rapjunkie:

its cool. check your flow on  the rhyming scheme  on 3rd verse which ends something like ' only u can break it through'

i think you should use these types of changes in the inflection in your voice on a more regular basis in your rhymes. Up  and down in places to add more emphasis in parts and also to break it up to make it sound more interesting for repeatability value.

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dj sean:

hommie, it's ya boy holdin' ish down for you, @djaysean

rapjunkie:

its cool. check your flow on  the rhyming scheme  on 3rd verse which ends something like ' only u can break it through'

i think you should use these types of changes in the inflection in your voice on a more regular basis in your rhymes. Up  and down in places to add more emphasis in parts and also to break it up to make it sound more interesting for repeatability value.

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eldee:

I am El and I co-sign this message.

dj sean:

hommie, it's ya boy holdin' ish down for you, @djaysean

rapjunkie:

its cool. check your flow on  the rhyming scheme  on 3rd verse which ends something like ' only u can break it through'

i think you should use these types of changes in the inflection in your voice on a more regular basis in your rhymes. Up  and down in places to add more emphasis in parts and also to break it up to make it sound more interesting for repeatability value.

my 50 kobo

eldee:

I am El and I co-sign this message.

semid4lyfe:

I have problems with the production though. . .it could have been better. Still it's your best effort IMO and definitely flyer than the rest of 'em.

eldee:

Hehehe . . . '[b]w[/b]rapjunkie those hating on me are dropouts. . . no class'

semid4lyfe:

Question - Shey na (your) true life story?


I love these opening lines. . . .very smooth flow, properly arranged sequence of the story/plot and it set a direction for the song early on. As in person go know se na grass to grace story sharp sharp Good story telling, Brilliant and thumbs up!

All in all, the rapping was better than okay, it had a good rhyming sequence, decent play on words woven around some concepts [(i.e relating the street to the company and how you're Micheal Scoffield fighting against all odds to get scylla and survive (make it)], well crafted story, chorus blended, in sync and was in line with the rap lyrics.

I have problems with the production though. . .it could have been better. Still it's your best effort IMO and definitely flyer than the rest of 'em.

I'll put my remaining comments in the scorecard - 7.5/10

tosinaded@:

gay alert

da-whizkid:

Hahahahaha Tosin u are mahd! Btw, i don't want no problem with Rapjunkie 0. . . Hehehe

semid4lyfe:

Question - Shey na (your) true life story?
Growing up life was like concrete. . .so haaard (with the right voice inflection & emphasis to indicate just how tough it was. . .on point!)
Dad was an apprentice, mum sold bread
And I stepped into the street seeking for prosperity
I almost died, almost lost focus of posterity

I love these opening lines. . . .very smooth flow, properly arranged sequence of the story/plot and it set a direction for the song early on. As in person go know se na grass to grace story sharp sharp Good story telling, Brilliant and thumbs up!

All in all, the rapping was better than okay, it had a good rhyming sequence, decent play on words woven around some concepts [(i.e relating the street to the company and how you're Micheal Scoffield fighting against all odds to get scylla and survive (make it)], well crafted story, chorus blended, in sync and was in line with the rap lyrics.

I have problems with the production though. . .it could have been better. Still it's your best effort IMO and definitely flyer than the rest of 'em.

I'll put my remaining comments in the scorecard - 7.5/10

dj sean:

mp3skull sure is the ish, courage, do tell 'em, better than 4shared to an extent , though they are affiliated but at least, i ain't gotta wait for the flimpsy 320 seconds, tscheeew,

jamez3d:

I gbadun the track sha! Nice stuff. . I love the way you crafted the story sha. . Make sense, this one and won beri freestyle are my best two. . Keep it up

ibime:
^^^Sup bros. I woke up with serious flu this morning so I've been lying in bed all day. I just reach living room to listen to the track now now and I think its the best so far. I wasn't a great fan of the previous ones na im make I been comment my reserve.

Altogether the track was good, the lyrics were clear, you didn't stretch the intonation like the previous ones, and nuccas could relate to the introspective nature of the lyrics. . .and nice chorus as well from your friend.

Perhaps, you should wait till you're fully recovered from your flu before posting an opinion and review

Sorrry ehn, get well soon

da-whizkid:

Where d eff is o4ka? Where u dey bros?

Ibime:

^^^Sup bros. I woke up with serious flu this morning so I've been lying in bed all day. I just reach living room to listen to the track now now and I think its the best so far. I wasn't a great fan of the previous ones na im make I been comment my reserve.

Altogether the track was good, the lyrics were clear, you didn't stretch the intonation like the previous ones, and nuccas could relate to the introspective nature of the lyrics. . .and nice chorus as well from your friend.

04kaa:

i am here my blood, i went to bahamas this weekend for my honeymoon with ileke idi, i am back now and i am downloading.
i will be back wit my comments, observations and criticisms. keep it going fam. ! start working on the next track immediately ,
u know i will keep pushing u until u blow up big time.! thats what ebora is about ., success and eventual blow up!

DBR:

Courage da-whizkid, clap for urself. .weldone! *in M.i"s voice*

Keep grindin' boii. .u can only get better.
Good lookin'

oNe