The Kiss Dream - Poems For Review - Nairaland
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| The Kiss Dream by merit12(op): 2:21pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
The kiss dream I have always want to kiss his soft lips, I do not have courage to tell him I don't want to lost the friend I charish. All of a sudden his smiling face came closer, I saw his eyes shone bright like a diamond He brought his face close to me . I draw my face more closer with all my best smile He planted a soft kiss on my lips, I lost my self in his lips and tongue I was lost but find my self in him. As I hold him to kiss him harder I felt a hot slap on lip,I opened my eyes Oh it was a dream,the kissed dream. young. Cc EverestDeBliu and texanomaly gloriaz and laykorn This my own assignment.I will be writting more I need some corrections Thank you |
| Re: The Kiss Dream by DaDevin: 4:23pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
merit12:It's compelling to read, easy to understand (No deep meaning attached, all surface clear) like the ending, desire turned fantasy.  I'm Not a pro analyst on poetry, just my opinion... Ur next poem, be sure to add more spice to it, play with words more. i saw the picture in this though Cheers |