Life - Poems For Review - Nairaland
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| Life by HappyPagan(op): 9:04am On Feb 28, 2019 |
Time files past Slowly, sometimes Once upon a time I was a child Time flows onward Quickly, no time Pulling forward Turning new to old Time is endless You shall drink, but a cup And you'll be gone Leaving the cup for another Drink to your fill, do what you will, You are here for a second, You may not have a second. |
| Re: Life by Illuminatus(m): 9:47am On Feb 28, 2019 |
The poem has an interesting idea. The execution is okay. However, the third stanza is too off and illogical. Keep writing, keep thinking. Improve. You already have the flair. |
| Re: Life by HappyPagan(op): 10:21am On Feb 28, 2019 |
Illuminatus:Thanks.  |
| Re: Life by budaatum: 11:53am On Feb 28, 2019 |
Poem is perfect as is. It's for us readers to make of it what we will. |
| Re: Life by masterpiecer(m): 1:39pm On Feb 28, 2019 |
Nice piece. Many have drunk to their fill Have allowed what they feel To do what they will Yet they are unfulfill... What a paradox. |
| Re: Life by devlishGINGER(m): 10:20am On Mar 06, 2019 |
Illuminatus:the third stanza reflects pun and paradox or chiasmus. That's the touch of genius |