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PERFIDY- A STORY OF LOVE,BETRAYAL AND DECEIT / Countless (a story of Sex, Betrayal and vengeance) by Darousmart Emmanuel. / United In Betrayal (2) (3) (4)

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Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by JOSSYperfect(f): 8:44am On Oct 20, 2016
Hello Angelinastto... na so the story take end
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 9:17am On Oct 20, 2016
CONTINUATION

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Seeing her made me short of words and words could not describe how i felt. I opened my mouth but i could not produce a word. How can we look this alike and not be blood related? I asked myself. The cafeteria attendance voice brought me back to reality, she was asking me to pickup my order and allow my sister have hers. I quickly said 'Hi' to Nelly and took my order. Since Nelly was the next person in line, i waited on her to get her order for me not to appear unfriendly. After getting her order, she said 'Thankyou' and i responded with 'welcome'.
We settled in an empty table and started to eat. She asked for my name and i told her 'Nancy' then she said "so you are Nancy and i am Nelly and together we are N square" we both laughed and continued to discuss as we eat. Nelly asked about my parent and she said she would love to meet them, suprisingly she is an only child as well and she did not hide how happy she was to have a twin sister. According to her, even if we are not blood related, our appearance made us a set of identical twin, we laughed at her theory and had a selfiee after lunch. With Nelly it felt like we have been together for years. We left the cafeteria together after lunch and we walked hand in hand to the general class.
The mathematics teacher could not hide his surprise when he saw nelly, he asked why my twin sister was just resuming school,i told him Nelly was not my twin and he could not hide is shock as he, diverted from the lecture to asking questions about myself and Nelly. The class ended and i left the school compound with Nelly, her driver arrived early but she waited for my driver to arrive before she left.
The car was moving slower because i was so anxious to get home. I needed to tell my mom everything about Nelly and be reassured that i am an only child. Having Nelly as a sister wont be a bad idea but i needed to be sure before i would draw a conclusion. I got home 3:20pm,i hurried out of the car to my mom's room. Mom was dressing up for somewhere when i got to her room, i hurriedly greeted her with a hug and told her we needed to talk. Mom sat me down on her bed and i told her everything about Nelly,she asked for the pictures and i could see the shock in her eyes when she saw the resemblance. I asked mom if i was adopted or if probably am a twin. Mom smilled and said "Nancy my baby,come here" i went into her arms and she continued " dont you ever think i will lie to you, you are all i have and all i need, i have no reason whatsoever to lie to you about anything. Surly this other girl looks like you but am also sure i did not give birth to a set of twin. You are the only apple of my eye. You know what? invite this girl over for lunch on friday and tell her i would love to meet her parents" Mom ended her speech and released me from her arm. I apologised for doubting mom and she said its a normal reaction. Mom left afterwards and i went to my room.
After changing my dress into something more comfortable i went to the kitchen and met kelvin making lunch. We exchanged pleasantries and he asked about school. I told kelvin about Nelly and mom's request, i also showed him the picture and he was as well shocked. Kelvin promised to make the best lunch on Friday,since i would be bringing my twin home and we both laughed. I was not really hungry so i left the kitchen after talking with kelvin. I called khole and Jordan,i told them about nelly and Jordan asked me to share the picture we took on whatsap.
I went to school happily the following day, i looked forward to lunch during my first lecture. I was so anxious to know what Nelly's reply would be when i tell her about my mom's invite.
The class ended and i rushed to the cafeteria in search of Nelly. I saw her sitting alone,immediately she saw me,she jumped towards me and hugged me. I returned the hug and we both went to place an order for lunch. We were yet to start eating when Nelly smilled and said " Twinny, i told my parent about you, and they were very happy. They said i should invite you over for lunch today,please dont say no" I was suprised, i told her about my mom's invite as well and we both laughed. During lunch i called mom and she agreed with me going with Nelly but on the condition that i will go with the driver and her parent will come with her for lunch on friday in order to clear all doubt. I told Nelly about my mom's conditions and she called her dad to inform him about my mom's conditions. Nelly's dad said he could only make dinner on friday because he would be bussy during lunch. I called mom back to inform her and she agreed with the arrangement. Nelly was happy about the arrangement and so was i, i was just a bit nervous about meeting her family.
After lunch,we left for English class together and throughout the lecture i could not keep the thought of what Nelly's parent reacting would be out of my mind.
T.B.C

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Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 9:18am On Oct 20, 2016
JOSSYperfect:
Hello Angelinastto... na so the story take end
Lol e never end o my sister. This is stil chapter two.
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by PopoolaTaiwo: 9:37am On Oct 20, 2016
what z d next episode
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Mercielove(f): 9:47am On Oct 20, 2016
Great work Angle. keep it up
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 10:03am On Oct 20, 2016
Danhumprey:
incase you have not noticed. When you type this punctuation mark '?' thrice in succession or in multiples of three close to each other,you end up producing this smiley===> when you click the submit button.


Try it and see
yes! Thats true. Thanks alot.
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 10:03am On Oct 20, 2016
abdulwadood:
Following.. More ink to your pen
Thanks dear. God bless you!
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 10:04am On Oct 20, 2016
ezechueze:
OK
Hnmmmmmmmmming
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 10:06am On Oct 20, 2016
jagugu88li:
Rude on baby.....we are here. cool
Will be coming back for more
Lol thanks swidy. We? Like plenty people?
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 10:07am On Oct 20, 2016
NwaliE01:
This piece is on point and one of its kind. The story line sounds foreign but I enjoyed it. Please keep it coming!!!
Thank you sir.
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 10:09am On Oct 20, 2016
JOSSYperfect:






Where and how can i get the full story please
This is the first platform am posting it on. The complete story is in my head.

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Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by olanrewaju99(m): 11:38am On Oct 20, 2016
Nice story, very interesting and entertaining.
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by chinedumo(m): 11:45am On Oct 20, 2016
Wow. Interesting. Enjoying the story o angelinastto.

Kelvin vs rude boy

who will win her heart?
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by jagugu88li(f): 12:03pm On Oct 20, 2016
Angelinastto:

Lol thanks swidy. We? Like plenty people?
Yeah, me and friends. Don't mind them they'll ghost read but I trust you to bring them forward. kiss

Check your tenses. Also, when writing short hand I get the feeling you're somehow lazy to write and if not, use italics to show that its an inappropriate written language (somtin) and you intentionally wrote it like that. Proof read your work. Mind you, I'm not a writer but I'm giving my opinion.
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by shalom7(f): 12:35pm On Oct 20, 2016
Nice one dear,.........keep it coming
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by xamster(m): 1:07pm On Oct 20, 2016
Claps.....wow! What an interesting story. I stunbled on it an hour ago and read till the last update. Anyways am a realist and would therefore commend your work as much as i would highlight a few mistakes.
At first, don't give the reader's a direct idea of the next scene, sometimes u should employ suspense and then again illuminate the story.
Then again, i came across some few typo errors.
Moreso, punctuate accordingly and proof read before posting.
And lastly am sure the next episode will then connect us to the title of the story. Aside that am thrilled by your writting prowess angelinastto.....osheey
mention me in the next update. Soft work dear
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by osleek: 1:14pm On Oct 20, 2016
Beautiful piece
just a few typo error and you need to use punctuation more....keep up the good work dear wink
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by DTOBS(m): 3:06pm On Oct 20, 2016
I smell rat grin

Nelly and Nancy...
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 3:52pm On Oct 20, 2016
All the comments and corrections got me emotional. Am feeling nothing but love. Thank you all for making time to build a better me!

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Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by oluwatymylehyn(m): 4:02pm On Oct 20, 2016
It's getting more interesting. The story is very OK. I wouldn't castigate you at all because many have pointed out your mistakes and I believe you will work on it for sure. Kudos, more grease to your elbow. Keep it coming.
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Nikkybrainz(f): 4:21pm On Oct 20, 2016
Fantastic story. I can't wait to see where it leads. Just listen to the advice given by the grammarians and proofreaders in the house. I'm a babywriter myself. Really engaging story smiley
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by patjane(f): 5:02pm On Oct 20, 2016
Keep it up dear"lovely story. still waiting 4 your update grin grin
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by timmykaydude: 6:12pm On Oct 20, 2016
Angelinastto:
The last update is specially dedicated to Vectoh,Babsopey and hormobolanle for been the first set of people to coment and encourage my writing. God bless you all!
nice story,thumbs up
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:31pm On Oct 20, 2016
CONTINUATION

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After the day's lecture i went to Nelly's house with my driver. Her house was a beautiful mansion,her parent welcomed me like their child and her mom kept calling me 'her daughter'. We settled in the large living room and Nelly's dad asked me about my background,he could not hide how happy he was to have two daughters and he went on and on to express his joy.
After the brief discussion, Nelly's mom led us to the dinning room and we had a delicious meal of fried rice and chicken. We laughed and disscussed like a family throughout the meal. Nelly's mom talked about nelly's childhood and she kept asking if we had the same childhood behaviour.
Nelly took me to her room after lunch and she gave me her family album to go through. I noticed different pictures of a particular guy and i asked Nelly who he was. She took a deep breathe and said "Twinny, his name is Uche and he his a son of a minister, i was betrothed to him ever since i was ten but i have no interest in him. Mom and dad made it compulsory for me to marry uche in future, in order to boost dad's political carrier". I could feel the sadness in Nelly's voice so i moved closer to her and consoled her. I told her her parents, might change their mind or she might end up falling inlove with the guy. Nelly cheered up alittle and asked if i had a boyfriend, i told her about Jordan without hidding the fact that we were just friends at the moment but we might end up together in future. Nelly said she wished she could fall inlove with some one of her choice as well. We gisted alot and had fun playing video games before i made my departure know to Nelly.
Nelly informed her parent of my departure and they saw me off to the car. I collected Nelly's number and her parent's as well before leaving the Stanleys mansion.
Mom welcomed me with questions about the stanleys as i arrived home, i told her everything about the family and she was happy i found a sister and a friend. Mom asked for Mr. Stanley's number and called to appreciate their kind gesture. She also promised to send a driver to lead their way to our house the following day for dinner.
I was about leaving for my room when mom said " Baby, jordan's parent called to invite you to his birthday party on sunday evening. I can see you two are getting close, hope am not missing anything ma'am?" i smilled and told mom i do not know what she was talking about but i will surly honour the invite. I could hear her laughter as i left for my room.
I had a change of cloth and went to meet Kelvin in the kitchen. He was making dinner and he welcomed me with questions as well. I told him about the stanleys as we made beans and plantain for dinner. After dinner, i excused myself to my room and called Jordan. I told him about the stanleys and he said he would love to meet Nelly. We decided we should all meet at our hotel gym on saturday morning.
The following day was friday, school was fun with Nelly and during lunch i informed her of Jordan's invite. She was equally happy and she accepted to come over on saturday. I also invited Nelly to Jordan's birthday party but she declined, saying her parent wont let her hang out at night. The day's lecture ended and we departed, promising to see eachother at dinner.
Time checked 7:00pm, i was so excited when i heard the sound of cars arriving our compound,without been told i knew it was the Stanleys. I rushed downstairs to join mom in welcoming our guest. Just the way Nelly's mother welcomed me, mom also welcomed her like her child. Formal introductions were made and we all went to the dinning room following mom's lead.
After dinner i took Nelly to my room and the adults were left to disscuss. I invited kelvin over to my room and we all discussed like long lost friends. By 8:00pm the stanleys were ready to leave, it was a sad goodbye but nelly consoled me by reminding me of our meeting the following day.
After the Stanleys departure i followed mom to her room and immediately we settled on her bed, i asked her if i am related to Nelly. She took a deep breathe and said with a sad tone "No baby, she is a sickler and you are not". I went into mom's arm with mixed feeling. Sad i do not have a sister but happy my mom has been truthful.
T.B.C

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Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:36pm On Oct 20, 2016
olanrewaju99:
Nice story, very interesting and entertaining.
Thanks dear.
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:38pm On Oct 20, 2016
chinedumo:
Wow. Interesting. Enjoying the story o angelinastto.

Kelvin vs rude boy

who will win her heart?
Lol,do u see competition here? Maybe i need my goggle cos ion see any.
Thanks bro.
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:41pm On Oct 20, 2016
jagugu88li:
Yeah, me and friends. Don't mind them they'll ghost read but I trust you to bring them forward. kiss

Check your tenses. Also, when writing short hand I get the feeling you're somehow lazy to write and if not, use italics to show that its an inappropriate written language (somtin) and you intentionally wrote it like that. Proof read your work. Mind you, I'm not a writer but I'm giving my opinion.
Wow thanks for taking your time to comment sis. About the tenses the story is in past tense. Nancy is narrating the past events. I will try not to be lazzy again Insha Allah.

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Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:42pm On Oct 20, 2016
shalom7:
Nice one dear,.........keep it coming
Thanks sis
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:45pm On Oct 20, 2016
xamster:
Claps.....wow! What an interesting story. I stunbled on it an hour ago and read till the last update. Anyways am a realist and would therefore commend your work as much as i would highlight a few mistakes.
At first, don't give the reader's a direct idea of the next scene, sometimes u should employ suspense and then again illuminate the story.
Then again, i came across some few typo errors.
Moreso, punctuate accordingly and proof read before posting.
And lastly am sure the next episode will then connect us to the title of the story. Aside that am thrilled by your writting prowess angelinastto.....osheey
mention me in the next update. Soft work dear
Thanks bro. About the next episode leading you to the title, its a No. The story still has a lonnnnggg way to go. God bless you for me for the corrections.
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:46pm On Oct 20, 2016
osleek:
Beautiful piece
just a few typo error and you need to use punctuation more....keep up the good work dear wink
thanks dear
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:46pm On Oct 20, 2016
DTOBS:
I smell rat grin
Nelly and Nancy...
Lol i smell cow.
Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:48pm On Oct 20, 2016
oluwatymylehyn:
It's getting more interesting. The story is very OK. I wouldn't castigate you at all because many have pointed out your mistakes and I believe you will work on it for sure. Kudos, more grease to your elbow. Keep it coming.
Wow... Finally!! Been waiting for you comment. Thanks alot

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