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I Was Baptize... by joseph1832(m): 8:30am On Jan 24, 2016

I was baptize with your sweet love
It falls like rain from the sky above
Showering me with warmth and care
Whispering secrets we both share
Say' its sweet I shouldn't disapprove

Its intent, and shouldn't remove-
Its content, 'wear it like a glove,
Let it 'brace me, so it can flare...
I was baptize...

Time and space can not hold your love,
'Cause its pure like the dove above,
Which flies and glows pu'ty that flare,
So much happiness it is rare,
To see a love so pure it prove,
I was baptize.

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Re: I Was Baptize... by joseph1832(m): 8:30am On Jan 24, 2016

ANALYSIS OF THE POEM:

PLOT: The poet personae in this poem is describing how the love of the one he loves makes him feel. He spoke about being baptize by love that falls like rain which simply mean love that touches every part of him and makes him whole.

He stresses how the love speaks to him and encourages him, telling him to wear it like a glove, which mean he should never let go of the one he loves and keep her close to his heart, saying that neither time nor space can hold love because a love that is pure glows and it radiates happiness for everyone to see.

The poet personae also acknowledge the fact that a love like the one he is baptize with is rare and few people experience it.

STRUCTURE OF THE POEM: The poem is a 15 line poem divided into 3 stanzas written in a quintet, a quatrain and a sextet with 8 syllable per line except for the refrain. The poem has a rhyme scheme of AABBA, AABR, AABBAR.

This type of poem is the French poem call the Rondeau, the R in the rhyme scheme stand for Refrain, which is located in lines 9 and 15 in stanza 2 and 3 in the poem. The refrain is normally associated with the Rondeau type of poem.

POETIC DEVICES:

Metaphor: Used in line 1 in the poem.

Simile: Used in lines 2, 7 and 11 in the poem.

Emjambment: This is used in the 1st stanza in the poem.

End-Stopped Line: This is used in the 2nd and 3rd stanza in the poem.

Elision: Used in lines 5, 6, 7, 8, 11 and 12. Words like saying, should not, and, embrace, because and purity were replaced with an apostrophe to conserve the syllable structure of the poem.

Zoomorphism: Used in line 12 in the poem.

Personification: Used in lines 3, 4 and 8 in the poem.

Apostrophe: Used in line 1 and line 10 in the poem. The word 'love' as used in the poem.

Refrain: Used in lines 1, 9 and 15.

THEME:

LOVE.

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Re: I Was Baptize... by Laveda(f): 8:33am On Jan 24, 2016

joseph1832:

Recently, its been about love Mr.Joe..
Seems all is well

Re: I Was Baptize... by merit12(f): 8:47am On Jan 24, 2016

I enjoy reading your poem jojo

Keep it up...and keep writting I will keep reading as much as i can

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Re: I Was Baptize... by joseph1832(m): 10:43am On Jan 24, 2016

Laveda:

Recently, its been about love Mr.Joe..
Seems all is well

LOL. Well, all I can say is I'm just in a loving mood that's all there is to it.

Thanks for noticing... grin

Re: I Was Baptize... by joseph1832(m): 10:47am On Jan 24, 2016

merit12:
I enjoy reading your poem jojo

Keep it up...and keep writting I will keep reading as much as i can

Jojo? Like seriously, Jojo? Thanks.

Re: I Was Baptize... by Laveda(f): 11:14am On Jan 24, 2016

joseph1832:
LOL. Well, all I can say is I'm just in a loving mood that's all there is to it.

Thanks for noticing...

Oh well...hope it continues like this till forever

You're welcome

Re: I Was Baptize... by joseph1832(m): 11:37am On Jan 24, 2016

Laveda:
Oh well...hope it continues like this till forever
You're welcome

Nothing last forever. grin

Re: I Was Baptize... by Laveda(f): 11:40am On Jan 24, 2016

joseph1832:
Nothing last forever.

this one can last forever

Re: I Was Baptize... by joseph1832(m): 11:43am On Jan 24, 2016

Laveda:
this one can last forever

Thanks for your optimism, its greatly appreciated.

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Re: I Was Baptize... by dollyjoy(f): 12:41pm On Jan 24, 2016

Aaaaaaaawww

Re: I Was Baptize... by Laveda(f): 12:49pm On Jan 24, 2016

dollyjoy:
Aaaaaaaawww

This one you're " awwwing"
Are you the one ?

Re: I Was Baptize... by dollyjoy(f): 12:51pm On Jan 24, 2016

Laveda:
This one you're " awwwing" Are you the one ?

lollll

i dnt even know him.

Btw,what makes you think so? cheesy

Re: I Was Baptize... by Laveda(f): 12:52pm On Jan 24, 2016

dollyjoy:
lollll

i dnt even know him.

Btw,what makes you think so?

Nothing is impossible

Re: I Was Baptize... by dollyjoy(f): 12:54pm On Jan 24, 2016

Laveda:

Nothing is impossible

lolll you are right but i am not the one wink

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Re: I Was Baptize... by texanomaly(f): 5:05pm On Feb 24, 2016

Nice job. There are a few tense mistakes, but they don't take away from the meaning behind the poem

Re: I Was Baptize... by joseph1832(m): 5:25pm On Feb 24, 2016

texanomaly:
Nice job. There are a few tense mistakes, but they don't take away from the meaning behind the poem

Oh please do point it out so I can correct it. That's why we learn everyday.

Re: I Was Baptize... by texanomaly(f): 6:21pm On Feb 24, 2016

joseph1832:
Oh please do point it out so I can correct it. That's why we learn everyday.

joseph1832:

I was baptize[d] with your sweet love
It falls like rain from the sky above
Showering me with warmth and care
Whispering secrets we both share
Say' it's sweet I shouldn't disapprove

It's intent, and shouldn't remove-
It's content, 'wear it like a glove,
Let it 'brace me, so it can flare...
I was baptize[d]...

Time and space can not hold your love,
'Cause it's pure like the dove above,
Which flies and glow[s] pu'ty that flare,
So much happiness it is rare,
To see a love so pure it prove,
I was baptize.

I'm always a bit reticent when it comes to critiquing poems on NL because I'm never sure if what I think is a mistake is simply "lost in translation"

Not sure what these are:
'Wear
'Brace
pu'ty

I understand 'cause- the apostrophe is taking the place of "be".

Re: I Was Baptize... by joseph1832(m): 6:30pm On Feb 24, 2016

texanomaly:

I'm always a bit reticent when it comes to critiquing poems on NL because I'm never sure if what I think is a mistake is simply "lost in translation"

Not sure what these are:
'Wear
'Brace
pu'ty

I understand 'cause- the apostrophe is taking the place of "be".

Its a poetic device call Elision. You can look it up and I believe you'll understand. Its in the analysis of the poem.

Lemme quickly correct 'glows'. Lol. Thank for your time.

Re: I Was Baptize... by texanomaly(f): 6:52pm On Feb 24, 2016

joseph1832:
Its a poetic device call Elision. You can look it up and I believe you'll understand. Its in the analysis of the poem.

Lemme quickly correct 'glows'. Lol. Thank for your time.

I understand what it is. I just don't get it here. What is the apostrophe taking the place of.

Re: I Was Baptize... by texanomaly(f): 7:16pm On Feb 24, 2016

joseph1832:
Its a poetic device call Elision. You can look it up and I believe you'll understand. Its in the analysis of the poem.

Lemme quickly correct 'glows'. Lol. Thank for your time.

What about baptized?

Re: I Was Baptize... by joseph1832(m): 9:06pm On Feb 24, 2016

texanomaly:

What about baptized?

Sorry I forgot about it, will edit it now. Thanks once again.

texanomaly:

I understand what it is. I just don't get it here. What is the apostrophe taking the place of.

Pu'ty = Pu'ri'ty
'Brace ='Em'brace
'Wear = 'And' wear

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