noticed that u will jst type small n post. Nice Job

Weldone for d job well done

Thanks oh

Nice piece....me likey

Thanks darl

Hope all is well

Good job keep it up

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