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My emotions grew
Just as Adonis' death rings
Aphrodite knew
Not until her touch thus clings
Would I express my feelings

Show me the death spot
My lover is there; a Rose
This love is yet hot
She gives me love, like a dose
My body needs her for a pose

We were, before birth
Birthed with smiles of affection
Yet, and after earth;
Immortal love, emotions
Treasury of sensations

Analysis

The Tanka is about the death of Adonis, Aphrodite's lover. When he died flowers -Roses- grew at his death spot.

The poem uses the above story to create a love affection between a man and a woman named "Rose". The immortality of their love also gets it's root from the mythological love story between Aphrodite and Adonis.


joseph1832, Dklef, gracile

Nice. But Tanka's are suppose to be written in a single verse, and the syllable structure is not complete in the first stanza, line 4.

JoeBlocks:
Nice. But Tanka's are suppose to be written in a single verse, and the syllable structure is not complete in the first stanza, line 4.

Single verse ? Omg...thanks for the correction.
And for the line 4,i didn't see that coming. You've a good eye.

TheAgba:
Single verse ? Omg...thanks for the correction.
And for the line 4,i didn't see that coming. You've a good eye.

Single verse = single stanza. LOL. Just keep on writing. And remember, whenever you read about a particular form or structure of a poem, make sure you do a thorough research about it, check at least three or four sites to know whether the form is the same with the others, because sometimes, these sites contradict each other.

JoeBlocks:
Single verse = single stanza. LOL. Just keep on writing. And remember, whenever you read about a particular form or structure of a poem, make sure you do a thorough research about it, check at least three or four sites to know whether the form is the same with the others, because sometimes, these sites contradict each other.

Thanks for that. I would do just that.

TheAgba:
Thanks for that. I would do just that.

Awesome. Enjoy your day.

Nice one