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If only i could mean to u
A little more than i already do
If only one more thing i do
Could make you smile or impress you
If only by a word or two
I could show you how you don't make me blue
If only i could always touch
Your lovely skin i love so much
Or even brace myself and kiss
Your lovely lips; oh! such a bliss
Or even sit by you and stare
Into your lovely face
Cos your eyes i can't dare
If only i could make you see
How very much you mean to me
If only i could make us be
One soul,one spirit,don't you agree?
If only you'ld allow
To love you forever will be my VOW.

It's beautiful. I love it.

thanks dear

very beautiful poem. you're a bundle of talent, believe it or not

Hi studdys,

                I really so much love the poem u display, i was tough when i read it

                Go Grl,  hw i hope u really mean it,  Do u?

Beautiful idea, not a bad effort. . . . put out as simply as possible!

Contextually, some of the lines are repititions even though they look and sound pretty much different. . . you didn't quite sign-out with as much flourish as the start of the poem would'a demanded, sort'a took a little shine o'utta the piece. . .
at some points u attempted to rhyme but never followed thru; initially, you started with a pattern and mid-way deviated and then continued with it at the end. . . makes it all a little disjointed!

my guess is, you just got the idea; a li'l fleeting tho't thru' your mind and you penned it all down str8 up using the first set of words readily available to you at the time. . . . next time, you just take your time - there's no rush! read and re-read thru', modify the write; change words, changes sentences and stuff till it takes up a much better form!

first-time writes don't often come out as finished work, they have to be constantly refined till you feel in your heart, that you've attained the optimum!