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Should I Wait Or Move Forward by merit12(f): 8:49pm On Dec 19, 2014
I crave for you night and day you returned not
I wake up with ya name on my lips
I remember every promises you made to me
I wonder if you have forgotten in a short while
I wonder if you think of me like I think of you
A day can't go by without your name on my mind
I wish I had a flesh of you inside me to remind me of you
But you were too careful not to plant a seed
I wonder if it has been a game plan by you
I told myself not to fall for you I try and fail
I thought I was going to toy with you and leave
Now I'm still wondering if you ever come back
Should I pack my remaining piece or wait for you?

Cc Veralaw
laykorn
harrysterol
Ghostlady.
dre11
Leki10
herald9
FrancisTony
princesa.
timpaker
Re: Should I Wait Or Move Forward by Nobody: 8:52pm On Dec 19, 2014
merit12:
I crave for you night and day you returned not
I wake up with ya name on my lips
I remember every promises you made to me
I wonder if you have forgotten in a short while
I wonder if you think of me like I think of you
A day can't go by without your name on my mind
I wish I had a flesh of you inside me to remind me of you
But you were to careful not to plant a seed
I wonder if it has been a game plan by you
I told myself not to fall for you I try and fail
I thought I was going to toy with you and leave
Now I'm still wondering if you ever come back
Should I pack my remaining piece or wait for you?

Cc Veralaw
laykorn
harrysterol
Ghostlady.
dre11
herald9
FrancisTony
princesa.
timpaker
nice one sweedy.... wink
You are good... I noticed that you open different topic for different poems You can open just one thread for your poems dear...you can check mine... embarassed
Re: Should I Wait Or Move Forward by princesa(f): 9:02pm On Dec 19, 2014
merit12:

I crave for you night and day you returned not
I wake up with ya name on my lips
I remember every promises you made to me
I wonder if you have forgotten in a short while
I wonder if you think of me like I think of you
A day can't go by without your name on my mind
I wish I had a flesh of you inside me to remind me of you
But you were too careful not to plant a seed
I wonder if it has been a game plan by you
I told myself not to fall for you I try and fail
I thought I was going to toy with you and leave
Now I'm still wondering if you ever come back
Should I pack my remaining piece or wait for you?



nice one, felt the deep yearning of the poet persona. Just needs a little proof reading though.
Re: Should I Wait Or Move Forward by dre11(m): 9:14pm On Dec 19, 2014
Nice one merit12

But make sure all your poems are in one place
Also you forgot ur punctuation.
You didn't give your poem a title.



It will always get better prettysmiley
Re: Should I Wait Or Move Forward by merit12(f): 9:17pm On Dec 19, 2014
Bows my head thank you
dre11:
Nice one merit12

But make sure all your poems are in one place
Also you forgot ur punctuation.
You didn't give your poem a title.



It will always get better prettysmiley
Re: Should I Wait Or Move Forward by mcfynest(m): 1:36pm On Dec 20, 2014
merit12:
I crave for you night and day you returned not
I wake up with ya name on my lips
I remember every promises you made to me
I wonder if you have forgotten in a short while
I wonder if you think of me like I think of you
A day can't go by without your name on my mind
I wish I had a flesh of you inside me to remind me of you
But you were too careful not to plant a seed
I wonder if it has been a game plan by you
I told myself not to fall for you I try and fail
I thought I was going to toy with you and leave
Now I'm still wondering if you ever come back
Should I pack my remaining piece or wait for you?

Cc Veralaw
laykorn
harrysterol
Ghostlady.
dre11
Leki10
herald9
FrancisTony
princesa.
timpaker


NICE ONE SIS,

told myself not to fall for you I try and fail
I thought I was going to toy with you and leave

I guess this should have been above the poem so we can truly understand how it all started. Punctuations too dear, and the use of "YA"(slang) occured once, so slang shouldnt have been used atall.

Mice one sis, well i hope one day it would be a religious poem.
Re: Should I Wait Or Move Forward by leki10(m): 12:28am On Dec 21, 2014
dre11:
Nice one merit12

But make sure all your poems are in one place
Also you forgot ur punctuation.
You didn't give your poem a title.



It will always get better prettysmiley
i agree with him.
the sky is ur starting point

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