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Nice one; I wont be surprised if this is actually happening in Nigeria now.

Pls How do the mods here chose threads for front page? I've created threads here of my work just like this OP has done but i never get the privilege. Abi them dey look face ni?abi na cos I no add lalasticlala? Well that's the thread below

https://www.nairaland.com/2703512/obika-2-funny-animated-video-nairalander https://www.nairaland.com/2532178/obika-funny-animation-video-nairalander

sholay2011:
ACTION FILM

BY

SHOLAY


FADE IN:

INT. SMALL CAFETERIA- DAY
A close shot of a radio with an old highlife track emanating from its speakers. We see a ladle as it scoops well-fried stew on two plates of white rice and ripe plantain. It drops two meats into each plate.

We meet AMINA (15), a chubby, dark-complexioned girl serving some food for a YOUNG MAN (29) at the counter.
Glimpses of the cafeteria: arranged chairs and tables, a wall clock that is working, and a well-dressed, FAIR-COMPLEXIONED LADY (24) seated in one of the chairs, playing a ‘game’ on her mobile phone.

Amina opens the nearby freezer and picks two bottles: one Guinness, one Fanta.

EXT. SMALL CAFETERIA-DAY
A car ZOOMS into the arena and parks in fashion. Jako (34), dressed in rough clothing and face-cap puffs out smoke from a cigarette in his hand. He alights from the car and matches the cigarette while the bandage on his left arm is quite visible. He adjusts his face-cap.

INT. SMALL CAFETERIA- DAY
Amina cleans the counter with a napkin. The young man and fair-complexioned lady are seated together, eating. Jako enters and walks up to the counter.

JAKO
Afternoon.

AMINA
Good afternoon, sir.

We notice the Hausa accent in Amina’s spoken English. She squints her eyes a little while staring at him.

JAKO
What’s available?

AMINA
Em…em…r-rice…plantain…

JAKO
You have beans?

AMINA (shakes her head)
Hm-hm.

JAKO
Give me rice- #200, four meats and a lot of plantain.

AMINA
Okay sir.

Camera pans to the young man and his companion as they talk amidst smiles. The highlife song ends and a juju song starts on the radio. Jako goes to a seat at the corner with his food and bottled water.

Amina looks from the counter as he sits and quickly bends down to search a drawer at the counter. She pulls out a piece of paper with the picture of Jako on it and its emboldened title reads ‘WANTED’. ‘ANYONE WITH VALUABLE INFORMATION OF THE WHEREABOUTS OF THIS MAN SHOULD PLEASE CONTACT THE POLICE IMMEDIATELY ON 08010530786. MR JAKANDE GABRIEL IS AN EXTREMELY DANGEROUS CRIMINAL. A HANDSOME REWARD AWAITS THIS PERSON’, reads after the picture.
She sighs.

AMINA (faces one of the inner rooms of the cafeteria)
Em….mummy!

MADAM ORIJAJOOGUN (O.C, in Yoruba)
What?

AMINA
Ahn…em…nothing ma.

MADAM ORIJAJOOGUN (O.C)
Talk now oh…

AMINA (mumbles)
Nothing.

MADAM ORIJAJOOGUN (56), emerges from one of the inner rooms dressed in a fashionable iro and buba, ties her headgear and carries a bag. Amina pockets the ‘notice’.

MADAM ORIJAJOOGUN (In Yoruba)
It’s you that knows what is wrong with you.
(In English)
Just ensure you close by 7pm sharp and lock the door. I don’t want to hear story oh.

AMINA
Yes ma.

MADAM ORIJAJOOGUN
Ehn-ehn. Because when-

A cell phone rings. Amina turns off the radio while Madam Orijajoogun takes her phone from her bag and answers the call.

MADAM ORIJAJOOGUN (In Yoruba)
Friend, how far? (pause) Ah, I am ready; I am all dressed up now. (pause) it’s surely ‘to-match’. They must know that one Mrs Orija is in this town when I storm that place…

She signals to Amina that she is leaving as she strolls outside while still on the phone.

AMINA’S POV- Jako struggles with a meat while the young man and his lady are talking over their meal. Amina leaves for one of the inner rooms.

INT. CAFETERIA/INNER ROOM- DAY
She brings out her rickety phone and the paper notice and dials the number. She looks irritated. After few trials, the phone on the other end rings.

INT. POLICE STATION/ ENCLOSED OFFICE- DAY
Officer Austin (40), dressed in his police uniform, picks up the phone.

OFFICER AUSTIN
Hello…

AMINA (O.S)
Hello sir. I am Amina…calling from ‘Madam Orija’ restaurant. Em…the person you are looking for- ja-ja kan-

OFFICER AUSTIN
-Jakande Gabriel? Jako?

AMINA
Yes sir. Please, come quickly…‘Madam Orija restaurant’.

OFFICER AUSTIN
Don’t worry, i know the restaurant. Not far from ‘division a’ at all. Azizat, right?

AMINA (O.S)
It is Amina.

OFFICER AUSTIN
Thank you very much. We are on our way.

INT. CAFETERIA/INNER ROOM- DAY
Amina is still on the phone.

AMINA
Okay sir. Bye-bye.

The call ends. She gently pockets her phone and the paper notice.

INT. CAFETERIA- DAY
Amina enters frame and walks up to the counter. Jako is nowhere to be seen at his table but his plate is far from empty. Amina starts to panic. We see the wall clock ticking. The ‘young man’ blows off dirt from the eye of his fair-complexioned companion. After few attempts, the lady appears okay.

Jako emerges from the men’s restroom, staring at Amina and walks back to his seat and continues eating. Amina sighs, looks a bit relieved.
Jako’s cell phone rings and he brings out his ‘expensive-looking’ phone from his pocket and picks the call, speaking in a low tone.


JAKO
Any problem?

INT. POLICE STATION/ENCLOSED OFFICE- DAY

OFFICER AUSTIN
Thank God. Why are you not picking your calls?

JAKO
Well, I’ve picked it now.

OFFICER AUSTIN
Someone recognises you where you are…right now.

INTERCUT BETWEEN THE OFFICE AND THE RESTAURANT

JAKO (sighs, adjusts his face cap)
Someone called your station?

OFFICER AUSTIN
Obviously. A female.

Jako PEEPS around, making furtive glances at the fair-complexioned lady who is engrossed in a romantic discussion with her ‘young man’.

OFFICER AUSTIN (cont’d)
You have to get out of there now. We will soon be on our way.

JAKO
O-okay.

OFFICER AUSTIN
One more thing…be careful.

JAKO
You can’t teach me my job Austin.

OFFICER AUSTIN
‘Just saying. ‘Because if you are caught, it’s not only you that’s going down.

JAKO
Thanks. Bye.

Jako ends the call.

INT. POLICE STATION/OFFICE- DAY
Officer Austin MARCHES to an open office where some armed police officers are seated in clusters, discussing.

OFFICER AUSTIN
Eh, i just got a call on the location of this Jako guy.

CUT TO:

INT. CAFETERIA- DAY
Amina gives Jako a side stare (as he rushes his food) and also, peeps at the ticking wall clock.

ISABELLA (29), a tall lady adorned in casual wear with a handbag, enters the cafeteria and walks up to the counter amidst broad smiles.

ISABELLA
Hi.

AMINA
Afternoon, ma.

ISABELLA
Afternoon. You sell food here, right?

Amina nods, takes a furtive peep at Jako.

ISABELLA
What’s available?

Jako stands up from his seat and walks towards the door. Amina appears confused.

AMINA
Sir! Sir!

Jako pauses.

JAKO
Yes?

AMINA
Your…your change sir…

JAKO
-keep it…

AMINA
Ermm…but sir…

JAKO
-what?!

Everyone’s attention is drawn to them. Amina looks stung.

AMINA
Hun…nothing, bye-bye sir.

Jako leaves angrily for his car.

ISABELLA
You know him?

AMINA (lowers her voice)
That man is a criminal. He is a wanted…

ISABELLA
-please, where can i pee? I am pressed…too much water.

Amina forces a smile and gesticulates towards one of the inner rooms of the restaurant that has a door. Isabella hastily leaves for the restroom.

-EXT. CAFETERIA/INT. JAKO’S CAR- DAY
A revolver emerges from Jako's jacket and lies beside him. He inserts the car key into its hole and starts the engine but it does not fully ignite. He tries again…

EXT- CAFETERIA/JAKO’S CAR- DAY

SFX- A DEAFENING SOUND!
A BOMB PLANTED INSIDE THE CAR DETONATES, SENDING HUGE SHOCK WAVES THAT DESTROYS WITHIN A LARGE RADIUS, INCLUDING PART OF THE RESTAURANT. THE CAR IS BLOWN INTO PIECES.

FADE BLACK
SFX- SCREAMS OF PEOPLE OVER FADE BLACK

FADE IN:

We see thick smoke everywhere and some parts of unidentifiable materials burning.
SFX- THE SIREN OF THE POLICEMEN FROM A CLOSE DISTANCE. IT BECOMES LOUDER AND LOUDER.

We see the ‘young man and his fair-complexioned companion’ lying on the ground with signs of first degree burning and deep lacerations on their bodies. They are dead.
Camera PANS to Amina as she GASPS for breath while lying on the floor with severe injuries.

SFX- THE SIREN STOPS.

We have a glimpse of the carnage. The wall clock is still ticking. Officer Austin walks into frame, to meet Amina where she lies.

OFFICER AUSTIN
Oh my God. What happened here?

AMINA (close to tears and holds him tightly)
I…I need water. You-you…you are coming to…to…

OFFICER AUSTIN
-calm down. We have called for an ambulance.

AMINA (CONT’D)
---to arrest a crimi-nal and you are ‘shouting’ wh-while coming.

OFFICER AUSTIN
You are Amina, right?

CUT TO:

INT. POSH CAR- DAY
Isabella is on a call. She WEARS dark shades.

ISABELLA
I told you he isn’t…or rather…wasn’t beyond my capability.

OFFICER AUSTIN’S VOICE (FROM THE OTHER END)
You really surprised me. And boss is madly happy. No loose ends.

ISABELLA
Yeah. You all owe me one now.
(Beat)
Was the girl at the counter alive when you got there? The Amina girl or what did you call her name…

OFFICER AUSTIN (O.C)
Oh…she has been taken to the hospital but I doubt…you know…the injuries were really bad.

ISABELLA
Whatever. She is our story.

INT. POORLY LIT ROOM- DAY

OFFICER AUSTIN
Definitely.

EXT. POLICE STATION- DUSK DISSOLVES TO NIGHT.

INT. BUNGALOW/SITTING ROOM- NIGHT
A MAN (51), his wife and two children (12 &16) are eating their dinner while the ’ARTV news’ is being watched on the TV. We see their wall clock ticking. It's 8pm sharp.

MAN (In Yoruba)
Funmi is yet to be back by this time?

WIFE (In Yoruba)
She should be on her way already.

A CLOSE SHOT OF THE TV SCREEN

NEWSCASTER
A shocking explosion at Orija restaurant today in Arije has thrown the inhabitants of the neighbourhood into palpable fear and pandemonium.

The man's wife reacts to the breaking news.

NEWSCASTER (CONT’D)
It was later confirmed to be a bomb by the police after they received a hoax call that the wanted man, Jako, was at the restaurant. There was no casualty except the female suicide bomber whose name is Amina. She died on the way to the hospital. Her boss, a socialite who owns the restaurant speaks with ARTV…

CUT TO:
-STILL ON TV SCREEN (EXT. ARIJE NEIGHBOURHOOD IN BG- DUSK)-
Mrs Orijajoogun, dressed in an evening gown and huge amount of makeup, SPEAKS to a microphone held to her mouth by a news reporter.

MRS ORIJAJOOGUN
I am still in shock that the useless girl I took in to help me at my restaurant is working for Boko haram. She came from the north not too long ago. This morning, she was just behaving…you know…acting somehow like she was not comfortable. She called me, I answered her, and she then said ‘nothing’. I asked her what was wrong but she kept quiet like ‘musu’. I left for the birthday of my friend’s cousin, not knowing Amina had evil plans.
(Voice cracks)
I didn’t even know that will be the last time I will see my restaurant. All I have worked for…all my life! All my savings, all my… (Pauses), this is a very sensitive issue. Big news stations and national media houses should please and please, look into this matter, and I am always willing to give them any necessary informa-

CUTS BACK TO THE NEWSCASTER:

NEWSCASTER
(Beat)
The DPO of Division A has promised to get to the root of this brouhaha. He urges Nigerians to be more security-conscious. Boko haram is yet to officially claim responsibility for this bombing.

Camera PANS to the family picture hung on the wall. We see the man, his wife, the two children seated, and the fair-complexioned lady (Funmi) that died in the explosion.

FADE OUT

Good write up drama.the drama will fits well in kano and kaduna locations.am very happy for your including of ARTV station in the play which may be seems as Abubakar Rimi Television@Kano.Pls Oups!if it you are going to produce movie with the play,i would voluntarly like to play suportive roles in it .God bless you.

proudly made in Naija, more greeze to the OP elbow

Very nice.... I'll arrange to this to be after at my school when we resume for the session... Kudos

Sholay2011!!!Awesome!!! It can only get better...... U wan turn to nollywood small oooo.... The time frame between dropping her call and when Isabella came in? Also, when officer Austin reported to the DPO? Though, I enjoyed the story. Keep it up bro

nice.

Beautiful piece sholay2011! I love the suspense and unpredictability. I wish I could write in script lingo like u tho...didn't quite get wat (O.C) and (O.S) meant

magneto:
Beautiful piece sholay2011! I love the suspense and unpredictability. I wish I could write in script lingo like u tho...didn't quite get wat (O.C) and (O.S) meant

Thanks.

O.C - Off Camera

O.S- Off screen

sholay2011:
Thanks.
O.C - Off Camera
O.S- Off screen

Ok, tanx man. Keep up d good work!

julimax:
Pls How do the mods here chose threads for front page? I've created threads here of my work just like this OP has done but i never get the privilege. Abi them dey look face ni?abi na cos I no add lalasticlala? Well that's the thread below

https://www.nairaland.com/2703512/obika-2-funny-animated-video-nairalander https://www.nairaland.com/2532178/obika-funny-animation-video-nairalander

wow... nice animations you've got there...
do try tagging the Mods to your threads ..
keep up the good work.

Thumb up 4 u bro. Following

Kudos to you Sir.
the BH twist is the most interesting part of it, but am yet to understand
how the bomb got there,
and does that mean isabella is also working for jako?
did jako escape at last?.
thanks.

Beautiful script. I totally loved it!

Okay can I talk?










Wetin I wan talk be say I go follow dz tori till d end.

See am. Na why Nollyw0od n0 go grow be this. How pesn go write script title am "ACTI0N FILM"

Very nice write up
I really need someone like you to interpret my drama series into quality TV series
Any contact?

sholay2011:
Thank you very much.

love the storyline and the theme and all but the title. You on facebook?

Nice Exposition.

sholay2011:
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Mr dullish and idris.carry on

Bro you may have Gold in your hands.. I like it. I think you should get in touch with the award winning producer of the short Alpha Mom - http://9flix.com/watch/4364 You too could bring this to life.

All the best

vinderbilt:
Bro you may have Gold in your hands.. I like it. I think you should get in touch with the award winning producer of the short Alpha Mom - http://9flix.com/watch/4364 You too could bring this to life.

All the best

Aww...thanks very much. I will check the link you provided.

Just checked out the thread to see if it was as predictable as I thought it would be.

in other words, long or short build up, then character dies, the end.

sort of jurassoid.

itstpia8:
Just checked out the thread to see if it was as predictable as I thought it would be.

in other words, long or short build up, then character dies, the end.

sort of jurassoid.

It's not 'that' predictable. Please, read and enjoy.

Nice script sholay I anxiously read from beginning to end. Something really entertaining and constructive on nairaland than ethnic bigots offending our sensibilities

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Cheei bros, I finally got around to reading this. Excellent bro. You've got mad skillz mehn!
I was able to easily create mental imagery of the scenes while reading every line, which is a mark of your astute writing. Nice one.

You should consider turning some of these your works into actual films. You have great talent.

thesoj:
Cheei bros, I finally got around to reading this. Excellent bro. You've got mad skillz mehn!
I was able to easily create mental imagery of the scenes while reading every line, which is a mark of your astute writing. Nice one.

You should consider turning some of these your works into actual films. You have great talent.

I am flattered sir...thanks very much. Advice noted.

As usual, very very nice one from Sholay .

BTW, Sholay....just weldone!!!

speedyboi:
As usual, very very nice one from Sholay .

BTW, Sholay....just weldone!!!

You've risen again from the dead uhn?