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Bankz007:
I must appreciate your efforts, d story dey gluey.....


But boss, we need constant update.
Pick a day that u will be dropping two update......



It not easy but try for us.....

On the plus side, if u can be dropping two update each for two days in a week. U dey boost your self writing skill.

God bless You immensely... Thank you so much for the encouragement... I sincerely appreciate it.

As per your idea on the updates..I will put that into practice...My current Job throws me out very early in the morning and returns me most times..by 10-11 pm... I always write at night, mostly tired... And in other not to rush the story and make a mess of it. I try to take my time.

However..without giving out any spoilers... The first phase of the story is coming to an end in the next chapter... A sequel will follow suit after a while..that is where the actual story begins.... Though I have not yet decided on whether to drop the sequel on this thread or create a new one... Whichever one it will be...

Just be rest assured of constant updates once the sequel debuts...

For the last update on this first part..Let's keep our fingers crossed on Saturday night..or Sunday morning!! Thank you once again!.

Update alert...a new update just dropped.. Thank you all for the patience..


Kindly drop your feedback pls..it will be highly appreciated!!

TORN12



I moved in a locomotive motion to the wall adjacent to Maryann and laid my back.. My head felt dizzy... I was still conscious but I felt numb all through... It seemed I had become immune to the pain..or it had become extremely excessive, so much so, I became overwhelmed..from where I sat I could see everyone in the room... Abuchi was still standing but this time, he was staring at me in pity..his tears were so much it left wet patches on his shirt.. he was visibly in an emotional state I had never seen him in before... Jasper was sitting..dabbing his bruises with the towel in his hands... A bit less concerned about what just happened but I noticed he steals side glances at me... Maryann was still crying... But looking very out of strength as blood dripped out from her nose...and then Kachi!!.

...hmmm...Kachi,..the one that stole my joy...The one who dug a deep vacuum in my life and that of my family.. The one I swore will never see anything good as I wept over the lifeless body of my father on his burial... The one who made life painful to live for my poor mother.
Hmmm..Kachi was the devil I prayed will never see tomorrow??.. and all this while I had not just been dining with him...but living with him as well ...!! For years I had looked for someone or something to unleash the pain I had buried inside...and right then I sat in front of the very person that invented my pain and all I felt was numb??... I wasn't all over his face with scratches and bites??.... I wasn't yelling and screaming at the very demon I had sought for??... A lot was going through my head but my spirit animal was obviously tired of it all.. I started feeling it wasn't all worth it. ..Life...the pain...the trauma...it was all too much for me to bear... I needed solace..a place devoid of pain...devoid of misery..a place I won't feel that overwhelmed.
I tried to move...but my legs failed me...I felt like a cripple.. Somehow few of my sense organs seemed to had vanished...I couldn't feel, perceive or taste my saliva....I could still see but I was certainly not interpreting my visuals properly.. Cause all along Kachi had been kneeling in front of me..speaking in inaudible words..or maybe the words were audible but I wasn't listening.. Or I had probably lost my sense of hearing too!!. I forced myself so much to pull out.. I needed to be sure I was not under some sort of witchcraft...but somehow a part of me felt good in that place...it felt so good to be shut out of it all..not to feel...hear...perceive...or even see..I felt it was just better to be out..to be Dead!!...

Dead??!! I muttered or so I thought.

..Cause everyone turned around to stare at me...even Jasper had become visibly concerned...I wondered how I managed to interpret his expression..but still couldn't hear all Kachi had been saying... Kachi tried to hold my feet as he sobbed and I involuntarily moved them away...that was the only movement I had made for about the past 20 minutes.. I wasn't dead after all... But I still wasn't sure why I was not!... Almost at the same time, I perceived my cologne all around me... It always comes with a strong effect... Like an incense... So intense like Abuchi's stare directly at my face...he too was now kneeling in front of me...looking at me funny... I laughed..I laughed so hard... Was I now a king all of them were paying homage to??... I thought, and then laughed more silently .. Or maybe it wasn't that silent cause I couldn't place why Jasper got startled as I was laughing.

Then they became movements in the room.. In and out of the bathroom...I had lost my vision again.. I couldn't pick out who was moving about.. So I threw my face away to the side when I felt a gentle pat on the shoulder..and there was my mother.!!
...she was smiling at me..but she had tears...my mum never sheds tears in front of my siblings and me..never! ..not even at our father's burial... I remembered the day of the burial... How I stood by her as the eldest child.. A very lean and fragile Secondary school student... My father had been the only one who understood me..The person that first noticed my different kind of lifestyle.. He noticed how I fancy colorful things..how I always enjoy my space and peace...and how I hardly talk to people nor make friends, boys, and girls inclusive.. I am not the typical effeminate that throws hands and sways hips while walking..but I knew I was different right from my early days in primary school... I had zero interest in most masculine activities.. Both..soccer..race...or any stressful sports..I hated those big masculine wears and preferred easy tight-fitting T-shirts and Denim trousers..I picked special interest in cooking and braiding of hair..I was easy prey for bullies in our area because they all figured out I lack the necessary masculine strength to fight back...that was where my father comes in!.

Right mum?? I asked her...but she didn't say anything..she was still smiling with tears... She seemed so happy to see me like it was the first time we were seeing again after the burial.

The burial?? I muttered again.. Not sure if it was a mutter..
And then I sighed as well...very heavily... I equally noticed how movements halted a bit in the room but I wasn't interested to turn and find out what was happening..I loved the peace and quietness...at that point, I could care less if the last trumpet had sounded and everyone had gone to heaven...or if the whole military personnel in Nigeria had invaded the room and whisked everyone out... That won't suffice for the hole in my heart I wanted to be fixed so badly.. Which was the absence of the very first and only person in my family I told I liked boys...

"I know" ... that was what my father said to me on that very day..smiling as we walked on the aisle of St Gregory's secondary school's admin block after I got registered.

"Why do you think I disagreed with your mum about letting you stay in the dormitory??" he added...and then grabbed my hand as we both went to an ice cream stand adjacent to the school's canteen.. He bought me my favorite flavor..vanilla.. without me even telling him..he had studied me so well, more than I knew..more than my mother will ever know about me.

"You see kamsiyochukwu" ..he started again as we sat on a brick bench at the canteen park.

..."You are my first child...and the best blessing to have ever happened to me..your birth brought so many breakthroughs in my business...and for long I had seen the strength I lacked in you" ..he said.
For a moment, I pondered about what strength he was talking about ...my dad had this intimidating physique with a very daunting height..he gyms a lot too so his carved abs and big hands and chest are not surprising.. His build was one of the main reasons bullies stayed clear of me both in school and in our neighborhood... So it was hard for me to understand what other strength he lacked that I gave him.

...." I feared failure..I feared responsibilities... And somehow they both wrapped around me in an embrace even after I married your mother..." My dad was saying...I couldn't pick where he started from so I kept quiet to listen further.

..." Your birth was the scratch on the surface...I stared at you every minute before leaving for the shop and it gave me strength... And then the opportunities started coming...the fears gone..and you my son, Kamsi..you started growing!!"..he stopped..turned to look at me...he had the sexiest eyes in the world..he was unarguably a very handsome man..he drew me closer to him as some senior students walked past us and gave them quite a stare ... I found it funny...I told him the students weren't going to bully me...

"They won't even dare!!" He said..smiling at me again as he still held me under his huge arms...

"Kamsi" he called..

yes sir ... I answered...and he scoffed...

"You always call me that....why no try 'Daddy' this time...??.." He said, looking at me like he was pleading...

'Ok daddy'... I replied..it sounded odd to me cause all my life I had always replied to him with 'sir' ..not sure if it was out of respect or because I feared his stature as well...

"Knowing you is a blessing to anyone,.. I know you didn't choose to be different...to like....BOYS". He said that with a bit of stalling.. I knew it sounded odd to him too just as it sounded odd to me calling him 'daddy'.
...."I've watched you grow and I must say you have lived in a shell for far too long, so I think it's time for you to breathe..." He paused again...sipped more of his icecream
and continued.

"This is now a new chapter of your life which is why I don't want you to stay in the dormitory..I wouldn't want you to be intimidated or molested. I want you to live more now on your terms..be more expressive...be more true to yourself...do the things that make you happy... Remember I will always be here for you for anything kamsi" he grabbed my hand... "I am proud to be your father Kamsiyochukwu Desmond Ogbonna! ..and I want you to walk with your shoulders high and live your life to the fullest knowing you have a proud father behind you" he concluded.

... I wasn't sure how I felt after that heartwarming statement...I felt it was a dream..I knew my father loved me but I still dreaded him for no obvious reason other than his physique...telling him I liked boys earlier was done playfully and I wasn't sure what got into me when I said that..but then he wasn't mad...rather he said he knew all along and he is proud to be my father!!...

How?? I said..it was to myself..but it sounded out loud my dad mistook it as a question...

"How I got to know you like boys??" He said.. smiling as if he just read my mind...

"Well,.. let's just say not every boy uses a rainbow handkerchief with half their wardrobe in pink wears" he added with a chuckle as he playfully dragged me up to leave.
......It sounded funny to me then how my favorite color pink, had anything to do with his explanation...more confusing was the rainbow handkerchief...I remembered how I took fancy to it in the market and made my Dad buy it for me even when I knew zilch about what the rainbow color signifies.... I only just loved how colorful it was.

Dad...I called him ..as we made our way for the gigantic dual school gate.

"Yes ...My son" he answered..and it somehow felt weird him calling me his son..he was so young we could pass as siblings.

Do you think I should tell mum?? I asked him...and he stopped...stared at me as if on a thought...and then smiled...grabbing my young shoulder..

"I think we should make this one our little secret for now...until we are sure she won't come for our heads," he said laughing...and I laughed along too..very hard..but at the same time wondering why it had to be easier with my dad...why it takes extra strength to communicate with my mum...she was either too busy or too cranky to notice I existed talk more of having a serious conversation with me... I laughed again...stirred myself, and heaved deeply...

I wonder if Dad still looks out for me Mom..?? I asked her...

....and then discovered she was no more there....I was still in the accursed guest room... With those terrible individuals!!... I made a frantic effort to move...and succeded with ease...I could turn...feel and see clearer...more importantly..I could hear loud and clear... The ceiling fan was still swirling with its cranky sounds...the Air conditioner was still on..I looked around gently and noticed Maryann was gone..Nedu was still on the floor but neatly wrapped with a blanket...the whole room looked neat like nothing happened ..at a point I almost thought everyone had vanished and I had been left alone.
Everything looked so surreal like it was a trance...l laughed briefly again... Not sure if it was silent or loud... So they all left me??.. I muttered audibly and turned my head slowly to meet the figures of Abuchi..Kachi...and Jasper on the bed... They were all staring at me...like they are probably meeting me for the first time... Or they intend killing me like they killed my father.??.. I murmured
....The door of the room opened and closed almost at the same time... I was less concerned about who or what was coming in..rather I became more focused on Kachi...the pretty little demon that ended the life of my guardian angel...the only person I truly trusted..the first person to ever make me feel proud of my true self!...my bodyguard..my strength..my FATHER!!...
...I stared at Kachi deeper...not sure if my gaze was at him or the gun close to the desk beside Jasper...it was now or never...I needed to make a move... I thought.!!

"How far??".. Jasper was asking Letitia...apparently she was the one that entered the room.

"So far..the nurse is doing her best..I only hope she makes it....meanwhile I got the name and address for him from the nurse..also with a number you can call to book an appointment" ...Letitia said giving Jasper a piece of paper which he subsequently handed over to Abuchi.

"I have to go now....you guys need to hurry up..there is no time..." She said still staring only at Jasper..

"Ok baby" Jasper replied quietly...looking at Letitia in a way I found funny... Just as funny as him calling her 'baby'.

"What's the name of the hospital??" Kachi asked no one in particular ...he has had his head on his two palms all the while I was staring at him with utter disdain..he slightly raised his face after he asked the question..he looked visibly exhausted....eyes were swollen as if they got punched...somehow I created a mental feeling of my Dad beating the daylight out of Kachi for killing him..the thought made me laugh...a laugh from a place of misery...a place that had dried my tears and made my mouth salty...A place I wanted them all to feel! .... I looked at them again...unaware when Letitia left the room... But just in time to hear Abuchi say...



"Juhel Neuro-Psychiatric Hospital !!"





#tobecontinued!!

MrOreo2012:
I had a feeling it was going to be Kachi, but I hoped I was wrong�
What a day DE's having....

DE certainly didnt sign up for this... I feel for him honestly...



Pls kindly check back this evening or tomorrow morning for a new update!.

OloriSheedah:
O.m.g, I was hoping and praying it was not kachi, my heart bleeds for Desmond. Uncle orangebasket, thumbs up but the suspense is frigging much

Desmond certainly didnt bargain for this.. I feel so sorry for him ...

As per the suspense... I'ld say i am quite flattered ... But then we are here for it right?!

Bankz007:
Cock craws.....
Mr Bankz is seen walking around while speaking out loud, I can't believe this boy is making me wait, does he knows who I am....
A red cap Chief,
The medium to the gods
The man who sold Nigeria....


I will not talk......

..Boss abeg o...


... I have dropped an update...pls no vex again

New update alert!!!...

Thank you guys for your patience...

It has not been easy but we move regardless!!..

Pls kindly drop feedbacks... Thank you all

TORN 11




... Jasper's statement surely waved me left and right but only mentally...but then the force and swiftness of Abuchi's punch on Jasper's face instantly moved me out of my standing position as I luckily escaped being brushed on the nose by his fist!.

" I told you to watch your mouth!! " Abuchi roared as he pounced on Jasper on the floor throwing more punches on his face like a pugilist.

...I was too dazed about Jasper's utterance to even bother about his face-off with Abuchi.. That was a very sensitive topic and the most painful experience of my life.. The part of me I tried so hard to heal from.. The only thing Kachi didn't know about me... Even Maryann knew my Dad was dead but not how it happened. The only person that knew that story so well in that room was Abuchi... And now Jasper?? I questioned myself.
....The least favorite human being I had come across in life.. Knew about the most painful loss of my life ??.. How??.. I kept on questioning myself.. They have to be a connection.. A way he got to know that my father was murdered...and then suddenly as if I didn't interpret Jasper's statement properly earlier before..it hit my brain again..this time more clearer!!
Could jasper have an idea of who killed my father or he was making an assertion to mock me??.. I thought..and then breathed in deeply, in automatic readiness. Whichever one it was...I became determined to find out. I looked up, fully conscious at that point, and found Kachi successfully separating the two men... Abuchi had really dealt Jasper a bad one cause the latter was bleeding all over his nose..and it seemed the upper part of his left eye was swollen.... Abuchi on his part had a very big ruffle on his shirt and bloodstains all over it...with a very tiny cut on his lower lips that was almost not visible asides from the trinket of blood on it.

Kachi went to the bathroom and brought a towel and a half-filled bucket of water and gave it to Jasper to clean up... I stared at all of them one after the other...from jasper to Abuchi and then to Kachi... My eye met with Kachi's as he unbounded Maryann....he had tears in them... I stared at Maryann and she shamefully moved her eyes away..her face made me remember Nedu's body... I stared at it again.. On the floor... Probably cold.. and then my stare went back to Jasper immediately.. This time it was a different stare..it had flames in them!!.. I knew I hated him...and the events of that day had heightened my anger and disgust for him.. I shifted myself and faced him directly at that point..he was still cleaning his bloody face and oblivious i was staring...

My father, who told you he was killed??.... I found myself asking... It was a question..directly at Jasper...but with the way my voice sounded..it seemed i was demanding an answer from someone else ....
...Jasper stared at me very angrily and then shifted his stares towards Abuchi and back to me..and continued his cleaning without much as saying anything...
.. I stood up..turned and looked at Abuchi...and it was certain to me he was the culprit..the guilt was on his face even though he tried so well to clone it with anger.

Do you have something to say to me??... I asked him gently... More like I pleaded, hoping I was wrong and that it was all a misconception.. but deep down I was already set to boiling point...

"Let it go kamsi" Abuchi replied gently.. trying to avoid my eyes.

I trusted you... I made you my confidant..and what do I get in return?? You share the most painful part of my life with a nitwit and he now taunts me with it!!..?? I roared at Abuchi..visibly out of my cool...

I was soaked with tears at this point..but certainly not just because of what Jasper said to me... I have had a very emotionally draining day and that statement from him was almost the breaking point..the point where I thought I couldn't withstand it all anymore..so that was me releasing the whole accumulated emotional stress!

"If you call me one more name again... I swear to God I will blow your fucking brains out.." I heard Jasper threaten me behind..

"Knock it off Jamike!!" Abuchi barked...

..." or what?... " Jasper retorted

"I said knock it off!!" Abuchi roared again making his way towards Jasper for another round!

"Enough!!" Kachi screamed!! ..his voice resonating the whole of the room I feared the wall will crack! .... I turned to stare at him..I hadn't taken much notice of him all this while... He had been cleaning off the bloody bruises on Maryann's wrist... He stood up gently from where Maryann was and turned to face me. His eyes were full of tears... I could also spot the face of Maryann...she looked so frail with some guilt-trip expression on her face... Like someone who had something, she was hiding...

"DE pls... let's go home" Kachi pleaded..visibly tired of the whole drama..
...At that point I couldn't agree more with him..the whole event of the day had been too overwhelming and if there was anything I needed more at that point..it was to go home and rest...but then I surprised myself when I told him...

No.. I am not leaving this place until I get the answers to all my questions..and if anyone leaves...I will get the police involved... I said.
......And a very dense silence followed suit..the sound of my voice and expression was probably so serious everybody knew I was not bluffing... Even Jasper stopped cleaning his face and stared at me.

Let me start with you, Maryann... I continued.. How did your cousin become your boyfriend??...and all this while you failed to tell me... Why?? ... I concluded gently...but even as gentle as my voice was ...it was still thick serious.

Answer me!! ....I shouted this time..startling Maryann who was taking too long to look me in the face..let alone say something.

"Dessy I am sorry..." She began crying... "I didn't mean to lie to you... When Nedu told me he had been assigned a new case on a deadly cultist group in our school.. I didn't think it will get to this..." She stopped to wipe out the mucus dripping out of her nose and then continued.

.."He only told me it involves Kachi after he saw him at the library".... She paused again and looked at the men out of fear..and managed to continue... "He made me promise not to reveal his mission to anyone.. That is why I didn't tell you" she finally rounded up wailing like a bereaved widow..
... I was still in tears at that point but not because of her story..but because I still didn't know how I got myself in all that mess...

So how come you introduced him to me as your cousin and you both are here with his body lifeless on the floor?? I queried her further... obviously unaffected by her tears...

"I am sorry !!" She burst out into more fresh tears....

Your sorry is not what I need right now.. I need answers!!. I barked again..and somehow..everyone in the room seemed to be under an imaginary spell I created..they all kept quiet with their heads bowed as if on a thought..or deep regrets...

"Nedu asked me not to reveal his identity to you... Somehow he had already seen you before he landed the case.. He told me he met you once in a bus on one of his investigations where he disguised as a hawker in the market.. " Maryann came to a pause again..coughing out something that looks a bit dark...I was a bit scared she might be having internal bleeding... But my soft spot was far from reach at that point to care about her health condition..

And?? I pressed her further.. Still looking stoned cold.

"He got your pictures from your Facebook account and forwarded it to me for identification after his superiors told him your department and he discovered it's the same as mine... " She paused again..staring at me and maybe hoping I would say something...but I guessed my expression was all she needed to continue...

...."He was told you are the ally he needs to get strong evidence against Kachi and probably the rest since you are both roommates...and when I told him how close we are..he asked me to maintain the act so as not to give you a clue on his mission" Maryann stopped again to catch her breath.....she seemed to be having issues with breathing..
....I scoffed.. Figuring out she already knew Kachi and I were roommates before the incident at the library..yet she acted surprised.. I wondered if there was any truth to all what she had just told me or it was all an act as well..I sighed heavily..stared deep into her eyes...I couldn't make anything out of it.. Somehow I felt the Maryann I knew earlier and the one in front of me are two different persons.. I caught the scent of Nedu's blood again and it reminded me she hadn't answered my main question..

So how come you and Nedu are here with his body lying lifeless on the floor...?? I asked her again with zero interest..somehow I was feeling all she had said were lies..or maybe it was just me having trust issues with her since our trust bond was already broken ... Whichever one it was ...Maryann was saying something ..so I quickly exited my thoughts to catch up with her....

...."and the number called again after you left with your laptop earlier today... telling him how best to get you talking" .. I caught Maryann saying... and before I could make a mental calculation to ask her what number she was talking about and who owns it...she had already continued..

"I kept asking Nedu if he knew who the informant was..but he said No, but that all the information he had gotten from the anonymous source so far had proven to be legit...and so he decided to flow with the plan initiated by the informant.. " She paused and coughed again..it was visible at that point it was blood she was coughing out ...

... "What was the plan" I questioned like I had become a detective myself....still surprised at how cold-hearted I had become not to care about her state of health ..the whole room was still dead silent ....
..Maryann paused for a while ...staring at every one of us in the room..she looked helpless..her tears were beginning to thin out..all of a sudden..she lifted her face and continued..this time with zero expression

..."He told me the plan was to try every means possible to woo you and then play the ultimate scorecard on you..he told me he was meeting you at a guest house today as advised by the informant to work his wits on you..It was 40minutes after he left for the guest house that Letitia called me and asked me to come to her aid about an emergency..which i"

Who is Letitia?? I cut her off out of curiosity....wondering who she was referring to.... She tried to stall with the answer..but seeing how helpless the situation was... She responded

"The receptionist downstairs..." She said almost in a whisper..evidently very scared.

"You mean your lesbian partner??" Jasper retorted from my back...breaking my silence spell.. Even without seeing his face. I already figured how petty it would look...
.... Jasper was sincerely a distasteful person...but he was surely exposing a lot I knew nothing about... Maryann a lesbian?? I muttered!.... I couldn't have guessed!!

....So?? I pressed further...becoming more interested than before...

"I got here oblivious its the same place Nedu was to meet you... and Letitia said she only pranked me to come over because she needed us to have a quick pleasure as she missed me... She led me to this room under the same pretext and this is where I meet Nedu bounded..with Jasper pointing a gun at me with an order not to move..while Leticia helped him bound me too...." She said.. With her tears fully back like it never left.

.... I turned to look at Jasper.....and I met his mischievous smirk. I knew he probably was the informant..or he paid someone to do the job.. But the ultimate question remained..why?? Was it because he was affected by the case or he was following someone's orders??... How did Abuchi get to know all about this and what was the connection between him and Jasper?? A lot of questions streamed down my mind with zero answers to them... .. I stared at Abuchi.. He had one of his hands rested on his bent head...his eyes shut...regrets written all over his face..Kachi on his part mopped at me... his eyes still very teary, it made me wonder if his eye bags were full of water as his eyes never looked dry since he stepped into the room..something wasn't just adding up to me...was this all to get rid of Nedu or there was something else.. I remembered a part of Maryann's testimony and turned again to face her...

What was the ultimate scorecard??.. I asked.. More puzzled than angry...

".. Erm... He...he..said that that..." Her stutter gave me the validation I needed..there was something else!..

Talk to me, Maryann.. I said...surprisingly gentle...

"He said the informant told him something that will make you break and seek revenge..." She paused again...fidgeting at that point out of fear... I equally feared she might collapse...

Which is?? I asked her again..this time squatting close to her...with my palms on her face in a gentle rub... She stared at me pitifully probably seeking assurance... And I nodded affirmatively at her as if I read her mind.

" He ...he ...he said the informant told him who killed your father..." She said in a very audible whisper...
A response that left me mute for seconds... Seconds that drifted to minutes ... I was still squatting, rummaging my mind how I must have done something wrong to deserve such pain in a day..twice that day the peace I felt about my father's death had been pricked... I knew at that instance I had been broken.. Nothing else was going to stop it... I wasn't going to have it anymore.. I resolved to take the last jab .. Not knowing how better off the information I wanted to seek will leave me... I stared at Maryann again..this time feeling sorry for myself for pressing her to that point... I should have left when kachi begged me to... I wondered what it would do to me if I should press further...and then I asked..

Who? I said gently .... Unsure if it was my curiosity beclouding my pain...or me trying to absolve it all and be free..or I was just seeking to take my pain out on whoever it was....

"I did it" ... I heard the voice.. from the one who had made me pull through it all...the one that made my peace seem permanent


"I did it" ... I heard again from KACHI!!!!






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MrOreo2012:
I love this story so much. All the twists and turns, the suspense, the DRAMA!! It has it all. I'm sitting on the edge of my seat, biting my nails in anticipation of the next chapter. Please don't keep us waiting too long.

Thank you @OloriSheedah, for keeping him motivated until I found this thread.

Wow wow!!... Words cant explain my gratitude for this feedback...

Pls check back tomorrow morning for an update!! It promises to be worth the wait. .

I wish my schedule will make me drop much faster...but i will keep trying my best... Thank you once more!

Blake755:
Na wah ooo this one nah ynash man story
Meanwhile op u are doing well

lols...


Thank You so much for the feedback...

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Bankz007:
Why in bleeped name are you doing this to me.....

Am glued to this story.... please update fast.....abeg u.....

oh my God!! You don't know what this feedback means to me... Thank you so much...

Pls, an update drops tomorrow morning..

It promises to be worth it...

My schedule is so tight..but I will always do my best..pls..check back tomorrow morning for the update

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TORN 10



"He is still breathing"... A faint voice was saying.. Everywhere was still pitch dark and my head felt so cold like I was in the depth of a sea in the middle of the night... The cold was becoming too much I tried to make some fruitless struggle away from whatever was causing it... I also struggled to figure out where I was and how to get out of there... And why it felt so wet and cold... I managed a conscious effort to open my eye..and all I could see in front of me was water.. Oh, God!... Why am I in an ocean?? I cried inwardly...

...." Kamsi can you hear me??"... A voice was saying... I thought it was my mind playing tricks on me....but then I felt a gentle pat on my shoulder... And it started dawning on me it wasn't just a voice I heard.. I could also perceive a familiar scent and feel someone's touch.. I started rummaging up my mind to place if I had truly gone to glory..I made frantic efforts to stir around again and a bright light shoved into my eyes...I turned away from the light slowly, shut my eyes tight, and then released them gently.... Then it all started coming back to me gradually....
.... I picked the scent again and I consciously knew it was my cologne... And then the water in front of me seemed too small for the size of an ocean.. I started looking at the hands and face of the person staring in my face tiredly.. It seemed vague but it was evident... I knew instantly... That was Abuchi...

" ThankGod you are awake Kamsi.. " he said... "try to sit properly" he added..as he made efforts to bring me up into a chair in the room..away from the small pool of water he poured on my head ...

"What happened?? I asked him still not fully conscious of myself..and then I sighted the blood again..and my eyes went wide open! My memory rushing in with adrenaline like it was on a backup restoration! ... I became fully conscious of myself and turned around the room... Jasper was still sitting in his king-like position on a chair looking keenly at his knife with no expression on his face... I moved my gaze towards Nedu's body still on the floor... With his face in the opposite direction.. I couldn't see what it looked like.. Maryann was still bounded but her mouth had been set free... And then, there was Abuchi.. Whom I didn't know when and how he got there...and most importantly..what he was doing there.

Pls, what is going on ??... I asked...Already shedding hot tears.. I was in my head wondering who I must have offended that decided to curse that particular day for me.. How I got to witness so many traumatizing events in just a day was overwhelming and the day wasn't even over yet...And then there was a dead body..!! I took a glance at Nedu's lifeless body again and my mouth gave way... I screamed!!!
... I screamed so hard I thought my lungs would burn.. At first ...nobody moved or said anything or tried to stop me... They all stared at me calmly as if waiting for me to exhaust my strength.. But then the door of the room made a noise and it was evident someone just pushed it open... Jasper and Abuchi brought out their guns swiftly... I was thrown aback!! Twice a day, I had to see a gun... I started gasping for air... Maryann was just quiet.. Staring at the two men as they both took strategic positions. I believe she was praying that help was coming..just like I was...
..but then again..I thought, what if it was the police..how do I explain being amid two gun-wielding individuals...a dead body..and a confiscated lady... Abuchi took his position right in front of me.. As if he was shielding me from any imminent danger...whilst jasper made a move towards the wall close to the short ally and stooped low beside it waiting for action.. All these happened in flits of seconds but ended almost immediately when Kachi and the receptionist girl surfaced.!!

..."What are you doing here ..??" Onyedikachi.. Abuchi asked.. His voice sounded like that of kachi when he would pester me on why I paid a bill in the house without his consent..
..I used to think about where Kachi got all the money he spends from... I concluded before that he probably was an internet fraudster..but coming to learn Abuchi's is his brother, cleared that part..

" I'll go back to being on watch.. " the reception girl was saying as I left my thoughts... "Pls lock the door and reduce the noise.. The central stereo outside almost didn't subdue the scream I heard earlier" She said to no one in particular.. But was staring at Jasper.. Who Noded and followed her behind to lock the door.

.. Abuchi had moved out from my view and I was able to see Kachi's face properly.. He wasn't as surprised seeing Nedu's dead body like I was but he sure wasn't happy to see me there..He stared at me in a way that suggests helplessness.. A part of me felt like he hated my presence in that very room..and believe me. I hated it more.

.."Why bring him here??". Kachi asked Abuchi.. Obviously referring to me cause he tilted his head towards my direction.

"Abuchi didn't bring him here,..I did!" Jasper echoed from the ally as he returned from locking the door.. "You see, I needed your pet toy to see the true colors of his friends..and what they are capable of." He added with a mischievous smile as he sat....much to my bewilderment and more to Kachi's chagrin! ..

"That's enough Jamike!!" Abuchi roared as he faced Jasper with a stern look! ..

"Mi lordy.. no lélé.. let's get rid of this detective and call it a day then," Jasper said.. Pointing at Nedu and at the same time ducking his head downwards a bit as if he was paying homage..

Detective?? I asked with shock..finally breaking my silence...staring at Jasper to Nedu..and then to Maryann.. I was not sure which one confused me the more..the detective title of Nedu or the "Mi lordy" title that jasper referred to Abuchi with.

"Do you have anything to say to him, girl??" Abuchi asked Maryann quite politely..

.. I turned to face Maryann again...she was shivering at that particular moment and somehow trying to avoid my gaze..I looked back to Abuchi while wondering how he got to know Maryann or whatever she needed to say to me.. I caught Kachi's stares as well.. He wasn't looking at Maryann but at me.. He seemed so unusually quiet and his stares at me made me worried.. Not scared.. I felt he probably was in a problem....

..."We are waiting, darling.. Don't make it too long" Abuchi said again so politely you wouldn't believe it was the same person that pulled out a gun minutes ago.

"Ermm..ehh..errm.. Dessy I am sorry.." Maryann said with tears flowing down her cheeks..

"Pls forgive me," she said again as uncontrollable tears gushed down her face.. She was still avoiding my face..

I was thrown into a confusion frenzy at that moment... How Maryann was caught up in all of this and how Nedu was suddenly a detective.. Few hours before he was just Maryann's cousin that I was drolling over and he was flirting with me as well.. A very nasty thought flashed my mind back to the print of his phallus I saw earlier and how I longed for it.. I almost slapped myself at the thought of that..wondering how relevant it was at that point..with his still body in front of me.

" See ..enough of this melodrama.." Jasper cuts in looking irritated.. "This óbóté here" he continued, pointing at Nedu's body with his gun.. "was a detective..working at the state CID and he is that shema's boyfriend" he concluded..referring to Maryann as "shema"...

... I was stunned!! I looked at Maryann wondering why she had to lie to me about Nedu being her cousin..Why she was all flirty with me even in his presence.. Was it because she didn't want me to figure it out?? But why??.. i thought..and then turned to stare at Nedu.. I still remembered how he was about getting me laid even though I initiated it.. I remembered how he always avoided Maryann noticing he was working his sexual wits on me.. Was it because he didn't want her to know about his other side..?? But then the most ultimate issue there was why we were all in a guest house with Nedu's body lying lifeless on the ground..

No!! .. I said to myself... I needed more explanation..I needed them to make it make sense..Nedu's career shouldn't
Just be the reason he was stabbed..they had to be more to it..

.. I picked up my strength.. The hardest I had mustered that very day.. Stood up and went straight to where jasper sat down.. He was staring at me with his mischievous smile still on.. I stopped at his face and looked at him closely.. I didn't know how I had tolerated his excesses all those times. His sarcastic shades at me.. The evil deeds he had done to many people and gotten away with them.. Somehow I started thinking maybe I shouldn't let him get away with this particular one.. But I thought of everyone else in the room... It could affect us all and that demon of a person Jasper knew that..

Why did you kill him?? I asked him gently.. Staring at him with utter disdain.. The whole room was quiet...the Air conditioner was on but at that point, I was sweating.... The scent of my cologne still dominating the room together with the blood smell ... Jasper still stared at me mischievously..smiling in a way that seemed like fulfillment...

Why did you kill him you animal!! ?? I screamed this time!!

"Animal??"... Jasper reiterated.. This time around with a stern face... Looking me over from head to toe... I wondered why I never noticed that sassy part of him...

" oh, dear princess.." He said...referring to me...
..."if I am an animal.. What will you then call the person that killed your FATHER!!??".





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Wow, I never saw that coming, nice twist. Looks like Jasper is up to no good.

Lols... I am sure Desmond agrees with you



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I was already in a tricycle when I realized I didn't even know where I was headed to.. If Maryann had been kidnapped, definitely she won't be at home, so going to her house was of no use..I thought, trying not to gasp out.
Should I go to the police??.. I asked myself.. But they will ask me details of how it all happened and those details I didn't have because I wasn't present during the incident.. The tricycle was already half gone to Maryann's lodge with just me sitting clueless inside, oblivious of the music blasting from the speaker at the back of the seat.. not knowing if I was still alive myself or lost in thought..

"Robo ske ske..robo ske ske..if no be you then tell me who o....." Nedu was calling again.

It then occurred to me that I hadn't even called him back to ask him how it all happened.. Immediately my phone fell off my hand earlier, I made a stagger and almost hit the wall of the pavement in front of our room, but for the timely intervention of Abuchi who rushed and held me firmly from falling...

"Are you okay Kamsi ??" he asked.. "What happened??" He added in his gentle light voice, looking askance..his breath smelling like burnt paper...

I gazed at him confused about how I could still feel a soft spot for him and why his soft palm clasped around my shoulder as support made me remember Just the way he held me the day I told him how my father died.. Abuchi was so sorry for me as I cried my eyes in pain then.. He gave me his chest to cry on that day as he was patting me on the shoulder gently.. He asked me to release all the grief that it will make me lighter..
As I showed him the picture the police took from the scene of the incident. Where the lifeless body of my father laid on the floor with his head blown off beside the commuter bus he boarded that very day...
Abuchi took my phone... Stared at the picture and held me closer to him... He tried to avoid my gaze and I believed it was due to the fact he didn't want me to see he was hurting...

"Who was that on the phone," Abuchi asked me again softly, reviving me back from memory land. Something about his stare didn't seem worried...

I came back to reality... Picked my phone from the ground and rushed past Abuchi at the same time catching the scent of my perfume on him... I guessed it was because he had Kachi's clothes on... They both have the same build just that Kachi is buffer..
I thought about what Kachi was going through in his mind that had kept him transfixed in that state for all this while.. But I made a mental conclusion that telling him about Nedu's call or Marryann's kidnap was not going to help his situation so I continued pacing out to the major road with no destination in mind...
..I almost lost the last buzz on my phone before I swiped the receive icon sideways and in came Nedu's voice..

."Hello DES," he said.. "Where are you??" He asked almost at the same time..

I am in a tricycle going to the lodge... I answered...

." what lodge"??.Nedu asked... This time with a calmer voice... I noticed the tension in his voice was gone.. "If by lodge you mean mary's lodge..then I suggest you turn back" Nedu added..

Why?? I asked Immediately, becoming frightened.

"The people that took mary might still be around.. I just escaped them by the whiskers ..it seems they are looking for anyone connected to her too.. Pls, I need you to come lets deliberate on how to get the police involved.." Nedu explained..the tensed voice gradually returning..

... I started thinking.. Why will Nedu need me to talk to the police ?? .. But on second thought..I figured he might also be scared like me too and he was barely a day in the school and at such knew no one else to assist him.

Where are you?? I asked Nedu..his end was dead silent for minutes I thought he'd hung up.

"ORANGE BASKET INN" ...he said... "I had to take refuge there to figure out what is going on...ThankGod I had my Atm with me... I wouldn't have known where else to go to.." Nedu added...breathing heavily.

I remembered a few hours ago Nedu was inviting me to the said guest house for a different reason...Now I found myself going to see him for another reason... I began wondering why would anyone want to kidnap Maryann...She is quite a controversial person but not one to attract kidnapping..what if Nedu was using those tactics as a coy to get me to see him in the guest house..?? I asked myself..
Well..if it is.. It was working..I thought..as the tricycle, I boarded stopped me in front of the guest house.....

I stepped down to pay the driver ...and discovered I had no money on me... I wondered what I was thinking rushing off like that without even picking my wallet... I asked the driver to wait while I go get his money inside and he began fuming..asking me why I chartered him if I had no money on me, but later resigned to his fate when he figured cursing me out won't solve the issue..so he opted to wait.
..I dialed Nedu's number as I walked into the guest house.. Noticing how revamped the whole place had been..it was where Maryann had her last birthday party.. It surely looked better than it was during mary's birthday bash...

..."I am in room 12," Nedu said immediately he picked my call... Like he already knew I was in the building...he couldn't even wait for me to respond before he hung up.
...Something about it all didn't seem right to me... But at that very moment..all I was after was to settle the tricycle driver and to confirm if Maryann was okay. .or not...

Hi... I said to the receptionist..

"Hello" .. The razz-looking girl on the desk answered me nonchalantly, clapping her bubble gum with reckless abandon while invested in her phone without as much as a gaze towards me..

Erm...pls I am here to see a friend in room 12..
I said, looking at the distasteful spray color on the receptionist's hair and wondering what message the management was trying to pass by keeping such a person on the front desk to receive customers.. I must have gazed at the receptionist for so long I didn't notice she had been pointing her finger towards the direction of the staircase for me...

"Wait.. Did you say room 12 ??" The receptionist asked immediately retrieving her hands from the previous pointing position while staring at me in a way I didn't understand.

Yes.. I replied.

..She gently pointed at the stairways again this time around with much interest .... I gently walked towards the direction she pointed catching the perplexed expression on her face. ..she stared at me like someone she knew from somewhere or something... I wondered if we had met or she was just confused.
.. I climbed the steps catching a very faint scent I felt was familiar... I was trying to place the scent as I located room 12... The guest house looked even better inside.. The owner had outdone himself..I thought..
I took the bend on the end of the alley on the first floor and finally saw the room number.. .. I picked up the scent again and at that point, it became stronger.. I immediately knew it was the scent of my perfume.. It was a signature cologne only I and Maryann wear...well, Kachi now also started wearing mine... Could it be that Maryann wasn't kidnapped after all or Nedu was wearing her portion of the perfume..?? I thought.
Whatever was going on was definitely not sitting well with me... I quickly took a glance at the door and noticed it was already open... Nedu was surely up to something, I felt it .. A part of me told me to turn and head back home..but that stronger part of me urged me to go inside at least to make sure it was all a prank or something by Nedu..and that Maryann was okay. Also, I needed to get some money from Nedu to settle the tricycle driver.
If Nedu should try any sexual advances towards me. He was sure to meet a brick wall cause I wasn't having it that very moment... I resolved in my mind as I pushed the door open and the signature scent engulfed my nose.

The way the guest house was built.. One must walk a few steps on a short alley before you get to see the full view of the room ... The whole room was dead silent as I entered and that made me more apprehensive... I mustered enough courage and closed the door but made sure not to lock it..I walked towards the open bed area only to first catch sight of Mary ann bounded with her mouth taped..close to the bed...she certainly was kidnapped..but what was she doing there..??
.. I made to scream for help at first but was caught short as I saw a pool of blood dripping from the still body of Nedu lying on the floor... With jasper sitting majestically on a chair a few steps away from Nedu's body cleaning a bloody knife with a paper towel... I didn't know which effect was stronger... The scent of the perfume.. Nedu's body in the pool of blood...Jasper and the bloody knife..or Maryann all sweaty and dazed in her captive state.....All I knew was that then..I was called to glory... The lights were only bright on my face but not in my state of mind .. I was in a place I couldn't recognize.. A place pitch dark.. I was clearly transfixed with my eyes wide open... And in between trying to maintain stability and consciousness...my leg gave in..


I slumped in a FAINT!




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OloriSheedah:
Nedu might be the detective, I feel for Desmond, the guy is going through emotional turmoil. Thumbs up writer

I feel for him too ..lets hope the day gets better for him....


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Serialchiller:
Desmond don enter gbege

... No be small thing