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Ah..Ah... I read Mabel with NseEtim in mind.

This is a good one.
And where have you been Ikamenze? Ehn?

prof800:
Ah..Ah... I read Mabel with NseEtim in mind.

This is a good one.
And where have you been Ikamenze? Ehn?

Bn around bro....u know say na once in 3yrs I dey post..lol...but thnx tho...
Whr's d rest of gang tho? VillageBoi n co...I wan hear werrin dem fink..

Ikamenze:


Bn around bro....u know say na once in 3yrs I dey post..lol...but thnx tho...
Whr's d rest of gang tho? VillageBoi n co...I wan hear werrin dem fink..

The gang dey ooo. They only come in once in a while.

Shey you dey for Lagos ni..?

prof800:

The gang dey ooo. They only come in once in a while.

Shey you dey for Lagos ni..?

I dey Benin...but I dey enta Lag regularly sha...any beta?

Ikamenze:


I dey Benin...but I dey enta Lag regularly sha...any beta?

Nothing jare my bother.

Lol...nice effort. Though, I didn't find the story realistic or grounded enough except you want it to be a comedy skit. I may be wrong but that's my opinion.

It started getting funny to me with the line by Mabel: 'I don't follow'.

Pls, check for some spelling errors:
Have you being been....?
Your cv is impressed impressive.
MABEL: Listen Mabel Sharon.

Nice effort bro. You can please check out my short script too I recently posted: 'Midday Special'.

sholay2011:
Lol...nice effort. Though, I didn't find the story realistic or grounded enough except you want it to be a comedy skit. I may be wrong but that's my opinion.

It started getting funny to me with the line by Mabel: 'I don't follow'.

Pls, check for some spelling errors:
Have you being been....?
Your cv is impressed impressive.
MABEL: Listen Mabel Sharon.

Nice effort bro. You can please check out my short script too I recently posted: 'Midday Special'.

Thanx....buts its not a comedy skit,even tho d end was laced with a little humor,my intention was not to be funi...its actually a message piece....if ur mindset isn't too shallow,I'm sure u will get what I'm trying to convey....and I'm not one to be bugged down by genres...(Lemme borrow a few of Sharon's words...while Genres do go a long way,I fink what's really important is telling a Good story...noticed how most hollywood films or series are usually a combination of genres? Nobody wants to be restricted by them)....that said, I don't understand what u meant by it not being realistic or grounded enuf..last I checked,d word was FICTION..if hollywood only made realistic n grounded stories like u suggest,I doubt dey will be whr dey re today...and finally,I've corrected d spellings...good eye by way,read thru it ova 50tyms n I still missed those..one of d cons of writing n editing ur own stuff.

I read ur story....it was alright...pay attention to wot d first guy who commented said.....and pls,don't make dat mistake of writing in ur dialect again (we've actually discussed dis issue b4..even yoruba films aren't written in yoruba) and ur dialogue needs more work......all d same gud effort,kip practicing okay...

I wish d moderators wud move both stories to d front page so dey wud reach a wider audience.....just a thought..

Ikamenze:


Thanx....buts its not a comedy skit,even tho d end was laced with a little humor,my intention was not to be funi...its actually a message piece....if ur mindset isn't too shallow,I'm sure u will get what I'm trying to convey....and I'm not one to be bugged down by genres...(Lemme borrow a few of Sharon's words...while Genres do go a long way,I fink what's really important is telling a Good story...noticed how most hollywood films or series are usually a combination of genres? Nobody wants to be restricted by them)....that said, I don't understand what u meant by it not being realistic or grounded enuf..last I checked,d word was FICTION..if hollywood only made realistic n grounded stories like u suggest,I doubt dey will be whr dey re today...and finally,I've corrected d spellings...good eye by way,read thru it ova 50tyms n I still missed those..one of d cons of writing n editing ur own stuff.

I read ur story....it was alright...pay attention to wot d first guy who commented said.....and pls,don't make dat mistake of writing in ur dialect again (we've actually discussed dis issue b4..even yoruba films aren't written in yoruba) and ur dialogue needs more work......all d same gud effort,kip practicing okay...

I wish d moderators wud move both stories to d front page so dey wud reach a wider audience.....just a thought..

Okay.

sholay2011:

Okay.

No disrespect bro..incase u re takin dat d wrong way..